Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise: give a clear topic sentence, one or two reasons with specific details, and avoid hesitation and repetition. Use linking words (but, however) correctly and appropriate grammar (I can't feel → I can feel; I'm sweat → I sweat). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot, especially in the colder months because I enjoy the fresh air and quiet streets. However, I tend to walk less in summer because I sweat easily and prefer indoor exercise.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence about childhood habit, then give 1–2 specific examples and a linking phrase to connect past and present. Remove filler words and correct grammar (I'm still enjoy → I still enjoy).

예시: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. I would explore the neighborhood with my friends and sometimes play in the local playground, and I still enjoy walking today as a hobby.

제안: Give a clear main reason and support it with specific details or examples. Use correct grammar and varied vocabulary (refresh their mind → clear their minds; reduce stress and improve mood). Avoid repetition and use linking words (because, so, therefore).

예시: People walk in parks mainly to clear their minds because being in nature helps reduce stress and improve mood. For example, the greenery and fresh air make it easier to relax and think more clearly.

제안: Provide a direct answer naming the place, then explain why with specific reasons or activities you would enjoy. Avoid vague phrases and hesitations; use correct expressions (one of my wish list → on my bucket list; watch people → watch locals). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I'd love to take a long walk in Central Park in New York because it's on my bucket list. I would enjoy observing local life, seeing joggers and street performers, and exploring the park's different landscapes.

제안: Answer directly with past simple, give 1–2 reasons why you went there and one specific detail about the walk. Remove fillers and repetitiveness (it's very close so, and also).

예시: Recently I walked along the streets by the Han River because it's close to my house and very convenient. I enjoy the riverside views and often stop to watch people rowing or to take photos.

× Of course yes I love walking because I I can't feel the fresh air especially in cold season but however in summer I don't like walking because I'm sweat a lot so I really don't like it.

✓ Of course. Yes, I love walking because I can feel the fresh air, especially in the cold season. However, in summer I don't like walking because I sweat a lot, so I really don't enjoy it.

Pronoun error: 'I I' is a repetition and must be removed. Also 'I'm sweat a lot' incorrectly uses the pronoun 'I' with an adjective; the correct form is 'I sweat a lot' (verb). Use connectors properly and punctuation to separate ideas. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

This sentence is already grammatically correct in past tense using 'did' for questions. No change necessary. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Sure, I always went outside to work with my friends or with my parents. Sometimes I played, uh, in a playground. So I really, I'm still enjoy walking, it's my hobby.

✓ Sure, I always went outside to walk with my friends or my parents. Sometimes I played in a playground. I still really enjoy walking; it's my hobby.

Incorrect verb form: 'to work' is likely a wrong word choice; 'to walk' fits context. 'I'm still enjoy' mixes 'am' with base verb; correct is 'I still enjoy' (simple present). Also simplify punctuation and remove filler. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× I think the main reasons is uh, is to refresh, refresh their mind so they can relieve their stress when they feel stressed a lot.

✓ I think the main reason is to refresh their minds so they can relieve stress when they feel very stressed.

Subject-verb agreement: 'main reasons is' mixes plural 'reasons' with singular 'is'—use singular 'reason' or change verb. Also 'refresh their mind' should be 'refresh their minds' to match plural subject; 'relieve their stress' can be simplified to 'relieve stress.' Grammar problem type ID: 27

× So I think it is very effective way to reduce their stress and mindset.

✓ So I think it is a very effective way to reduce their stress and improve their mindset.

Missing article: 'very effective way' needs 'a'. 'Reduce their stress and mindset' is incorrect: 'mindset' cannot be reduced; use 'improve their mindset.' This fixes word choice and adds the article. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× I would say Central Park in US because it is my one of wish list.

✓ I would say Central Park in the US because it is on my wish list.

Pronoun and article issues: 'in US' needs the article 'the US.' 'my one of wish list' is incorrect word order; correct phrase is 'on my wish list.' Grammar problem type ID: 12

× So I want to want to watching them, they, their citizens, uh, their life working during walking.

✓ So I want to watch them — the citizens — living their daily lives while walking.

Verb form and pronoun use: 'want to want to watching' is erroneous; correct is 'want to watch.' 'They, their citizens, their life working during walking' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'the citizens living their daily lives while walking.' Use gerund 'living' and proper noun phrase. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× If I have a chance, I really want it.

✓ If I had the chance, I would really want to go.

Conditional tense: The question asked a hypothetical (Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?), so use the second conditional: 'If I had the chance, I would...' Also 'want it' is vague; specify 'want to go.' Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Recently I walked the street near Han River because it's, it is located uh, near my house, so it is very close so, and also it's very umm, convenient to go there.

✓ Recently I walked along the street near the Han River because it is located near my house, so it is very close and very convenient to go there.

Preposition and article corrections: 'walked the street' should be 'walked along the street.' Add the article 'the' before 'Han River.' Remove redundant commas and fillers. 'Located near my house' is fine; combine clauses with 'and.' Grammar problem type ID: 9

× I really enjoy that.

✓ I really enjoy it.

Pronoun choice: 'that' is acceptable but 'it' is more natural referring to walking near the Han River. Use 'it' for clarity and naturalness. Grammar problem type ID: 12