Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời khá tự nhiên và rõ ý nhưng còn lặp cấu trúc và có vài lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp. Hãy rút ngắn câu mở đầu, tránh dùng cụm từ không chính xác (‘a kind of person who is very active’), dùng liên từ hợp lý và giữ tối đa 3 câu để súc tích. Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: thời gian, nơi thường đi bộ, hoạt động cùng thú cưng) để tăng điểm nội dung.

예시: I don't walk a lot, but I usually take my dog for a short walk in the park in the evenings. It helps me relax after work and clear my mind before dinner.

제안: Trả lời có cấu trúc rõ ràng và chi tiết, nhưng cần tránh tiếng ừm, và bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp. Có thể thêm một ví dụ cụ thể (một hoạt động hoặc địa điểm cụ thể) để làm cho câu trả lời sinh động hơn. Giữ độ dài tối đa 3 câu.

예시: Yes, I did. As a child I often explored the nearby parks and streets with my friends, collecting interesting leaves and playing hide-and-seek in the afternoons.

제안: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng có một vài lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ không chính xác ('take care to get' không phù hợp, 'de stress' nên 'de-stress'). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, dùng liên từ để nối ý và đưa ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: đi bộ buổi sáng, ngồi đọc sách). Tránh lặp từ 'relax' nhiều lần.

예시: People walk in parks to enjoy fresh air and green surroundings. For example, many go for a morning stroll or sit on a bench to read and relax after work.

제안: Câu trả lời thể hiện sở thích rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi về thì (nên dùng 'I would' thay vì 'I'll') và một vài cấu trúc thiếu mượt mà. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu trả lời ngắn, sau đó nêu 2-3 lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: âm thanh của nước, không khí trong lành, vắng người) với liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I would like to take a long walk in the mountains, especially along a stream. The sound of running water and the fresh, cool air would help me relax and enjoy the scenery.

제안: Câu trả lời rõ ràng, cụ thể và tự nhiên; có thông tin về địa điểm, hoạt động và cảm nhận. Để tốt hơn, hãy thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (một món ăn hoặc một điểm tham quan) và dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn ở đầu để cấu trúc tốt hơn.

예시: Recently I walked around Guntur City during a trip. I explored local markets, tried spicy biryani from a street stall, and enjoyed sightseeing with my friends.

× I'm not a kind of person who is very active, but I usually go for a walk with my pets when I have free time.

✓ I'm not the kind of person who is very active, but I usually go for a walk with my pets when I have free time.

'a kind of person' is unnatural here; the fixed phrase is 'the kind of person' when referring to a specific type of person. Use 'the' to specify this category. Grammar problem type ID:17

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to go for a walk when you were a child?

'Have a walk' is not the usual collocation in English; 'go for a walk' or 'take a walk' are correct. The question already uses past tense 'did... were', so keep past reference. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I was very curious about the outside world, so I often went out to explore the streets and parks near my home and discovered new things with my friends.

✓ I was very curious about the outside world, so I often went out to explore the streets and parks near my home and discover new things with my friends.

After 'went out to' the base verb (infinitive) without -ing is used: 'went out to explore' and parallel structure requires 'discover' not 'discovered'. Using 'discovered' breaks parallelism and tense consistency. Grammar problem type ID:8

× I think parks have many trees and a clear atmosphere, so people go there to take care to get some fresh air and relax.

✓ I think parks have many trees and a clean atmosphere, so people go there to get some fresh air and relax.

'clear atmosphere' is unnatural collocation; 'clean atmosphere' or 'fresh air' is better. Also 'to take care to get' is incorrect phrase; simply 'to get' is correct. Grammar problem type ID:13

× When they need a break from their busy daily work, they can take a walk in the park to de stress and clear their minds.

✓ When they need a break from their busy daily work, they can take a walk in the park to de-stress and clear their minds.

'de stress' should be written as 'de-stress' or 'destress' as a single word or hyphenated; spacing makes it two words which is incorrect. Grammar problem type ID:8

× If I had the chance, I'll take a long walk in the mountains or along a stream because it's more of a natural experience too for me.

✓ If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the mountains or along a stream because it would be more of a natural experience for me.

In conditional type 2 (unreal present/future) use 'would' not 'will'. Also use parallel conditional 'would be' for result clause and remove unnecessary 'too' or place appropriately. Grammar problem type ID:4

× I love exploring new places, breathing fresh air and enjoy the peaceful scenery to relax and clear my mind.

✓ I love exploring new places, breathing fresh air, and enjoying the peaceful scenery to relax and clear my mind.

Maintain parallel gerund form: 'exploring', 'breathing', 'enjoying'. Mixing 'enjoy' breaks parallel structure; use 'enjoying'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

'Lately' with question about recent past typically uses present perfect (have you gone) rather than past simple (did you go). Use present perfect to connect past action to present. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I just got back from my trip to Guntur City. I walked around the city to explore new places and try the local cuisine, which was delicious.

✓ I just got back from my trip to Guntur City. I walked around the city to explore new places and try the local cuisine, which was delicious.

Sentence is acceptable; no grammatical correction needed. No change required. Grammar problem type ID:22

× It was fun to do this with my friends because we discovered interesting street food and sights together.

✓ It was fun to do this with my friends because we discovered interesting street food and sights together.

Sentence is grammatically correct; past tense 'was' and 'discovered' are consistent. No change needed. Grammar problem type ID:5