Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, and give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Keep answers under five sentences.

예시: Not really. I don't walk much because I live in Bangkok and need to travel between many places, so I usually ride a bicycle or motorbike. Also, the busy streets and hot weather make walking uncomfortable.

제안: Good content and structure, but fix repetition and tense/grammar errors. Use linking words and more precise time phrases. Keep it within five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child my parents often took me to parks and nature reserves where I would walk, cycle and play with other children. They wanted me to develop a close connection with nature, so we usually spent every weekend outdoors during the summer.

제안: Provide slightly more specific reasons and smoother phrasing. Use linking words and correct collocations (e.g., 'definite sidewalk' -> 'well-maintained paths'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: People enjoy walking in parks because they are green and peaceful, which helps reduce stress. Also, parks usually have well-maintained paths, so walkers feel safe from traffic.

제안: Clarify your idea and remove fillers. Give a clear topic sentence and 1–2 specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'go trekking in the mountains', 'enjoy nature', 'get exercise'). Keep under five sentences.

예시: If I had the chance, I would go trekking in the mountains because I enjoy being surrounded by nature and it is great exercise. I would also like the quiet atmosphere and the scenic views.

제안: Be specific and grammatical. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions, and give concrete details (when, where, how often). Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Recently I have been walking around my condo complex. The complex is quite large and has walking lanes, so I walk there most evenings and sometimes go for a short run along the paths.

× I usually prefer to, uh, riding bicycle or motorbike, so I usually ride it.

✓ I usually prefer to ride a bicycle or a motorbike, so I usually ride one.

The verb 'prefer' followed by 'to' requires the base form (infinitive) 'ride', not the gerund 'riding'. Also include appropriate articles for countable nouns ('a bicycle', 'a motorbike') and use 'one' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: Use 'prefer to' + base verb and include articles for singular countable nouns.

× So why I'm moving in Bangkok?

✓ So why am I living in Bangkok?

Question word order requires auxiliary before the subject: 'why am I' not 'why I'm'. Also 'moving' suggests relocation; if meaning is current residence, 'living' is better. Use the present continuous 'am living' for current situation. Suggestion: For questions, place auxiliary verb before the subject and choose the correct verb for meaning.

× There are a lot of places that I need to work.

✓ There are a lot of places where I need to work.

The relative clause should use 'where' instead of 'that' to indicate location: 'places where I need to work'. 'That' is not correct for 'places' with a location sense. Suggestion: Use 'where' for locations: 'places where...'.

× It is really bad.

✓ It's really bad for commuting.

While 'It is really bad' is grammatical, it's vague. Adding context makes the sentence clearer and fits the question about walking/transport in Bangkok. Ensure present tense matches general statement. Suggestion: Provide specific subject or reason after 'bad' to clarify meaning.

× When I was a child, I used to spend much of my time outdoors.

✓ When I was a child, I used to spend most of my time outdoors.

Use 'most' instead of 'much' with 'time' to indicate the majority of time in this context. 'Used to' correctly indicates habitual past. Suggestion: Use 'most of my time' for frequency/majority.

× They wanted to They wanted me to develop a close connection with nature.

✓ They wanted me to develop a close connection with nature.

The phrase repeats 'They wanted to'. Remove the duplicate and keep the correct transitive structure 'wanted me to...'. Suggestion: Avoid accidental repetition; keep only one 'They wanted'.

× So we usually spend every weekend, especially during the summer.

✓ So we usually spent every weekend there, especially during the summer.

The context is past ('When I was a child'), so the verb should be past tense 'spent' not present 'spend'. Also add 'there' (or a place) to clarify. Suggestion: Maintain consistent past tense for past habits and add place if needed.

× People like to walk in parks because it is quite green and also there are so many peaceful places.

✓ People like to walk in parks because they are quite green and there are many peaceful spots.

Use 'they' to refer back to 'parks' (plural). 'It is' is incorrect for plural noun. 'Spots' is a more natural noun than 'places' here, and 'so many' can be simplified to 'many'. Suggestion: Match pronoun number to the noun and choose natural collocations.

× Moreover, it has definite sidewalk so people can walk without fearing about the vehicles.

✓ Moreover, there are definite sidewalks so people can walk without fearing the vehicles.

Use plural 'sidewalks' to agree with 'parks' or area, and 'fearing about' is incorrect; use 'fearing' or better 'being afraid of' or 'worrying about'. Also use 'there are' for existence (sidewalks exist). Suggestion: Use 'there are' for plural existence, 'sidewalks' plural, and 'afraid of' or 'fear' + object.

× Uh, if I had a chance, I would like to walk, uh, in the mountain like trekking to because, uh, during the trekking tool, I can feed the nature as well as, uh, uh, and can feed the nature and moreover, I can.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk in the mountains, like doing a trek, because during trekking I can enjoy nature.

Use 'the chance' (common phrase), plural 'mountains', and 'doing a trek' or 'go trekking' instead of 'trekking to'. 'Feed the nature' is incorrect; 'enjoy nature' is appropriate. Remove repetitions and unnecessary fillers. Suggestion: Use 'go trekking' or 'do a trek', pluralize 'mountains', and use accurate verbs like 'enjoy'.

× Uh, recently I, I, I work, uh, in our console because the condo is quite big and there are also lanes for walk.

✓ Recently I worked in our condo because it is quite big and there are lanes for walking.

'Recently' suggests present perfect or simple past; 'worked' is acceptable if referring to a recent past action. 'Console' is likely 'condo' and 'lanes for walk' should be 'lanes for walking'. Use 'there are' with plural 'lanes'. Suggestion: Use 'worked' or 'have been working' for recent activity and 'lanes for walking' for correct noun phrase.

× Uh, so I walk and sometimes I run a along alongside of the condo.

✓ So I walk and sometimes I run along the paths beside the condo.

Remove duplicated prepositions 'a along alongside of'. Use 'along the paths beside the condo' or 'alongside the condo' for natural phrasing. 'Alongside of' is nonstandard; use 'alongside' or 'beside'. Suggestion: Use a single preposition and a clear noun ('paths') to describe where you walk/run.