Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be slightly more concise and add a brief specific detail or frequency to make the answer more informative and natural. Use one linking phrase if you add a second point.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot; it’s my favorite form of exercise because it relaxes me and helps clear my mind. For example, I usually walk for 30 minutes every evening around my neighborhood.

제안: Correct grammar errors and combine short fragments into a smooth sentence. Add a specific example or frequency and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child my parents often took my sister and me for walks in the neighborhood, especially on weekends when we visited the local park.

제안: Avoid hesitation sounds and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, because, moreover) and give specific benefits of parks with concise phrasing.

예시: People like to walk in parks because they are usually close to home and very convenient. Moreover, parks offer trees, flowers and birds, which help people relax and enjoy nature, and playgrounds provide a pleasant spot for families.

제안: Fix tense consistency and remove repetition. Use a clear conditional phrase and provide one concrete sensory detail. Keep to 2–3 sentences with linking words.

예시: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along the riverside because I love hearing the gentle sound of flowing water. Also, I enjoy seeing the ducks and other animals that live there, which makes the walk more peaceful.

제안: Correct verb tense and word choice, remove filler words, and make the final clause coherent. State purpose clearly and add one specific detail about what you did or felt.

예시: Last week I went to the park near my home — it’s only a five- to ten-minute walk. I went to get some fresh air and clear my mind, and while walking I often sit on a bench to think of new ideas.

× Yes, walking is my favorite exercise and it makes me feel relaxed and clear my mind.

✓ Yes, walking is my favorite exercise and it makes me feel relaxed and clears my mind.

The verb after 'it' must agree with the third-person singular subject; 'clear' should be in third-person singular present form 'clears'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue involving verb conjugation. Suggestion: use 'clears' when the subject is 'it' or rephrase to 'and I can clear my mind.'

× Yes I did. When I was a child. My parents always bring me and my sister to take a walk in the neighbor.

✓ Yes I did. When I was a child, my parents always brought my sister and me to take a walk in the neighborhood.

Multiple errors: 'bring' should be past tense 'brought' to match 'when I was a child'; word order in 'my sister and me' is more natural; 'neighbor' is a noun meaning a person, but 'neighborhood' refers to the area. Suggestion: use past tense for habitual past actions and correct noun choice.

× Because park is near their home, so it's really convenient.

✓ Because the park is near their home, it's really convenient.

When referring to a specific park in general statements, use the definite article 'the park'. Also remove 'so' after 'because' for redundancy. Suggestion: say 'Because the park is near their home, it's really convenient.' or 'The park is near their home, so it's really convenient.'

× And also, umm, park. There are trees, flowers, birds and playgrounds in the park so people can have a quality time in the park, especially can feel nature, enjoy the nature.

✓ Also, the park has trees, flowers, birds and playgrounds, so people can have quality time there and especially feel and enjoy nature.

Use 'the park' with the definite article; avoid repeating 'in the park'; 'have a quality time' is incorrect—use 'have quality time' or 'spend quality time'; 'feel nature' and 'enjoy the nature' are awkward—use 'feel and enjoy nature' without 'the'. Suggestion: streamline and remove repetition.

× If I have a chance I would like to go to the Riverside because I love the I loved hearing the sounds of streams and the water flows.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to go to the riverside because I love hearing the sounds of streams and flowing water.

First, conditional form: for a hypothetical situation use 'If I had the chance' with 'would'. Also remove repeated 'I love the I loved'; keep present tense 'love' for general preference. Use 'riverside' lowercase and 'flowing water' or 'the flow of water' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use consistent conditional and correct noun forms.

× Also the animals near the Riverside is really cute and lovely so I would like to have a long walk be along the Riverside.

✓ Also, the animals near the riverside are really cute and lovely, so I would like to take a long walk along the riverside.

Subject-verb agreement: 'animals' is plural so use 'are' not 'is'. Use 'take a long walk along' rather than 'have a long walk be along'. 'Riverside' should be lowercase. Suggestion: ensure plural subjects have plural verbs and use natural collocations like 'take a long walk along'.

× Oh, last week I went to the park just nearby my home, around 5 or 10 minutes walking distance and I go to the park because I want to have a fresh air and I want to have some new ideas.

✓ Oh, last week I went to the park near my home, about five or ten minutes' walking distance, and I went to the park because I wanted some fresh air and new ideas.

Maintain past tense throughout since the action occurred last week: 'go' and 'want' should be 'went' and 'wanted'. Use 'near my home' rather than 'just nearby my home'; 'a fresh air' is incorrect—'fresh air' is uncountable without 'a'. Also use possessive form 'ten minutes' walking distance'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and correct article usage for uncountable nouns.

× So I go wander and walk in a little bit makes me.

✓ So I wandered and walked a little bit, which made me feel refreshed and inspired.

Original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. Use past tense 'wandered' and 'walked' to match context, and add a relative clause 'which made me...' to show effect. Suggestion: form complete sentences with clear subject and verb and describe the result explicitly.