Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ chính xác; rút gọn câu để tự nhiên hơn; bổ sung liên từ hợp lý. Lưu ý: dùng thì đúng (every morning → every morning/each morning; a good habit makes), tránh câu dài lủng củng và câu chưa kết thúc.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot, especially every morning with my family. It helps me stay fit and feel happier, and we enjoy chatting while we walk.

제안: Sắp xếp lại câu để mạch lạc hơn, tránh lặp từ, dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn (e.g., 'my father and I'). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động giúp câu sinh động.

예시: Yes. When I was a child my father and I usually walked to the park every afternoon because he believed it was good for my mental well-being. We often fed the ducks and talked about our day.

제안: Cải thiện mạch lạc và từ vựng; tránh tiếng ồ ạt và sửa các lỗi ngữ pháp (it help → it helps; 'nearest several reason' không đúng). Sắp xếp ý: nêu 2-3 lý do cụ thể với liên từ như 'firstly/also/finally'.

예시: There are several reasons. Firstly, parks offer space for exercise which helps people stay healthy. Also, parks provide fresh air and a peaceful environment where people can relax or observe nature.

제안: Sửa lỗi từ và phát âm trong câu (talk → take; 'a the Tokyo' → 'to Tokyo'); hoàn thành ý cuối cùng. Thêm lý do cụ thể cho việc chọn địa điểm và giữ câu ngắn gọn, tránh dang dở.

예시: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in Tokyo because it is a vibrant city where you can try fresh sushi and ramen, explore busy neighbourhoods and visit beautiful parks.

제안: Sửa lỗi từ vựng và câu không đúng ('Your past' nên là 'It is' or 'The park'); tránh lặp và làm rõ tần suất. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động khi đi bộ để câu sống động hơn.

예시: Recently I went for a walk in the park near my house because it's convenient. I often go there with my parents; we enjoy walking along the lake and doing light exercises together.

× Yes, of course I walk a lot, especially during every morning I usually walk with my family.

✓ Yes, of course I walk a lot; especially every morning I usually walk with my family.

The original sentence has awkward adverb placement and redundancy. 'During every morning' is incorrect; use 'every morning'. Also punctuation needed to separate clauses. Suggest placing time expressions before the verb or after and using a semicolon or period for clarity.

× I think a good habit make me feel happy and.

✓ I think a good habit makes me feel happy.

Subject 'a good habit' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' (third-person singular). Also the sentence ended with an extra 'and' and was incomplete; remove it to form a complete sentence.

× To be honest, when I was a child I went outside to have a walk with my father, you know, my father said that is good for my mental well-being.

✓ To be honest, when I was a child I went for walks with my father; my father said that it was good for my mental well-being.

Use 'went for walks' or 'went for a walk' for idiomatic phrasing. Reported speech about past advice needs past tense: 'said that it was'. Also replace the comma splice with a semicolon and remove filler 'you know' for clarity.

× So I and my father usually walk to the park every afternoon.

✓ So my father and I usually walked to the park every afternoon.

Pronoun order: 'my father and I' is preferred. Since referring to past habit, use past tense 'walked'. Also 'usually' can remain. This fixes pronoun placement and tense consistency.

× Nearest several reason then, uh, people like to go in the parks.

✓ There are several reasons why people like to go to the parks.

Original is ungrammatical word order and missing 'there are'. Use 'There are several reasons why...' to introduce multiple reasons. Use 'go to the parks' not 'go in the parks'.

× Firstly, many people like to go because it help us stay, uh, give it and stay healthy.

✓ Firstly, many people like to go because it helps us stay healthy and feel refreshed.

Subject 'it' referring to going to the park is singular so verb should be 'helps'. The phrase 'give it' is unclear; replace with 'feel refreshed' or similar. Remove fillers and place adjectives/adverbs properly.

× Also it help many people explore new things and fresh air.

✓ Also it helps many people experience new things and enjoy fresh air.

Use 'experience' instead of 'explore' for abstract 'new things', and 'enjoy fresh air' is the correct collocation. Also add 'helps' for subject-verb agreement.

× If I had the chance, I would like to talk a the Tokyo, the capital city of Japan because I heard that Tokyo is a vibrant city with many local food such as fresh sushi and hot ramen and I really.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk around Tokyo, the capital city of Japan, because I have heard that Tokyo is a vibrant city with many local foods such as fresh sushi and hot ramen, and I really want to go there.

Original used 'talk a the Tokyo' which is incorrect; likely meant 'walk around Tokyo'. Use present perfect 'have heard' for background information still relevant. 'Local food' should be plural 'local foods'. Finish the sentence with 'I really want to go there' for completeness.

× To be honest, I went for a walk in the park near my house because it is very convenient.

✓ To be honest, I went for a walk in the park near my house because it was very convenient.

When narrating a past event ('I went'), the reason clause should also use past tense 'was' for tense consistency.

× I often go there with my parents. Your past is peaceful and a great place to relax and do exercise together.

✓ I often went there with my parents. The park was peaceful and a great place to relax and exercise together.

Sentence had 'Your past' which is incorrect; likely meant 'The park'. Also keep past tense consistency: 'often went' and 'was peaceful'. 'Do exercise' is better as 'exercise'.