Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体能表达意思，但有语法和用词错误（如“work a lot”应为“walk a lot”或“walk a lot every day”；“makes me become healthier”不自然）。句子略长且重复信息，建议用更直接的主题句并用一两个具体细节。注意句子数量不超过5句，使用连词如“so”或“therefore”使逻辑更清晰。

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. My university campus is very large, so I walk around 10,000 steps a day. As a result, I feel fitter and more energetic than before.

제안: 能够回答并提供原因，但有词汇和语法错误（如“to go outside”可以更自然为“to take me out”或“to go for walks”；“strength my body”应为“strengthen my body”）。建议使用更自然的短语并补充一两个具体例子或者活动细节，使用连接词如“because”或“so”保持逻辑。

예시: Yes, I did. My mother used to take me out for a walk every week because she believed it would naturally strengthen my body. We often walked in a nearby park and played on the grass afterwards.

제안: 回答有核心点但表达不够准确，有语法错误（如“makes”应为“make”；“silent”用法不自然，建议用“peaceful”或“quiet”）。第二句不完整且措辞笨拙（“help people relax and feel”需要补全）。建议给出更具体原因并举例，如空气好、景色美、适合运动或社交，用连词如“because”或“for example”。

예시: People like walking in parks because of the fresh air and green scenery, which make the place peaceful and pleasant. For example, seeing birds and flowers helps me relax and forget busy thoughts.

제안: 回答意思模糊且有明显词汇错误（如“wait the Great Wall”应为“walk along the Great Wall”或“visit the Great Wall”；句子冗长且重复，多处时态和连贯性问题）。建议先直接回答地点，然后用一两句简洁的原因或回忆支持，注意时态一致并使用连接词如“because”或“so”。

예시: I would love to walk along the Great Wall. I wanted to visit it as a child, but it was too far from my hometown, so I haven't had the chance yet.

제안: 回答存在时态和词汇混用（“usually went…lately”冲突，应该用现在完成或现在时；“near from my house”应为“near my house”；“talk walk my dogs”错误，应为“walk my dogs”）。形容词使用不正确（“relaxable”不存在，“enjoyful”用法生硬）。建议用简洁正确的时态和自然形容词，并补充一两个具体细节如时间或活动。

예시: Lately I have been walking in Ruehu Park, which is close to my house. My family and I often walk our dogs there in the evenings, and it's a pleasant, relaxing place to unwind.

× My university is so large that I need to work a lot every day, which makes me become healthier than before.

✓ My university is so large that I need to walk a lot every day, which makes me healthier than before.

句子使用现在时描述经常性的动作：应使用习惯性动词 'walk'（走路）而不是 'work'（工作）。另外结构中不需要 'become'，直接用 'makes me healthier' 更自然、语法正确。建议：遇到表示经常性动作或事实时用一般现在时和正确的动词搭配。

× For example, I need to work about 10,000 steps every day.

✓ For example, I need to walk about 10,000 steps every day.

原句使用 'work' 与 'steps' 不搭配。应使用 'walk' 表示走路。'steps' 与数词搭配是正确的，所以问题是动词用错。建议：注意动词与名词搭配，表示行走应用 'walk'。

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child? / Yes, I did. When I was a child, my mother always took me to go outside every week because she thought it was a great way to relax and strength my body naturally.

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child? / Yes, I did. When I was a child, my mother always took me outside every week because she thought it was a great way to relax and strengthen my body naturally.

句子背景是过去，应使用过去式。'took me to go outside' 冗余且不自然，改为 'took me outside'。动词 'strength' 写法错误，正确为动词 'strengthen'。建议：表过去习惯动作用过去式，注意动词词形（动词/名词的区别）。

× Because there are lots of animals and plants in parks, which can makes the whole environment more comfortable and silent.

✓ Because there are lots of animals and plants in parks, which can make the whole environment more comfortable and quiet.

'can makes' 主谓不一致，应为 'can make'；'silent' 用于人或场合不太恰当，描述环境更常用 'quiet'。这是动词形式和词汇选择问题，涉及助动词后动词原形规则。建议：助动词或情态动词后用动词原形；描述环境用 'quiet'。

× It is a useful way to help people relax and feel.

✓ It is a useful way to help people relax and feel refreshed.

原句 'feel' 后缺少补语，句子不完整。需要一个形容词如 'refreshed' 表达感受。建议：检查动词后是否需要宾语或补语，使句子完整。

× I would like to wait the Great Wall to take a long walk. ... but I still wanted to wait.

✓ I would like to visit the Great Wall to take a long walk. ... but I still want to visit it.

'would like to' 后接动词 'visit' 而不是 'wait'（等待）；'wait' 用错语义。句中表达愿望应保持现在或将来时态，'still wanted'（过去时）与上下文愿望不一致，改为 'still want'。建议：区分 'wait' 与 'visit' 等动词含义；表达现在仍有的愿望用一般现在时或 'would like to'。

× When I was a child, I wanted to visit the Great Wall, but it is in Beijing, which was far from my home, so I don't have the chance to visit it,

✓ When I was a child, I wanted to visit the Great Wall, but it was in Beijing, which was far from my home, so I didn't have the chance to visit it,

描述过去时的情况时，整个句子应使用过去时：'is' 和 'don't have' 应改为过去式 'was' 和 'didn't have'。建议：讲述过去经历时保持时态一致，整句用过去式。

× Where did you go for a walk lately? / I usually went for a walk at Ruehu Park lately because this park is near from my house and my family and I always talk walk my dogs there.

✓ Where did you go for a walk lately? / I usually go for a walk at Ruehu Park lately because this park is near my house and my family and I always walk our dogs there.

'usually' 和 'lately' 混用会引起时态冲突；如果强调习惯应用一般现在时 'usually go'。'near from' 是错误搭配，应为 'near' 或 'not far from'。'talk walk' 拼写并且词序错误，应为 'walk our dogs'（我们的狗）。建议：表达习惯用一般现在时；注意固定搭配 'near my house'；主语和物主代词一致使用 'my family and I' 后接动词 'walk our dogs'。

× It is relaxable and. Enjoyful.

✓ It is relaxing and enjoyable.

'relaxable' 和 'enjoyful' 用法不自然或错误，正确形容词是 'relaxing'（令人放松的）和 'enjoyable'（令人愉快的）。句子断句错误并且有多余句号。建议：使用常见形容词形式并注意标点与句子完整性。