Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えは質問に触れていますが、語彙と文法の誤り、繰り返し、不自然な表現が目立ちます。また5文以内に収めつつ、理由をもっと明確で簡潔に述べるべきです。具体的には、“work”はここでは不適切で“walk”を使い、過去形や進行形の混同を避け、接続詞（because, so）を適切に使って論理的に繋げてください。発音や流暢さ向上のために短い自然な文を練習しましょう。

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I walk every day because I don't own a car or a bicycle. I also don't have a driver's license, and I'm not comfortable riding a bike, so walking is my main way to get around.

제안: 応答は肯定していますが、不必要なフィラー（uh）が多く、語彙の誤用（work→walk、go to outside→go outside、no option excite→no other option）があり、文法も混乱しています。過去習慣を表す“used to”は使い方は良いが、その後の文は過去形で統一し、簡潔に理由を述べてください。また具体的な記憶（どこに行ったか、誰と歩いたか）を加えると内容が豊かになります。

예시: Yes, I used to walk outside a lot when I was a child. Because I couldn't drive and we didn't have a bicycle, walking was the only way to go to school or visit friends. I often walked with my neighbor's children.

제안: 理由を述べている点は良いですが、“work”の誤用が繰り返され、冗長でフィラーが多いです。パークで歩く利点を複数挙げる場合は接続詞（for example, and, furthermore）を使い、具体性（ストレス解消、景色、社交の機会など）を追加すると説得力が増します。文は簡潔にまとめ、語彙の幅を広げましょう。

예시: People like to walk in parks because it's good for their health and it's low-impact exercise suitable for all ages. For example, walking in a park can reduce stress, improve fitness, and provide a pleasant environment for socializing.

제안: 仮定の表現（If I had the chance）があり意図は伝わりますが、文法ミスと語順、語彙の誤用（across the Rd., there are too long）が目立ちます。より自然な仮定法や町の名前・理由を具体的に述べ、接続語で理由を明確にしてください。例を挙げてどのような体験を期待するかを示すと良いです。

예시: If I had the chance, I'd like to walk across Tokyo from east to west. I want to see the city's varied neighborhoods and landmarks, and it would be a great way to experience the scale and diversity of the city.

제안: 最近の行動を答えていますが、“worked”の誤用、“first near my house”など不自然な表現、名前の誤り（Casa Lincoln/Linka）や文の未完で情報が曖昧です。時制を過去形で統一し、公園の名前や場所の説明、何をしたか（walked, relaxed, saw）を具体的に短く述べてください。

예시: Recently I walked to the park near my house called Kasai Linkai Park. I often go there to relax and walk along the paths; it's one of the most popular parks in my neighborhood.

× Yes, I work a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

The student answered the examiner's question about walking with 'I work a lot,' which uses the wrong verb. Use the present simple 'I walk a lot' to state a habitual action. Suggestion: match the verb to the activity asked about and use present simple for routines.

× I am working every day because I don't have my own car and bicycle.

✓ I walk every day because I don't have my own car or bicycle.

The continuous form 'I am working every day' is inappropriate for a habitual action; use present simple 'I walk every day'. Also use 'or' to connect alternatives ('car or bicycle'). Suggestion: use present simple for regular habits and correct coordinating conjunction.

× I don't have a driver license and also riding a bicycle is scared of me, so that's why.

✓ I don't have a driver's license, and I am scared of riding a bicycle, so that's why.

Use the possessive form 'driver's license' (article/possessive error). 'Riding a bicycle is scared of me' is ungrammatical; use 'I am scared of riding a bicycle' (correct subject and adjective). Also join clauses with 'and'. Suggestion: use possessive nouns and place the feeling adjective with the subject.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

The question is fine but 'to have a walk' is unnatural in English; use 'for a walk'. The past auxiliary 'Did' is correct. Suggestion: use natural collocation 'go for a walk'.

× Yes, uh, I, uh, used to, uh, work when I go to outside because I couldn't drive a car and I couldn't ride a bicycle.

✓ Yes, I used to walk outside because I couldn't drive a car and I couldn't ride a bicycle.

'Used to' should be followed by the base verb 'walk' (not 'work'). 'When I go to outside' is incorrect; use 'walk outside' or 'go outside'. Also keep past context with 'couldn't'. Suggestion: use 'used to' + base verb and natural phrase 'walk outside'.

× So there was a uh, there was no option excite except to work walking.

✓ So there was no other option except walking.

The original has redundancy and incorrect words ('option excite', 'work walking'). Simplify to 'no other option except walking' or 'except to walk'. Suggestion: remove filler words and use correct noun/verb forms.

× Because, uh, working in parks helps, uh, some people's health, because working is a really easy and it's really helpful exercises, especially for elderly people.

✓ Because walking in parks helps people's health; walking is a really easy and helpful exercise, especially for elderly people.

Use 'walking' not 'working'. 'Helps some people's health' better as 'helps people's health'. 'Exercise' should be singular or uncountable here. Remove redundant 'because' and use punctuation to join ideas. Suggestion: choose correct verb 'walk' and correct noun form 'exercise'.

× So that's why people like to, uh, work in the park.

✓ So that's why people like to walk in the park.

Use 'walk' instead of 'work' to match meaning. 'Like to walk' is present simple habitual. Suggestion: ensure verb matches intended activity.

× If I had a chance, I really want to across the, uh, Rd. uh, from east to western side in Tokyo because uh, there are too long, but I want to try.

✓ If I had the chance, I would really like to walk across the road from the east to the west side in Tokyo because it is very long, but I want to try.

In conditional 'If I had the chance' use conditional 'I would really like' not present 'I really want'. Use 'walk across the road' and 'from the east to the west side'. 'There are too long' is ungrammatical; use 'it is very long'. Suggestion: use second conditional structure 'If...would...' and correct prepositions and noun forms.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

The question 'lately' is acceptable but 'recently' is more natural with past tense 'did'. Either is possible; suggestion: 'recently' preferred. No grammar error in tense but word choice improved.

× I worked lately to the park near my first near my house and which is called Casa Lincoln Park.

✓ I went recently to the park near my house called Kasai Lincoln Park.

Use past simple 'went' rather than 'worked'. 'Lately' replaced by 'recently' for naturalness. 'First near my house' is unclear; use 'near my house'. Correct park name assumed 'Kasai Lincoln Park'. Suggestion: use 'went' for past actions and clear noun phrases.

× I live in Kasai and Casa Linka Park is one of the most famous place in my city and it will.

✓ I live in Kasai, and Kasai Linka Park is one of the most famous places in my city.

Use correct park name consistently 'Kasai Linka Park'. 'Most famous place' should be plural 'places' with 'one of the'. Remove trailing 'and it will' which is incomplete. Suggestion: ensure noun number agreement and finish sentences.