Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler phrases. Use linking words (for example, because or so) to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I walk often. I usually go for a walk when I need to clear my mind because moving helps me think more clearly and organize my thoughts.

제안: Give a direct answer then one clear reason with a specific example. Reduce hesitations and repetition. Use a linking word like "because" and finish the sentence coherently.

예시: Yes, I did. I walked outside almost every day because my family enjoyed evening strolls; for instance, we often walked to a nearby park after dinner.

제안: Start with a clear general statement, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid redundant phrasing and ensure sentences are grammatical.

예시: People like walking in parks because the natural surroundings help them relax and refresh their minds. For example, being among trees and open spaces can reduce stress and make it easier to think clearly.

제안: Answer directly and give one clear specific place and reason. Avoid contradicting statements (e.g. saying no special place then naming one). Keep to two or three sentences and use a linking word like "because".

예시: I would like to take a long walk around the Gurudwara Sahib because the peaceful atmosphere and open courtyards help me relax when I walk with my mother.

제안: Give a past tense direct answer with one specific detail about when and why. Avoid unclear endings; complete your thought and use linking words like "after" or "so".

예시: Lately I went for walks with my mother along our local street. We usually walk in the evening after dinner because it helps with digestion and became a pleasant daily routine.

× Yes I do. I walk a lot whenever I feel free and whenever I am about to think something.

✓ Yes, I do. I walk a lot whenever I have free time and when I need to think.

The phrase 'feel free' is unnatural for free time; 'have free time' fits present habitual actions. 'Am about to think something' is incorrect; use 'need to think' to express purpose. Also add comma after 'Yes' for natural speech punctuation.

× I used to walk and walk, keep walking and then I got everything perfectly in my mind.

✓ I used to walk for a long time and then everything became clear in my mind.

'Used to' correctly indicates past habit. 'Keep walking' is redundant; 'for a long time' is clearer. 'I got everything perfectly in my mind' is unidiomatic; use 'everything became clear in my mind' to express understanding. Verb tense 'got' can be replaced by 'became' for clarity.

× Yes, umm, I used to go outside for a walk when I was a child because it was my personal habit and I I more I like to walk instead of sitting for all day because, uh, when I sit for a long time.

✓ Yes, I used to go outside for a walk when I was a child because it was my habit and I preferred walking to sitting all day.

Remove filler 'umm' and duplicate 'I'. 'Used to' and 'when I was a child' correctly mark past. 'I more I like to walk' is wrong word order; use 'I preferred walking to sitting all day' to compare habits in the past. Omit trailing incomplete clause.

× Because whenever people go to walk and park they it makes the environment makes their mind fresh and it also makes their them feel so comfortable and fresh is their mind which makes them to organize ideas or also relaxes their body.

✓ Because when people go for a walk in a park, it refreshes their minds, makes them feel comfortable, helps them organize ideas, and relaxes their bodies.

Use 'go for a walk' and 'in a park' for correct prepositions. Remove duplicated words and fix subject-verb agreement: 'it refreshes', 'makes them feel'. 'Fresh is their mind' is ungrammatical; use 'refreshes their minds'. 'Makes them to organize ideas' should be 'helps them organize ideas' (no 'to'). Use plural 'bodies' to match 'people'.

× Actually, I don't have any special place or I don't think about any special place where I go to walk.

✓ Actually, I don't have any special place and I don't usually think about a particular place to walk.

Use 'and' instead of repeating 'or'. 'Usually' clarifies habitual present. 'Particular place to walk' is more natural than 'place where I go to walk'.

× But whenever I go with my mother, I used to say that I would like to go the Gurudwara Sahib where I would like to walk.

✓ But when I went with my mother, I used to say I would like to go to the Gurudwara Sahib to walk.

Maintain past context: 'when I went' matches 'used to'. Add preposition 'to' after 'go'. Use infinitive 'to walk' to express purpose. Remove repeated 'would like'.

× And walking also makes me feel relaxed and makes me umm.

✓ And walking also makes me feel relaxed and calm.

Finish the sentence with a clear adjective like 'calm'. Remove filler 'umm'. Keep present tense 'makes' consistent.

× Lately I would like to go with my mother on the street.

✓ Lately I have been going for a walk with my mother on the street.

'Lately' suggests recent habits, so use present perfect progressive 'have been going'. 'Would like to go' expresses desire, not past action. 'On the street' is acceptable but 'for a walk' clarifies the activity.

× It was like our daily routine.

✓ It became our daily routine.

'Was like our daily routine' is vague; 'became our daily routine' clearly indicates a repeated past habit. This improves sentence structure and meaning.

× At evening after having a dinner, we used to go daily there and which also digested the food and also makes.

✓ In the evenings after dinner, we used to go there every day; it also helped digestion and made us feel better.

Use 'in the evenings' and 'after dinner' for natural timing. 'Used to go daily there' should be 'used to go there every day'. 'Which also digested the food' is incorrect; change to 'it also helped digestion'. Finish the idea 'made us feel better' to complete the sentence. Maintain past habitual tense throughout.