Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời khá tự nhiên và đầy đủ, nhưng còn lặp từ và lỗi ngắt câu. Bạn nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp ý (“as for”) và dùng liên từ hợp lý. Ngoài ra rút gọn để không quá 5 câu và sửa ngữ pháp nhỏ (ví dụ ‘a fresh batch of’ → ‘a few’ hoặc ‘some’).

예시: Yes, I walk every day. I usually walk to school or to buy groceries for my mom, like vegetables and tomatoes. I also walk just for fun because staying still makes me feel restless. Walking helps me clear my mind and get some light exercise.

제안: Câu trả lời có chi tiết cụ thể và dùng thì quá khứ phù hợp nhưng mở đầu dùng thì hiện tại (“Yes, I do”) không khớp. Hãy trả lời ngay bằng quá khứ và giữ độ dài hợp lý. Bạn có thể thêm một liên từ ngắn để mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was young, my grandmother took my sister and me to a nearby park every day for about an hour. We walked together and chatted about school and what we wanted for dinner that evening. Those walks were one of my favorite routines.

제안: Ý tưởng tốt và có lập luận, nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp (thừa từ, thiếu cấu trúc chính xác) và câu bị ngắt quãng. Tránh bắt đầu câu bằng “I think the reason why” quá dài — nên tóm tắt tiêu đề rồi giải thích bằng các chi tiết cụ thể, sử dụng liên từ để nối ý và chú ý số ít/đa số (parks has → parks have).

예시: People prefer walking in parks because they are cleaner and safer than busy streets. Parks have many trees and open spaces, so the air feels fresher and noise is reduced. As a result, people often feel calmer and more relaxed when they walk there.

제안: Câu trả lời rõ ràng và phù hợp, nhưng có lặp từ (‘beach’ nhiều lần) và lỗi nhỏ về chủ-động từ (air really provides... help → helps). Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, dùng từ vựng đa dạng hơn và tránh lặp lại.

예시: I would choose the beach for a long walk. I love the sound of the waves and the salty air, which helps me relax. Walking along the shore would help me unwind after a stressful day.

제안: Câu trả lời chân thật và có lý do, nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ không tự nhiên ('drowned in a bunch of school work' có thể sửa thành 'drowning in schoolwork'). Câu quá dài; nên tách thành hai câu: lí do và kế hoạch. Dùng thì phù hợp (present perfect + would/could).

예시: I haven't been walking much recently because I'm drowning in schoolwork. If I had time, I'd go to the nearby park and walk four or five laps to get some fresh air and clear my head.

× Yes I do. I walk on a daily basis, whether it is going to school, getting my mom a fresh batch of tomatoes and vegetables, as well as just walking As for fun As for entertainment, because I can't stand not moving anywhere.

✓ Yes, I do. I walk on a daily basis, whether it is to go to school, to get my mom a fresh batch of tomatoes and vegetables, or just to walk for fun and entertainment, because I can't stand staying still.

The sentence uses awkward verb forms and punctuation. Use infinitive 'to go' and 'to get' after 'whether it is' for parallel structure. Replace repeated 'As for' and fragment 'because I can't stand not moving anywhere' with 'staying still' for natural English. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, I do. I remember vividly that when I was younger, my grandma would bring me and my sister to this local park every single day for an hour. We would walk around and talk about what happened in school and what I would like to eat for dinner on that day.

✓ Yes, I do. I remember vividly that when I was younger, my grandma would take my sister and me to the local park every day for about an hour. We would walk around and talk about what happened at school and what I would like to eat for dinner that day.

Use 'take' rather than 'bring' when moving someone to a place from the speaker's past perspective. Use correct object order 'my sister and me'. Use 'at school' (preposition) and 'that day' instead of 'on that day' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:6 and 11

× I think the reason why many people prefer to walk in parks because it is a safer and cleaner space to walk to rather than walking on the streets where you are constantly surrounded by cars, motorbikes and sometimes air pollutants as well.

✓ I think many people prefer to walk in parks because they are a safer and cleaner place to walk than the streets, where you are constantly surrounded by cars, motorbikes, and sometimes air pollution.

The original includes a redundant 'the reason why' plus incorrect clause structure. Remove redundancy and ensure subject agreement ('parks' -> 'they are'). Use 'place' and 'than' for comparison. Use 'air pollution' (uncountable) rather than 'air pollutants'. Grammar problem type ID:16 and 13 and 11

× Parks has a vast amount of trees and green spaces which makes walking. Feel calmer and provides you with a sense of tranquility.

✓ Parks have a large number of trees and green spaces, which make walking feel calmer and provide a sense of tranquility.

Subject-verb agreement error: plural 'Parks' requires plural verb 'have'. 'A vast amount of trees' is incorrect; use 'a large number of trees' or 'many trees'. Combine fragments into one sentence and use plural verb forms 'make' and 'provide'. Grammar problem type ID:1 and 27 and 26

× If I had a chance to take a long walk, I would definitely go to the beach because I love going to the beach and the feeling of beach waves and air really provides a sense of calm and help me to unwind after a long day.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would definitely go to the beach because I love being there; the sound of the waves and the sea air really provide a sense of calm and help me unwind after a long day.

Maintain conditional structure: 'If I had the chance' is fine. Subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'the sound of the waves and the sea air' can be treated collectively; use plural verbs 'provide' and 'help' or rephrase. Use 'help me unwind' (no 'to'). Improve word choice: 'being there' and 'sound of the waves' for naturalness. Grammar problem type ID:7 and 27

× Lately I haven't been walking around as much as I would like to because I am drowned in a bunch of school work, but if I do have the chance to do so, then I'll probably go to a park nearby my neighborhood and walk for four to five laps.

✓ Lately I haven't been walking around as much as I'd like because I am swamped with a lot of schoolwork, but if I do get the chance, I'll probably go to a park near my neighborhood and walk four or five laps.

Use idiomatic 'swamped with' or 'drowned in' is informal; 'swamped' preferred. 'Schoolwork' is one word. Use 'if I do get the chance' and 'near my neighborhood' is redundant—'near' or 'in my neighborhood' suffices; choose 'near my neighborhood'. 'Walk for four to five laps' -> 'walk four or five laps'. Grammar problem type ID:6 and 11 and 13