Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and minor grammar errors, and limit to 2–3 supporting details. Use a linking word when adding an example.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot to keep fit. For example, I take a 30-minute walk around my neighborhood every evening, which helps me relax and stay healthy.

제안: Use correct tense and finish your idea. Give a clear reason and one specific detail. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid trailing off.

예시: Yes, I often walked outside as a child because my parents asked me to fetch groceries. As a result, I became more independent and confident when I was around neighbors.

제안: Organize the answer: give one main reason then support it with two clear points. Avoid filler sounds and repetition; use linking words like 'because' and 'also'.

예시: I think people prefer parks because they offer peace and fresh air. Because of that, people can exercise comfortably and feel relaxed, which helps them stay fit.

제안: Combine short fragments into full sentences and correct small errors. Start with a topic sentence, then add reasons using linking words such as 'because' or 'so'.

예시: I would like to take a long walk along the seaside because the fresh air and sound of the waves are very relaxing. I usually go for such walks in summer when the weather is pleasant.

제안: Use the correct past tense and produce a coherent sentence with specific details. Avoid fillers and complete the description with one or two concrete observations.

예시: Last month I walked along the beach. I saw a man fishing and enjoyed the fresh sea air, which made the walk very peaceful.

× Well, I do walk a lot of time to to stay healthy.

✓ Well, I walk a lot of the time to stay healthy.

The phrase 'a lot of time' is incorrect; native usage is 'a lot of the time' or 'a lot' alone. Also the auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary in a simple present affirmative sentence. Remove the extra 'do' and use 'a lot of the time' for naturalness.

× For example, everyday evening I walk around my neighborhood and this is my reality.

✓ For example, every evening I walk around my neighborhood, and this is my routine.

'Everyday' (one word) is an adjective meaning common; 'every evening' or 'everyday evening' is incorrect. Use 'every evening'. Also 'reality' is awkward here; 'routine' fits the context. Add a comma before the conjunction joining independent clauses.

× Yes, I often go for walks when I was a child because my parents asked me to go and bring the groceries home which makes me more confident and make me a a chance to.

✓ Yes, I often went for walks when I was a child because my parents asked me to go and bring the groceries home, which made me more confident and gave me a chance to do so.

This sentence mixes present tense 'go' with past time reference 'when I was a child.' Use past tense 'went.' Relative clause referring to past action must use past 'made' and 'gave.' Remove duplicate 'a' and complete the phrase 'a chance to do so.'

× I think the main reason is that parks give them more peaceful, umm stay healthy and also give them a sense of freedom to do their exercise and stay fit and healthy.

✓ I think the main reason is that parks make people feel more peaceful, help them stay healthy, and give them a sense of freedom to exercise and stay fit.

'Give them more peaceful' is ungrammatical; use 'make people feel more peaceful.' Parallel structure requires consistent verb forms: 'make... feel,' 'help them stay,' 'give them a sense.' Remove repetition 'stay healthy' and 'fit and healthy' to avoid redundancy.

× I would like to take a walk along the sea. To to have a fresh air and feel relaxing. Usually I do it in summer.

✓ I would like to take a walk along the sea to get some fresh air and feel relaxed. I usually do this in summer.

Do not use the article 'a' with uncountable 'air'; use 'fresh air.' The fragment 'To to have...' is incomplete; combine into one sentence with infinitive 'to get.' Use adjective 'relaxed' rather than 'relaxing' to describe how you feel. 'Usually I do it' is better as 'I usually do this.' Remove duplicate 'to.'

× Last month I go walks along the beach. Umm see the man fishing and take a fresh air and feel.

✓ Last month I went for walks along the beach. I saw men fishing, enjoyed the fresh air, and relaxed.

The time phrase 'Last month' requires past tense: change 'go' to 'went.' Use 'went for walks' or 'went walking.' 'See' should be past 'saw.' 'The man fishing' is unclear; use 'men' or 'a man' depending on meaning. 'Take a fresh air' is incorrect—use 'enjoyed the fresh air.' Finish the clause with a clear past-tense outcome 'relaxed.'