Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and relevant: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, avoid confusing word choice (e.g. 'work' vs 'walk'), reduce redundancy, and keep to 2–4 concise sentences. Use precise verbs and a link phrase to expand if needed.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk from my home to the shop every day because the route is pleasant and refreshing. Consequently, I prefer walking to taking the bus or bike when the weather is good.

제안: Answer directly and use past tense consistently. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases. Give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details (where, who, what). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly.

예시: Yes, I often went outside to walk when I was a child. There was a park near our house where I used to play and walk with my friends, so we spent many afternoons there.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence and follow with specific reasons. Use correct grammar and avoid awkward phrases. Use linking words ('because', 'for example', 'also') to connect ideas, and provide concrete examples of benefits.

예시: I think people like to walk in parks because they are peaceful and offer fresh air. For example, parks usually have less traffic noise, open space for walking or running, and pleasant scenery like trees and birds.

제안: Answer the hypothetical clearly using conditional language ('I would...'). Avoid repetition and correct vocabulary (use 'walk' not 'work'). Give a specific place and a reason, and keep it concise.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along a coastal promenade because I enjoy sea views and fresh air. In my city, a typical long walk for me is the 30-minute route from my house to the football training ground.

제안: Use past simple when describing recent past events and avoid word confusion ('work' vs 'walk'). Begin with a direct statement about the recent walk, then add one or two specific details (with time, companion, purpose). Keep sentences short and coherent.

예시: Recently I walked from my home to the training ground, which takes about 30 minutes. Sometimes my girlfriend and I also walk around the city to explore and meet friends along the way.

× Yes, I do work a lot, especially every day.

✓ Yes, I work a lot, especially every day.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary in affirmative present simple statements. Use the base present simple 'I work' for habitual actions.

× I usually work from my home to the shop that is very nice and refreshing instead of taking the bus or even the bike every day.

✓ I usually walk from my home to the shop; it is very nice and refreshing instead of taking the bus or even the bike.

The verb 'work' is incorrect here; context suggests 'walk'. 'From my home to the shop' is fine but sentence flow improves by splitting clauses and using 'walk'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to connect ideas. 'Even the bike' is better as 'even the bike' but 'ride a bike' would be more natural.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

This question sentence is grammatically correct for past habit; no change needed.

× MMM, yes, I will say I did, especially when I was a young kid.

✓ Yes, I would say I did, especially when I was a young kid.

Using 'will' to express a present comment is incorrect; 'would say' is the appropriate modal for tentative statements about past habits.

× Then I will.

✓ Then I did.

'Then I will' mixes future auxiliary with past context. The past simple 'I did' matches the previous sentence about childhood.

× There was a like park area near our house, so I usually go there and then have fun with my friends from the young age.

✓ There was a park area near our house, so I usually went there and had fun with my friends from a young age.

Use 'there was' for existence in the past (correct) but subsequent verbs must also be past tense: 'went' and 'had'. 'A like park area' is ungrammatical; use 'a park area' or 'a park' and 'from a young age' is the correct phrase.

× And yeah, so there was a lot of working.

✓ And yeah, so there was a lot of walking.

The word 'working' is likely a confused word choice; context refers to walking, so use 'walking'. If 'working' were intended, clarify meaning. 'There was a lot of walking' uses correct noun form.

× I was there.

✓ I was there.

This sentence is acceptable in past context; no change needed.

× So in my opinion, from a person that work usually in the parks or even the roads, I think it's very refreshing.

✓ So in my opinion, as a person who usually walks in the parks or even on the roads, I think it's very refreshing.

Use 'as a person who' instead of 'from a person that'. Relative clause requires 'who' for people. Verb agreement: 'work' should be 'walks' or 'walk' depending on structure; 'usually walks' if subject is singular. Preposition 'on the roads' is correct.

× There is not a lot of noise.

✓ There is not much noise.

Use 'much' with uncountable nouns like 'noise' in negative statements rather than 'a lot of' which is less formal but acceptable; 'not much noise' is more natural.

× There is a free area you can walk or even run.

✓ There is a free area where you can walk or even run.

Add 'where' to introduce the relative clause describing the area. The rest is fine.

× So that's what make it so special and you maybe we see some cool stuff.

✓ So that's what makes it so special and maybe we see some cool stuff.

Subject-verb agreement: 'that' (or 'what') is singular, so use 'makes'. The original had extra pronouns 'you maybe we' which is confusing; remove the extra pronoun and reorder to 'maybe we see'.

× I live in a small city that is not that not not that it's famous for long roads or places to run.

✓ I live in a small city that is not famous for long roads or places to run.

Remove repeated words 'not that not not that it's' which are redundant and ungrammatical. Simplify to 'not famous for...'.

× So usually my long work consist of from my house to to my football training ground.

✓ So usually my long walk consists of the route from my house to my football training ground.

Use 'walk' not 'work'. Subject-verb agreement: 'consist' should be 'consists' for singular 'my long walk'. Remove duplicate 'to'. Clarify 'the route from' for natural phrasing.

× So that is almost 30 minutes long.

✓ So that is almost 30 minutes long.

This sentence is acceptable; no change needed.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' is acceptable but 'recently' is more natural in questions with 'did'. Both are grammatically correct; this is a style suggestion.

× And lately my work consisted of usually from my home to the training ground that is pleasantly about 30 minutes.

✓ Lately my walk has usually consisted of going from my home to the training ground, which is approximately 30 minutes.

Use 'walk' not 'work'. For recent habitual actions, present perfect 'has consisted' or present perfect continuous is appropriate. 'Pleasantly about' is awkward; use 'approximately' or 'about'.

× Also sometimes me and my girlfriend, we usually take walks around the city just to see how the city is.

✓ Also sometimes my girlfriend and I usually take walks around the city just to see how it is.

Use 'my girlfriend and I' as the subject (not 'me and my girlfriend'). Avoid redundant pronoun 'we'. Replace 'how the city is' with 'how it is' for natural phrasing.

× Maybe we catch up with some friends along the way.

✓ Maybe we catch up with some friends along the way.

This sentence is acceptable in present habitual context; no change needed.

× So that's how my work you recently have been.

✓ So that's how my walks have been recently.

Original is ungrammatical and jumbled ('my work you recently have been'). Correct to 'my walks have been recently' using 'walks' and present perfect for recent period.