Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and directly address the question with a clear topic sentence. Correct grammar (use present simple), avoid repetition, and give one brief supporting detail with a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: No, I don't walk a lot because I have a very hectic schedule. However, when I have free time on weekends, I try to go for a short walk around my neighborhood to relax.

제안: Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, use correct verb forms, and add one specific detail with a linking word. Avoid unclear words and keep sentences short.

예시: Yes, I did. I often went for walks with my friends when I was a child, and we usually played in the nearby park. For example, on weekends we sometimes walked to a farmhouse area about a mile away and spent the afternoon exploring.

제안: Answer directly using general observation, use correct vocabulary (walk, not work), and give one clear, specific reason with a linking word. Avoid vague or confusing statements.

예시: People like to walk in parks because the environment is peaceful and pleasant. Also, parks offer fresh air and open space, so people can relax and exercise without feeling crowded.

제안: Use the conditional correctly and state one clear preferred location. Be specific about why you would choose it and avoid filler words. Keep it to two sentences max.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long hike in a high-altitude area such as the Nabuana base camp. I would choose it because the scenery is beautiful and the quiet mountain air helps me relieve stress.

제안: Use past simple consistently and give one specific detail about the place and time. Combine short sentences into a coherent answer using linking words.

예시: Lately I went for a walk near my rented house last Sunday. The area has a lot of greenery and is very quiet, so it was a relaxing walk.

× No I don't I I have a very hectic schedule so I have no free time for a lot of work. However, when The Awakens I I have managed to time to work.

✓ No, I don't. I have a very hectic schedule, so I don't have much free time. However, when I wake up early, I manage to find time to walk.

The original contains run-on sentences, repetition, wrong phrase 'for a lot of work', incorrect capitalization 'The Awakens', and unclear meaning. This is a sentence structure error: separate ideas into clear sentences, remove repeated words, use correct verbs and idioms (wake up early, find time to walk). Use commas to join clauses properly. Suggestion: Break into short sentences, avoid repetition, and use the correct verbs and collocations (e.g., 'have much free time', 'wake up', 'manage to find time').

× Yes I did hang when I was a child. I usually go out with my friend for to go walk and play. Similarly we usually go on farmhouse on the weekends by walking.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child. I usually went out with my friends to walk and play. Similarly, we usually walked to a farmhouse on the weekends.

Multiple tense and word choice errors: 'did hang' is incorrect—likely meant 'did' as auxiliary without main verb or 'played'; present tense 'usually go' conflicts with 'when I was a child'. Use past tense for habitual actions in the past ('went', 'walked'). Correct prepositions ('to walk', 'to a farmhouse') and pluralize 'friends'. Suggestion: Use past tense for past habits ('I usually went out with my friends to walk and play').

× People like to work in the parks because there is a quiet and peaceful environment. Similarly, there is no obstruction to work and other person also available there to eat, to feel easy to work there.

✓ People like to walk in parks because the environment is quiet and peaceful. Also, there are no obstacles, and other people are nearby, so it feels comfortable to walk there.

Errors include wrong verb 'work' instead of 'walk', article misuse ('the parks' vs 'parks'), awkward phrase 'no obstruction to work', and singular/plural mismatch 'other person also available'. These are issues with word choice, articles, and plurality. Use correct collocations ('walk in parks', 'quiet and peaceful'), plural forms and clear structure. Suggestion: Use appropriate verbs and articles, and ensure subject-verb and singular/plural agreement ('other people are nearby').

× If I, if I have a chance for a long walk, I will go for hiking in high altitude area lagging, uh, Nabuna base camp and like uh other because there is a quiet place where it is a high medium to stress out.

✓ If I have the chance to take a long walk, I will go hiking in a high-altitude area, such as Nabuna Base Camp, because it is quiet and helps relieve stress.

The original has repetition, incorrect prepositions ('for hiking in high altitude area'), wrong word 'lagging', awkward phrase 'high medium to stress out'. This is a future-tense conditional but needs correct infinitive forms and clearer noun phrases. Use 'have the chance to', 'go hiking in a high-altitude area', and explain purpose with 'because it helps relieve stress'. Suggestion: Simplify conditional structure and use correct compound adjectives ('high-altitude') and purpose expressions ('helps relieve stress').

× Lately I went to the nearby near my rented house. There is a greenery and uh, quiet places. I go last Sunday.

✓ Lately I went for a walk near my rented house. There is a lot of greenery and quiet places. I went last Sunday.

Mixed tense and awkward word choices: 'Lately' often pairs with present perfect ('have gone') but since a specific time 'last Sunday' is mentioned, simple past is correct ('went'). Phrases 'nearby near my rented house' and 'There is a greenery' are incorrect—use 'near my rented house' and 'a lot of greenery' or 'greenery'. Also fix 'I go last Sunday' to 'I went last Sunday'. Suggestion: Match tense to time expressions (use past tense with 'last Sunday'), remove redundant words, and use uncountable noun 'greenery' without 'a' or say 'a lot of greenery'.