Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify meaning, correct grammar, limit length to 2–3 clear sentences, and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., how often you walk), then give one supporting detail with a linking word. Fix verb forms and articles.

예시: Yes, I walk quite often, especially after work. For example, I enjoy walking alone because I can see birds and enjoy the peaceful surroundings, so it helps me relax.

제안: Be specific about activities and use correct verbs and concise structure. Start with a direct statement about frequency, then give one or two specific activities using linking words like “for example” or “also.” Avoid repetition and incorrect word choices (e.g., 'working' → 'walking' or 'playing').

예시: Yes, I went outside often as a child. For example, I spent time with friends catching fish at the lake and playing games, which I found peaceful and fun.

제안: Address the question directly and use accurate vocabulary (use 'walk' not 'work'). Give one clear reason and support it with a specific detail, using linking words like 'because' or 'for instance.' Keep sentences complete.

예시: People like to walk in parks because the atmosphere is peaceful and the air is clean. For instance, walking among trees and flowers feels relaxing and helps reduce stress.

제안: Answer directly and correct word choice ('walk' not 'work'). State the place and give a clear reason using a linking word. Avoid unclear phrases like 'work like more 10 minutes' and keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along a quiet seaside road at night because the atmosphere is calm and cool. This would help me relax and clear my mind.

제안: Be specific about a recent time and place, use correct tense and vocabulary, and avoid unclear or contradictory words. Start with a clear past or recent statement, then give one concrete detail about the place and why you like it.

예시: Recently I walked around the small park near my house in the evening. The area is quiet and well-kept, which makes me feel comfortable and happy.

× Yeah, I usually work a lot and when walking I have some fun and see a lot of birds or the peaceful environment that I have. So it really not stressful when I walk alone.

✓ Yeah, I usually walk a lot, and when I walk I have some fun and see many birds and enjoy the peaceful environment. So it is not stressful when I walk alone.

The student repeatedly uses 'work' instead of the correct verb 'walk', which is a present tense usage error and results in incorrect meaning. 'See a lot of birds' is improved to 'see many birds' for count noun agreement (also fits present tense). 'It really not stressful' lacks the auxiliary verb 'is' for present tense; corrected to 'it is not stressful'. Suggestion: use the correct present-tense verb 'walk' and include the appropriate auxiliary verbs for states (is, are).

× Yes, definitely. When I was a child, I usually went working or having fun together and catching fish in the lake. I think that it's it's very peaceful and interesting when working on doing something with friends.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was a child, I usually went out to play or had fun with friends and caught fish in the lake. I think it was very peaceful and interesting to do things with friends.

The original mixes incorrect verb forms: 'went working' and 'having fun together' are ungrammatical in the past context. Use simple past forms 'went out', 'had fun', and 'caught' to match past tense. 'It's it's very peaceful' should be past 'it was' to maintain tense consistency. Also change 'working on doing something' to 'to do things' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: keep verbs in simple past for habitual past actions and use concise verb phrases.

× I think the reason people work in the park is the environment at the parks is very peaceful and relaxing. Working in the past with nice air or not pollution is very refreshing and.

✓ I think the reason people walk in the park is that the park environment is very peaceful and relaxing. Walking there with clean air and little pollution is very refreshing.

'Work in the park' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'walk' (present habitual). 'The environment at the parks is' should be 'the park environment is' for agreement and concision. 'Not pollution' is ungrammatical; use 'little pollution' or 'not much pollution'. The sentence ended abruptly with 'and.' Removed incomplete fragment. Suggestion: use correct present-tense verb 'walk', ensure noun-verb agreement, and express negatives properly ('little pollution').

× If I had an opportunity to work, I would like to walk along the road at night because the environment at night day is very relaxing and peaceful. I think that I can work like more 10 minutes.

✓ If I had an opportunity to walk, I would like to walk along the road at night because the nighttime environment is very relaxing and peaceful. I think that I can walk for about 10 more minutes.

Mixed wrong verb 'work' instead of 'walk' and inconsistent time expression 'night day'. Use 'walk' consistently. 'I can work like more 10 minutes' is ungrammatical; correct to 'I can walk for about 10 more minutes' to express duration. Suggestion: keep verb choice consistent and use natural expressions for time and duration ('for about 10 more minutes').

× Usually I would working at like near my house for a late working and it is very not confusing and really unjustful and every environment is very good make me happy.

✓ Usually I would walk near my house for a short walk in the evening, and it is not confusing; the surroundings are pleasant and make me happy.

'Would working' is incorrect; use 'would walk' or simple present 'I usually walk' for habitual actions. 'Like near my house' is colloquial and redundant; rephrase to 'near my house'. 'Late working' is unclear; likely 'short walk in the evening'. 'Very not confusing' and 'really unjustful' are wrong word choices; replace with 'not confusing' and 'pleasant' (unjustful is incorrect meaning). 'Every environment is very good make me happy' is ungrammatical; change to 'the surroundings are pleasant and make me happy'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms, choose appropriate adjectives, and simplify sentence structure for clarity.