Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct vocabulary and grammar, and add a brief specific example. Use a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and linking words. Avoid repetition and wrong word forms (use 'walking' not 'working' and 'for my mental health' not 'mental issues').

예시: Yes, I walk a lot because walking is good for my physical and mental health. For example, I usually walk for 30 minutes in the evening to relieve stress and stay fit.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence, fix grammar, and give a specific detail or short reason. Replace awkward phrases and avoid repetition. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: No, I didn’t often walk outside as a child because I preferred indoor activities. For instance, I spent most afternoons reading or playing video games at home.

제안: Correct word choice and expand slightly with a supporting reason or example. Use linking words to show cause and effect (e.g., 'because' or 'so').

예시: People like walking in parks because the green space and fresh air help reduce stress. For example, many joggers say a park walk clears their mind after a busy day.

제안: Use correct tense and a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason or detail about the place. Mention what you would do on the walk and why the location appeals to you.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the river in Sur Canon because it has well-maintained paths and outdoor exercise equipment. I would enjoy the scenery and stop at viewpoints to take photos.

제안: Use past tense correctly and make the answer concise. Give a brief reason and, if possible, mention when you last walked or when you plan to resume walking. Avoid repeating words.

예시: I haven’t gone for a walk recently because I’ve been studying for a university exam at home. I last walked about two weeks ago, but I plan to resume daily walks after my exams.

× Yes I do because I believe working is beneficial for my health and mental issues so I try to go for work whenever I have free time.

✓ Yes, I do, because I believe walking is beneficial for my physical and mental health, so I try to go for a walk whenever I have free time.

The student used 'working' and 'go for work' incorrectly. The question asks about walking, so use 'walking' and the noun phrase 'go for a walk'. Also 'mental issues' is unnatural here; use 'mental health' or 'mental well-being'. Add commas for clarity and correct collocation. Grammar problem type ID:6

× No I didn't because as a child I used to play for to stay at home and relax because I am more of indoor person rather than going out for a walk.

✓ No, I didn't, because as a child I used to stay at home and play or relax; I was more of an indoor person rather than someone who went out for walks.

Mixed and incorrect verb forms: 'used to play for to stay' is ungrammatical. Use 'used to' + base verb (used to stay, used to play). Also tense consistency: 'I am more of indoor person' should be past 'I was more of an indoor person.' Add articles ('an indoor person') and rephrase for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I think they like to work in parks because walking in parks helps them reduce the stress and clear their mind.

✓ I think they like to walk in parks because walking in parks helps them reduce stress and clear their minds.

Wrong verb 'work' instead of 'walk'. Use plural agreement 'their minds' or keep singular consistently. 'Reduce the stress' should be 'reduce stress' (no article needed). Verb tense is present simple which fits general statements. Grammar problem type ID:6

× If I have the chance, I like to go for a long walk. In Sur Canon, there is a long river which is famous for its fitness facilities.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to go for a long walk. In Sur Canon, there is a long river that is famous for its fitness facilities.

The conditional sentence about a hypothetical situation requires the second conditional: 'If I had...' + 'I would like...'. Also 'which' is acceptable but 'that' is more natural here; keep 'is' because the river's fame is a present fact. Grammar problem type ID:7

× Unfortunately I didn't go for a walk lately because I spend most of the time at home studying English for my university exam, so I usually I recently don't go for a walk.

✓ Unfortunately I haven't gone for a walk lately because I have spent most of my time at home studying English for my university exam, so recently I haven't been going for walks.

Use present perfect 'haven't gone' for actions in an unfinished time period ('lately'). Maintain consistent tense with 'have spent' and use 'recently I haven't been going' to express a current habit. Remove redundant words ('usually I recently don't'). Grammar problem type ID:5