Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, correct grammar (work → walk; have sit → sit; opportunity → opportunities), and avoid repetition. Add one brief reason with linking word. Keep to 1–3 sentences.

예시: Not really. I don't walk much because I work in an office and sit at my desk all day; I also commute by bus, so I have few opportunities to walk during the day.

제안: Use correct tense and subject-verb agreement, and be more specific. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details linked with words like "often" or "usually." Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often went for walks with my close friend when I was a child. We usually spent hours in a nearby park enjoying the views and playing games together.

제안: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary and linking words. Give one or two specific reasons with examples, avoid vague phrases like "working in a park" and repetition of 'mood.'

예시: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and reduce stress, and fresh air and greenery improve their mood. For example, a short walk among trees can make you feel more energetic and clear-headed.

제안: Be clear about the place and your reasons. Use correct phrasing (e.g. "visit a city like Singapore", "take city walks", "take photos"). Give one or two specific activities you would do and link them logically.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a city like Singapore to explore its neighborhoods. I would stroll along the waterfront, take photographs of the architecture, and try local street food.

제안: Use past tense for a recent event and correct phrasing (e.g. "I went to the park near my apartment last weekend"). Be specific about activities and use linking words to connect ideas. Keep it concise (1–3 sentences).

예시: Last weekend I went to the park near my apartment with a friend. We had a picnic and did some light exercise to unwind and relax.

× No, I don't work much because I work in an office and I have sit at my desk all day.

✓ No, I don't walk much because I work in an office and I have to sit at my desk all day.

Errors: incorrect verb choice 'work' instead of 'walk' (word choice but treated as sentence meaning), and missing 'to' after 'have' for obligation. Correction: use 'walk' to answer the question, and use the fixed expression 'have to sit' to indicate necessity. Suggestion: use 'have to' + base verb for obligations and choose verbs that match the intended meaning.

× I usually commute by bus so I don't have many opportunity to work during the day.

✓ I usually commute by bus so I don't have many opportunities to walk during the day.

Error: 'many' requires a plural noun; 'opportunity' should be 'opportunities'. Also 'work' is wrong verb for walking context. Suggestion: use plural nouns with 'many' and ensure verbs match context.

× Yes, when I was a child I've often goes with my close friend to some park and have some walking there with the beautiful view and we just spend hours there, have fun.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I often went with my close friend to a park and walked there to enjoy the beautiful view, and we would spend hours there having fun.

Errors: mixing past simple ('was') with present perfect ('I've') is incorrect; 'goes' should be past 'went'; 'have some walking' is ungrammatical; 'spend' should be past 'spent'. Correction: keep past tense consistently, use 'went' and 'walked', and use 'having fun' for ongoing activity. Suggestion: when describing past habits, use past simple or 'would' for repeated actions, and use correct verb forms.

× Because I think with the working in a park, it can lift people's mood and help people relax and recharge their batteries.

✓ Because I think walking in a park can lift people's moods and help them relax and recharge their batteries.

Errors: 'with the working in a park' is ungrammatical; use 'walking in a park'. Also 'people's mood' should be plural 'moods' to match general statement and 'help people' better as 'help them'. Suggestion: use gerund 'walking' for activity and prefer consistent pronouns.

× And also there are some beautiful viewing parks.

✓ There are also some parks with beautiful views.

Errors: 'beautiful viewing parks' is awkward and unidiomatic. Correction: use 'parks with beautiful views' which is natural word order. Suggestion: place adjectives and nouns in conventional order and use 'views' rather than 'viewing'.

× It also can give our good mood.

✓ It can also put us in a good mood.

Errors: 'give our good mood' is incorrect pronoun and verb collocation. Use 'put us in a good mood' or 'improve our mood'. Suggestion: learn common collocations for emotions (put someone in a good mood, improve someone's mood).

× I would like to some beautiful city just like Singapore and I would like to have some city work and take some picture and try some food.

✓ I would like to visit a beautiful city like Singapore; I would like to walk around the city, take some pictures, and try some food.

Errors: missing verb after 'would like to' ('to visit'); 'some beautiful city' should be 'a beautiful city'; 'have some city work' is unclear—likely 'walk around the city'; 'take some picture' needs plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: after 'would like to' use base verb, use articles correctly, and use plural nouns when appropriate.

× I just want to visit working because I think it's a good experience.

✓ I just want to visit and see the city because I think it's a good experience.

Errors: 'visit working' is ungrammatical; probably intended 'visit and work' or 'visit and see'. Chosen correction fits context of sightseeing. Suggestion: ensure verbs following 'visit' are nouns or use conjunctions properly (visit and see; visit and work).

× I would like go to the park near by my apartment at weekend and just I have a date with my friend and we plan to have the picnic and also have some working exercise and help us to unwind.

✓ I would like to go to the park near my apartment on the weekend; I met a friend and we planned to have a picnic and do some light exercise to help us unwind.

Errors: missing 'to' after 'would like'; 'near by' should be 'near' as preposition or 'nearby' as adjective; 'at weekend' should be 'on the weekend' or 'at the weekend'; 'I have a date' tense inconsistent—use past when talking about a past event; 'the picnic' should be 'a picnic'; 'working exercise' is incorrect—use 'light exercise' or 'some exercise'; 'help us to unwind' better as 'help us unwind'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions for time/place, include 'to' after 'would like', keep verb tenses consistent, and choose appropriate collocations for exercise and relaxation.