Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 用词要自然、准确，避免使用不恰当或拼写错误的词（如 ambulate, lens, accumulate, practice my bodies）。句子应更简练，保持最多五句。可以用具体细节说明频率或路线。

예시: Yes, I do. I usually walk around my neighborhood park three or four times a week. Walking helps me stay fit and I find it relaxing after work. It also gives me a chance to chat with neighbours and clear my mind.

제안: 注意动词和搭配（不要用 worked 或 splendid approach），说法要直接并加具体细节，比如频率、活动内容或记忆。句子要连贯并使用连接词。

예시: Yes, I did. I often walked with my parents along the riverfront every weekend. Those walks were memorable because we would stop to feed the ducks and talk about our week. I also met several neighbourhood children and made lasting friendships.

제안: 避免重复和不自然的词（例如 working, require more oxygen）。给出更具体和常见的原因，並使用连词使句子更流畅。

예시: I think there are several reasons. Walking in parks gives people fresh air and a peaceful environment, which reduces stress. It’s also a social place where friends and families can meet and exercise together.

제안: 回答应更直接，避免冗长和不相关的表达（如 sharing the geography knowledge）。说明原因时提供具体细节和真实感受，用更自然的词汇。

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the riverfront boulevard near my home. I enjoy the scenery and the fresh air, and I often meet interesting people there which broadens my perspective.

제안: 避免时态错误和不恰当动词（例如 used to, work）。回答要具体说明地点、时间和活动内容，句子不宜重复。

예시: I went for a walk on the small streets inside my neighbourhood two days ago. I walked with my parents for about an hour, and we stopped to chat with a few neighbours. It was a good chance to catch up and get some exercise.

× I usually ambulate around the lens in my neighborhood.

✓ I usually walk around the lanes in my neighborhood.

学生使用了不自然或错误的动词（ambulate）和名词（lens）。应使用常见动词“walk”并注意名词复数和拼写。“lanes”指巷道或车道，更符合语境。建议使用常用词汇并检查拼写和语义。

× Walking is not only a splendid approach for me to accumulate with the others, but also can practice my bodies increasing the immunity to diseases like obesity or diabetes.

✓ Walking is not only a good way for me to socialise with others, but it can also help my body increase immunity to diseases like obesity or diabetes.

句中使用了不恰当的词（splendid approach, accumulate）和复数/可数名词错误（my bodies）。应使用“a good way”“socialise with others”“my body”并调整句子结构，‘can also help...’ 更自然。建议学习常用搭配（a way to do / help sb do）。

× During that time, I always worked with my parents along the riverfront avenues in my city.

✓ During that time, I always walked with my parents along the riverfront avenues in my city.

原句用worked与上下文不符，应使用描述过去习惯的动词“walked”。‘worked’意为工作，改变了句意。建议根据语境选用合适的过去式动词来表达习惯动作。

× That not only impressed me for it gives me a a splendid approach to enhanced relationship between my parents, but also made me make a variety of friends.

✓ That not only impressed me because it gave me a wonderful chance to see my parents' improved relationship, but it also helped me make a variety of friends.

原句结构混乱，时态不一致（presentuture 与 past 混用），重复词（a a），以及用词不当（splendid approach, enhanced relationship between my parents）。应使用过去时(gave, helped)并改为更自然表达。建议把因果和并列结构清晰分开，注意时态一致。

× I think there's a variety of reasons.

✓ I think there are a variety of reasons.

“a variety of reasons”是复数名词短语，应使用复数系动词“are”而不是缩写“there's”（there is）。建议注意主语的单复数一致。

× For example, working in the park is beneficial for them to require more oxygen, increasing their immunity to illnesses.

✓ For example, walking in the park helps them get more oxygen and increases their immunity to illnesses.

原句用法不自然：'working'用错且'require more oxygen'不合适，语义应为‘get/breathe more oxygen’并用并列结构替代不恰当的非谓语。建议使用常见动词搭配（help sb do / increase sth）。

× Besides, working in a park is beneficial for them to communicate with the others, establishing a good rapport.

✓ Besides, walking in a park helps them communicate with others and establish a good rapport.

同样将'working'改为'walking'，并用'help ... communicate'更自然。删除不必要的定冠词'the'和调整并列动词形式以保持平行结构。建议注意动词搭配和省略多余的冠词。

× To be honest, I think I'm about to walk along the riverfront Blvd. in my city again because walking in there is not only beneficial for me to communicate with the others and sharing the geography knowledge but also can expand my horizons becoming more open minded.

✓ To be honest, I would like to walk along the riverfront boulevard in my city again because walking there not only helps me communicate with others and share geographical knowledge, but it can also expand my horizons and make me more open-minded.

原句时态和语气不自然（I'm about to 表示将马上发生，不符合“如果有机会”的假设），短语搭配错误（walking in there, sharing the geography knowledge），缺少连贯并列结构。改为'would like'或'would go'更符合条件句语境，并调整并列动词形式和形容词'open-minded'。建议学习虚拟/委婉表达和并列结构的平行。

× Recently, I used to work in the internal roads of my neighborhood.

✓ Recently, I walked on the internal roads of my neighborhood.

“used to”通常表示过去常做但现在不做的习惯，与'recently'冲突；且'work'用词不当，应为'walked'。建议用'recently' + 过去式（walked），或若强调曾经的习惯可用'used to'单独表述。

× That happened around 2 days ago.

✓ That happened about two days ago.

数字表达及副词用法更自然为'about two days ago'而非'around 2 days ago'。此外写作中建议拼写数字小写单词。

× During that time I worked with my parents in there.

✓ During that time, I was walking there with my parents.

原句'in there'和'worked'不合适，应使用'was walking there'或'spent time walking there'来描述过去进行的活动。建议使用正确的动词和介词短语（walk there / in that area）。

× Working in there is not only beneficial for me to communicate with with my friends but also can make me communicate with the others better.

✓ Walking there not only helps me communicate with my friends, but it also allows me to communicate better with others.

重复使用'with'且'working'和'can make me communicate'用法不自然。应使用'walking'并用'help/allow sb to do'等常见结构，保持并列结构平行。建议避免词汇重复并学习常见动词搭配。