Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence then give one brief reason and an example. Avoid repetition (‘prefer’ twice) and unnecessary words.

예시: Not really. I usually avoid long walks, but I enjoy walking occasionally in the evenings when the weather is cool and fresh. For example, I like a 30-minute stroll around my neighborhood park after dinner.

제안: Use correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary. Give a direct answer (Yes/No), a reason and a short example. Avoid incorrect words like 'offspring' or 'as a member'.

예시: Yes, I did. I often went for walks as a child because I enjoyed playing outdoors with my friends. For instance, we used to walk to a nearby playground after school to play football.

제안: Be concise and use natural vocabulary. Provide one or two clear reasons with linking words (because, for example). Avoid vague phrasing and repetition (‘pleasant surrounding’ twice).

예시: People often walk in parks because the environment is peaceful and the air is fresher. For example, families go there to relax while others exercise or walk their dogs.

제안: Answer directly with a location and reason. Keep sentences short and avoid awkward phrases (‘share all my feelings’, ‘with her’). Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I would like to take a long walk along a seaside promenade with my family because it would be peaceful and give us time to talk. For instance, walking beside the sea at sunset would be a nice chance to relax together.

제안: Use correct tense and be specific about time and place. Start with a clear past-time sentence, then give a reason or brief detail. Avoid phrases like 'as a member' and correct grammar (went, recently).

예시: Recently I went for a walk in the neighborhood at night because everyone was finished with work. We usually walk for about 20 minutes after dinner to relax.

× No, I don't prefer to walk a lot.

✓ No, I prefer not to walk a lot.

The original uses 'don't prefer' which is unnatural in English; preference is expressed with 'prefer' plus infinitive or 'prefer not to'. Use 'I prefer not to walk a lot' to convey the intended meaning.

× I prefer to walk only those days when the evenings are very fresh and pleasant.

✓ I prefer to walk only on days when the evenings are very fresh and pleasant.

Incorrect preposition 'those days' and slightly awkward phrasing. Use 'on days' for general habitual time expressions and remove 'those' for naturalness.

× As a member, yes definitely.

✓ As a child, yes, definitely.

The response uses 'member' which is incorrect in context; likely intended 'child'. This is a word choice error rather than grammar, but to fit the question about childhood use 'As a child'. Commas added for natural speech.

× I many times go to for walk when I was offspring because it was the time when I want to enjoy the outdoor activities with my friends so I go for a walk.

✓ I often went for walks when I was a child because it was a time when I wanted to enjoy outdoor activities with my friends, so I used to go for walks.

Multiple errors: incorrect adverb placement ('many times' -> 'often'), wrong preposition sequence ('go to for walk'), inconsistent tense (mixing present and past), wrong noun ('offspring' -> 'child'), and awkward repetition. Use past tense consistently for childhood, and 'used to' or 'went' for habitual past actions.

× According to me, individuals like to walk in parks because there is very pleasant surrounding and everyone was interested in their own kind of activities and they prefer to work in walks in parks.

✓ In my opinion, people like to walk in parks because the surroundings are pleasant, everyone is interested in different activities, and they prefer to take walks in parks.

'According to me' is not natural; use 'In my opinion'. 'There is very pleasant surrounding' has article and agreement errors: use plural 'surroundings are pleasant'. Tense inconsistency 'was interested' should be 'are interested' for general statements. 'Prefer to work in walks in parks' is incorrect—use 'prefer to take walks in parks'.

× The main reason is there is very clear surrounding and people can easily walk.

✓ The main reason is that the surroundings are very pleasant and people can walk easily.

Use 'that' to introduce the clause for clarity. 'There is very clear surrounding' has article and adjective choice issues; 'surroundings' (plural) and 'pleasant' are better. Also move adverb 'easily' after verb for natural word order.

× Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?

✓ Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?

This sentence is correct. No grammatical correction needed.

× I want to take a long walk whenever I get chance with the my family on a pleasant area because I want to share all my feelings with my family in a very pleasant way or at going a walk with her.

✓ I would like to take a long walk with my family in a pleasant place whenever I get the chance because I want to share my feelings with them.

Mixed tense and modal errors: for hypothetical/future preference use 'would like'. Remove extra 'the' before 'my family' and change 'on a pleasant area' to 'in a pleasant place'. 'Whenever I get the chance' needs 'the'. 'Share all my feelings with my family' is fine but avoid repetition; 'with them' is more natural. Remove unclear phrase 'or at going a walk with her'.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

The question 'lately' is acceptable but 'recently' is more natural with past simple 'did you go'. Either could work; this suggests a minor word choice improvement rather than a strict grammar error.

× As a member, I go for a walk lately at nights because all were free from our work chores and they prefer to go walk.

✓ Lately, I have been going for walks at night because everyone is free from work and prefers to go for a walk.

Multiple tense and word choice problems: 'As a member' is wrong—omit. Use present perfect continuous 'have been going' for recent habitual actions. 'At nights' -> 'at night' or 'in the evenings'. 'All were free from our work chores' mixes past and plural reference; use 'everyone is free from work'. 'They prefer to go walk' -> 'prefer to go for a walk'.