Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler words and repetitions.

예시: Yes, I walk regularly, but it depends on the day. For example, on weekends I usually wake up early and walk around my neighborhood because there is a dedicated track for walkers and runners.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific details. Use past tense consistently and avoid hesitations. Connect ideas with linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

예시: Yes, I often walked near my home as a child because my parents did not let me go far. There was a small playground in front of our house where I played and walked under my parents' supervision.

제안: Give one clear reason followed by a supporting detail or example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and precise vocabulary (atmosphere, social encouragement). Keep to two to three sentences.

예시: People like to walk in parks because of the pleasant atmosphere and fresh air. Also, seeing others exercise can be motivating, for example, many people walk or jog together which encourages newcomers to join.

제안: Answer directly and give a specific place and reason. Use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary (hike, trail, mountains). Limit to two sentences and avoid repeating words.

예시: I would like to hike in the mountains near my hometown because I enjoy challenging trails and the peaceful natural scenery. A long forest trail would be ideal for both exercise and relaxation.

제안: Be specific and concise. State the place and one detail about it (distance, features). Use correct nouns (track, not truck) and avoid filler. Keep to two sentences maximum.

예시: I recently walked near my home at Manhal Palace in central Abu Dhabi, where there is a four-kilometer open walking track. Many people use the track for jogging and walking, so it feels lively and safe.

× Not definitely, Uh.

✓ Not really.

'Not definitely' is awkward and incorrect adverb placement; 'definitely' is an adverb that does not fit with 'not' here. Use 'not really' to express disagreement or negative response naturally.

× Whatever, it depends on the weekdays or the weekends and the weekends.

✓ It depends on whether it's a weekday or the weekend.

Original is repetitive and ungrammatical. Use 'depends on whether' to introduce the condition and correct singular/plural usage for 'weekday'/'weekend' contexts.

× If I wake up early, I always to go for a walk around the neighborhood.

✓ If I wake up early, I always go for a walk around the neighborhood.

The verb 'to go' is incorrectly used with 'always'. Remove 'to' and use the base form 'go' after modal/time adverb 'always'. This corrects verb form usage.

× We have a place to truck for uh, specially for those who were walking or running.

✓ We have a track, especially for people who are walking or running.

Multiple issues: 'truck' is a wrong word (should be 'track'), 'specially' should be 'especially', and tense/structure 'those who were walking' is awkward; use present progressive 'are walking' to describe typical users.

× Yes, I during my childhood, I used to go around the community for walking near my house only, uh, because my parents didn't allow me to go far after walking or away from my house, you know, and rather supervision in front of my house, there is a small ground where.

✓ Yes, during my childhood I used to walk around the community near my house because my parents didn't allow me to go far from home; under their supervision there was a small ground in front of my house.

Corrected word order ('during my childhood'), use 'used to walk' (habit in past), replace 'for walking' with 'walk', 'far after walking or away' is incorrect—use 'go far from home', and clarify supervision and location with proper sentence structure and past tense consistency.

× I think it's probably because of the ambience and that was your, which is provided by the park.

✓ I think it's probably because of the ambience and the atmosphere provided by the park.

Original has wrong pronoun 'your' and awkward structure 'that was your, which is provided'. Replace with 'the atmosphere provided' to correctly reference what the park offers.

× There's lots of other people doing the same, uh, job or walking that will encourage us also to do the exercise or walking or whatever it is.

✓ There are a lot of other people doing the same activity, like walking, which encourages us to exercise as well.

Use 'there are' with plural 'people' (subject-verb agreement), 'lots of other people' -> 'a lot of other people', 'job' is wrong; use 'activity'. Improve phrasing for clarity and correct adjective/adverb placement.

× Alena, my home place, there's a place for trucking.

✓ At Al Ain, my hometown, there's a place with a track.

'Alena' likely refers to 'Al Ain'; 'home place' -> 'hometown'; 'trucking' is incorrect—use 'a track'. Rearranged for natural English sentence structure.

× It's a long walk home to to climb a mountain or in the forest.

✓ You can take a long walk there to climb a mountain or walk in the forest.

Original has duplicated 'to', awkward phrasing 'long walk home'. Rephrase to express the activities available and correct infinitive use.

× That's want to do that because of the enthusiasm and encouragement.

✓ I want to do that because of the enthusiasm and encouragement it brings.

'That's want to do that' is ungrammatical. Use 'I want to do that' and clarify what 'enthusiasm and encouragement' refer to; add 'it brings' for completeness.

× So it's near to my home and there's a palace called Manhal Palace right in the center of the town, Abu Dhabi, where there's a truck, which is therefore, uh, walking at around 4 kilometer burglarized, walking open in track.

✓ It's near my home; there's a place called Manhal Palace in the center of Abu Dhabi town where there's a track that is about 4 kilometers long and open for walking.

Many errors: 'near to' -> 'near', 'palace called Manhal Palace' redundant but acceptable, 'truck' -> 'track', remove filler words, correct '4 kilometer' to '4 kilometers', 'burglarized' is wrong and removed, and restructure sentence for clarity and correct adjective placement.

× So, so there's lots of people walking around there and.

✓ So there are lots of people walking around there.

Use 'there are' with plural 'lots of people' to ensure subject-verb agreement; remove repeated filler 'so' and trailing conjunction.