Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep answers concise and directly linked to the question. Start with a clear topic sentence about how often you walk, then give 1–2 specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. My job in the operating room requires me to move between wards, bring supplies and speak with patients, and I also walk to the canteen during breaks, so I walk many times each day.

제안: Answer directly about the past frequency using past tense and a clear topic sentence. Then give one or two specific memories or activities, using linking words like 'usually' or 'often'. Avoid vague phrases like 'I can't remember'.

예시: Yes, I often went outside to play when I was a child. Usually my friends and I played football in the neighborhood or walked to the local park to hang out after school.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence with 1–2 specific reasons and link them coherently. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. 'fresh air', 'relieve stress') and correct grammar. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' to connect ideas.

예시: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy fresh air and natural scenery, which helps reduce stress. For example, a brisk walk among trees can improve mood and boost physical fitness.

제안: Use conditional structure correctly ('If I had the chance...') and give specific reasons why you chose the place. Avoid vague or overly casual claims. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' and 'also'.

예시: If I had the chance, I would go to Lumphini Park because it is popular and lively. I enjoy walking there since I can meet different people and relax in a large green space.

제안: Answer in past tense for a recent event and give one specific detail about the place or purpose. Use correct sentence structure and linking words such as 'to' and 'because'. Keep it concise.

예시: I walked in my village last week. There is a small park nearby where I exercise, so I usually go there for a short workout.

× Yes, one day I walk a lot because maybe because I'm my work make me walk a lot in the OR room that I must go to bring everything and talk to patient and go to canteen on.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot on some days because my work in the OR requires me to walk a lot; I have to bring things, talk to patients, and go to the canteen.

Errors: incorrect present tense forms and word order, redundant words, missing articles, and awkward phrasing. The student used 'one day' incorrectly and mixed contractions and clauses. Use 'I walk a lot on some days' or 'I walk a lot at work' to express habitual actions. Use 'my work in the OR requires me' for subject-verb agreement and clarity. Add articles ('the OR', 'the canteen') and pluralize 'patients'. Use punctuation to separate ideas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× When I was young, I play with my friend, but I can't remember that how many times that I go outside to walk with my friend, but I go to hang out with my friend outside.

✓ When I was young, I played with my friends, but I can't remember how many times I went outside to walk with them; I often hung out with my friends outdoors.

Errors: incorrect verb tense usage for past events and inconsistent pronouns. Use past simple ('played', 'went', 'hung out') to describe childhood activities. Change 'my friend' to 'my friends' if referring to more than one; use pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition. Remove unnecessary words like 'that' and fix word order. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× In my opinion when we walk in park it you can get the fresh air that can help and fulfill your body. Mental health and physical can be helpful.

✓ In my opinion, when we walk in a park we can get fresh air, which benefits our physical and mental health.

Errors: awkward structure, missing articles, incorrect clause connectors, and unclear subject. Add 'a' before 'park' and use a relative clause ('which benefits') to link ideas. Combine 'mental health and physical' into 'physical and mental health' for natural order. 'Fulfill your body' is not idiomatic; use 'benefit' instead. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× If I have a chance, I will go to Sulumpini Park, that is the most popular park nowadays in Thailand because we can meet everyone, every people and maybe you can find your soul mate in the future.

✓ If I had the chance, I would go to Sulumpini Park; it is one of the most popular parks in Thailand because you can meet many people and maybe find your soulmate.

Errors: conditional tense mismatch and awkward phrasing. For a hypothetical preference, use the second conditional ('If I had the chance, I would...'). Use 'it is one of the most popular parks' or 'the most popular' if accurate. Replace 'every people' with 'many people' and 'soul mate' with the single word 'soulmate'. Use consistent modality and concise phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× I go for walk in my village that I walk for exercise and is have a little park that you can exercise over there.

✓ I went for a walk in my village; I walk for exercise, and there is a small park where you can exercise.

Errors: tense inconsistency and articles, incorrect 'is have', and awkward relative clauses. Use past tense 'went' for a recent action (or 'I go for walks in my village' for habitual). Use 'there is a small park' for existence and 'where you can exercise' for purpose. Remove redundant words and fix verb forms. Grammar problem type ID: 6