Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct, natural topic sentence and avoid redundancy. Use correct collocations (leisure time, go for a walk) and a brief reason or frequency phrase. Keep to 1–2 sentences and correct grammar.

예시: Not really. I don’t walk very often, but I usually go for a walk when I have some free time to relax and get fresh air.

제안: Use past tense consistently and a clear topic sentence. Replace vague phrases with specific details and link reasons concisely. Avoid repeating verbs and correct articles (the/a) and countable nouns.

예시: Yes, I did. I often walked to the nearby park as a child so I could play with my friends and enjoy the fresh air.

제안: Begin with a clear general statement. Use correct verbs and pluralization, avoid repetition, and add two specific reasons connected with linking words. Keep it concise and grammatical.

예시: People enjoy walking in parks because they can see green trees and flowers and escape city noise. Also, they can meet friends and watch outdoor activities like tai chi or children playing.

제안: Give one fluent sentence stating the place, then add brief specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases like “I heard a lot.” Use natural expressions to describe features.

예시: I would like to take a long walk in the large park near my home because it has varied walking paths, playgrounds, and lakes, so I could enjoy scenery and relax.

제안: Use a clear past reference and concise supporting detail. Avoid mixing habitual present with a past event in the same answer; choose past tense for a recent outing or present simple for routines. Add a short reason or result.

예시: Lately I went for a walk in the park near my home. It was pleasant and peaceful, and I also jogged there with my friends.

× Not really, whenever I get a leisure time, I usually go for a walk on that time.

✓ Not really. Whenever I have leisure time, I usually go for a walk then.

The sentence uses awkward tense and article usage. 'Get a leisure time' is incorrect — use 'have leisure time' (present simple) to match habitual action. 'On that time' is incorrect; use 'then' or 'at that time'. Also split into two sentences for clarity.

× Yes, of course, I usually go outside to have a walk when I was a child so I can play with my friends in the park or I can enjoy the time and get a fresh air.

✓ Yes, of course. I usually went outside to take a walk when I was a child so I could play with my friends in the park, enjoy the time, and get fresh air.

Mixing present ('usually go') with past ('was a child') is inconsistent. Use past tense 'went' and modal past 'could' to match. 'Have a walk' is less natural than 'take a walk'. 'Get a fresh air' is incorrect article usage; 'fresh air' (uncountable) needs no article.

× People love to work in park because they can make a new friends there and they can see the greenery greenery around and they relax theirself. And they also watched outdoor activities which you.

✓ People love to walk in parks because they can make new friends there, see the greenery around, and relax. They can also watch outdoor activities.

Multiple issues: 'work in park' is wrong verb and article — should be 'walk in parks'. 'a new friends' mixes singular article with plural noun — use 'new friends'. 'greenery greenery' is repetition; use 'the greenery' or 'greenery'. 'relax theirself' is wrong reflexive pronoun and form — use 'relax' or 'relax themselves'. 'watched' tense is wrong; use 'watch' to match general habit. Removed trailing fragment 'which you' as incomplete.

× I would like to take a long walk. To the park, which is near my home because I heard a lot. It's a big park and there are a lot of activities and different types of swings are there so.

✓ I would like to take a long walk in the park near my home because I have heard a lot about it. It's a big park with many activities and different types of swings.

Sentence fragments and awkward structure: 'To the park, which is near my home because I heard a lot.' should be combined and clarified. Use 'have heard a lot about it' (present perfect) to indicate information learned. 'Different types of swings are there so' is wordy; restructure to 'with many activities and different types of swings.'

× I went for a walk lately to the park which is near my home. It's very pleasant and peaceful. I always do jogging with my friends over there.

✓ I went for a walk recently to the park near my home. It was very pleasant and peaceful. I usually jog with my friends there.

Use 'recently' instead of 'lately' for a single past action. 'It's' should be 'It was' to match the past action 'I went'. 'I always do jogging' is unnatural; use 'I usually jog' for habitual action. Adjust tense consistency across sentences.