Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, grammatical, and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct tense and articles, and provide one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Use connecting words like 'but' and 'because' correctly and limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Not really. I don’t walk every day because I’m not very active, but I do go for walks sometimes when I feel stressed because they help me relax. For example, last month I walked in a nearby park to clear my mind and felt much calmer afterwards.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (past habits), avoid repetition, and finish your thought. Add a specific detail or short example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' properly.

예시: Yes, we often did. My parents used to take me to the nearby park every weekend because they believed it was good for my health and would keep me active. I remember playing frisbee with them while they walked around the lake.

제안: Begin with a concise main idea, then give 2 specific reasons with clear language. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect vocabulary (e.g., 'fit and feed' is unclear). Use linking words like 'and', 'for example', 'because' to connect points.

예시: People often walk in parks because the atmosphere is pleasant and quiet, which helps them relax. Also, parks are social places where you can meet others or exercise; for example, many people jog or do stretching classes there.

제안: Answer directly with a clear location and brief reasons. Avoid unclear phrases and incomplete sentences. Use conditional structure correctly: 'If I had the chance, I would...' Provide one specific detail why you chose that place.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the seaside promenade because the fresh air and sea views are very calming. I could walk for hours there while taking photos and listening to the waves.

제안: Give a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fragments and finish your examples. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' correctly.

예시: Last weekend I went for a walk in the local park. It was peaceful with many trees and small lakes, so I walked slowly and took some photos of the scenery.

× Honestly I don't because I'm not that active person to walk walk every day but I try to walk sometime whenever I feel low and stress because it keeps me peace and relax. So recently I walk.

✓ Honestly, I don't because I'm not that active of a person to walk every day, but I try to walk sometimes whenever I feel low or stressed because it gives me peace and helps me relax. Recently I have walked.

Multiple present tense and word-choice errors: 'I don't' needs context (I don't walk a lot). 'that active person' should be 'that active of a person'. 'walk walk' is repetition. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'feel low and stress' should be 'feel low or stressed'. 'keeps me peace and relax' is incorrect collocation; use 'gives me peace' and 'helps me relax'. 'So recently I walk' uses simple present incorrectly for a recent event; use present perfect 'I have walked'. Suggestions: simplify to 'I don't walk a lot', use correct adverbs 'sometimes', use adjective 'stressed', and choose appropriate tense for recent experience (present perfect).

× Yes, when I was a child, my parents used to take me to walk in in nearby park because it is very beneficial for our health and my parents want to make me very active and.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, my parents used to take me for walks in the nearby park because it was very beneficial for our health and my parents wanted to make me very active.

Errors: 'take me to walk in in nearby park' has preposition and article problems; idiomatic phrase is 'take me for walks in the nearby park'. Tense consistency: 'it is very beneficial' should be past 'it was very beneficial' to match 'when I was a child'. 'my parents want' should be past 'wanted'. Also remove trailing 'and'. Suggestions: maintain past tense throughout the sentence when describing childhood habits and use 'for walks' as the collocation.

× I think people like to walk in park because it has very good atmosphere and we can meet different people there and communicate with them and we can share our thoughts and also because we can fit and feed.

✓ I think people like to walk in the park because it has a very good atmosphere; we can meet different people there and communicate with them and share our thoughts, and also because it helps us stay fit and feel good.

Errors: missing definite article 'the park'. 'has very good atmosphere' needs 'a very good atmosphere'. 'we can meet different people there and communicate with them and we can share' is repetitive; streamline. 'we can fit and feed' is incorrect vocabulary — likely intended 'stay fit and feel good'. Suggestions: use 'the park', include appropriate articles, avoid repetition, and choose correct verbs/phrases for 'fit' and 'feel'.

× As I mentioned earlier, I'm not a walk person, so if I go to the walk then I will choose. Your destination so I can walk there and come.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I'm not someone who walks much, but if I were to go for a walk I would choose a nearby destination so I can walk there and back.

Problems with sentence structure and word choice: 'not a walk person' is unnatural; use 'not someone who walks much'. 'if I go to the walk then I will choose. Your destination' is fragmented and unclear. 'come' is incomplete—likely 'come back'. Also conditional form 'would' or 'were to' is appropriate for hypothetical. Suggestions: rephrase into a single coherent conditional sentence, use 'go for a walk', and 'walk there and back'.

× Well, I went for a walk in the local park last weekend. It was very peaceful because there were trees and small lakes just like I just walk and took some photos for instance, I.

✓ Well, I went for a walk in the local park last weekend. It was very peaceful because there were trees and small lakes. I just walked around and took some photos, for example.

Problems: tense and phrasing. 'just like I just walk' mixes present and past; use past 'I just walked around'. Sentence ends abruptly 'for instance, I.' Remove redundancy 'just like'. 'for instance' should be 'for example' or integrated properly. Suggestions: keep past tense consistency for a past event, remove unnecessary phrases, and complete the example phrase.