Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one brief supporting detail. Avoid repetition and minor grammar errors (use present simple: 'I walk' not 'I do' as main clause).

예시: Yes, I walk quite often. For example, I usually walk to buy breakfast or dinner nearby rather than taking a car, and sometimes I cycle if the weather is good.

제안: Use past tense correctly and give a clear topic sentence about childhood habits. Provide one specific detail and link sentences with a connector. Fix grammar (e.g., 'When I was a child, I usually walked with my friends').

예시: Yes, I often went for walks with my friends when I was a child. For instance, after school we would walk to the park together and play until dinner.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid unfinished sentences and be more precise about benefits (e.g., health, relaxation, scenery).

예시: I think people walk in parks because it's good for their health and helps them relax. Also, parks offer nice scenery and fresh air, which can improve mood and reduce stress.

제안: Answer directly and use conditional phrasing correctly. Provide one specific detail about the place and why you would choose it. Correct sentence structure and word order (e.g., 'I would like to go to a park that has a lake or waterfall').

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a scenic park with a lake or a waterfall. I enjoy those places because the views are calming and the sounds of water make walking more pleasant.

제안: Use past/simple present perfect correctly and be specific about recent activities. Clarify place names and avoid unclear phrases ('working' vs 'walking', 'carvery day' unclear). Keep it concise and coherent.

예시: Recently I have been walking in local areas such as Chandi and Pasar Senja with my friends most days. Sometimes I also go for solo walks in the neighborhood to clear my mind.

× When I was child I usually walking with my friends.

✓ When I was a child I usually walked with my friends.

The original sentence uses 'walking' (present participle) incorrectly for a past habitual action. Use the simple past 'walked' for past routines. Also add the article 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: use 'When I was a child I usually walked with my friends.'

× When I back to school I'm working with my friends.

✓ When I went back to school I worked with my friends.

The time phrase 'When I back to school' is ungrammatical and mixes tenses. For past events use past tense: 'went back' and 'worked'. 'I'm working' is present continuous which conflicts with the past time reference. Suggestion: use past simple for both verbs to show past routine.

× In my point of view, people do walking in parks because walks makes healthy, makes happy and then maybe can make.

✓ In my point of view, people walk in parks because walking makes them healthy and happy, and it can also relax them.

Several errors: 'do walking' is incorrect — use base verb 'walk' or noun 'walking'. 'walks makes healthy' has subject-verb agreement and missing object; 'walking makes people healthy' or 'walking makes them healthy' is correct. 'Makes happy' needs an object and adjective placement; 'and then maybe can make' is incomplete. Suggestion: simplify to 'people walk in parks because walking makes them healthy and happy, and it can also relax them.'

× Maybe I want go to parks with few beautiful like have a lake or or waterfall.

✓ Maybe I want to go to parks with a few beautiful features, like a lake or a waterfall.

Missing 'to' after 'want' and missing articles: use 'a few' not 'few' when positive, and 'a lake'/'a waterfall'. Also 'features' clarifies sentence structure. Suggestion: include 'to' and appropriate articles: 'I want to go to parks with a few beautiful features, like a lake or a waterfall.'

× I like to long walk in there.

✓ I like to take long walks there.

'To long walk' is ungrammatical. Use the collocation 'take a walk' or 'take long walks'. 'In there' is awkward; use 'there'. Suggestion: use 'I like to take long walks there.'

× Lately I have been working in Chandi, Suruono, Pasar Senja and carvery day with my friends and you.

✓ Lately I have been working in Chandi, Suruono, and Pasar Senja every day with my friends.

The phrase 'carvery day' is incorrect; likely intended 'every day'. Also list punctuation: include 'and' before last item. 'You' is unnecessary in this context. Keep present perfect continuous 'have been working' if action continues. Suggestion: 'Lately I have been working in Chandi, Suruono, and Pasar Senja every day with my friends.'

× Sometimes I go by myself.

✓ Sometimes I go by myself.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It matches the present/simple habitual context and needs no change.