Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子不够流利且有重复、语法和词汇错误（“I used I used”, “EVAS”, “couldn't walk away”）。回答缺乏清晰的主题句与连贯支持细节。建议用一句明确的开头陈述现在的情况，然后用一两句解释原因并给出频率或例子，注意时态和常用词汇的正确使用。

예시: I used to walk a lot, but now I rarely do because I usually drive to work and go shopping by car. For example, I take my car five days a week for commuting, so I don’t have time for long walks.

제안: 回答总体可以理解，但有语法错误（时态与数的一致，如“when I was child”, “my family don't”），表达重复且结尾不完整。建议以一句清晰主题句回答，然后用具体细节（活动、频率、地点）支撑，并注意句子完整与语法一致。

예시: Yes. When I was a child I spent a lot of time outdoors because my family didn’t have a TV. Every day I would go for a walk in the city, play in parks and hang out with friends after school.

제안: 回答逻辑混乱且用词不准确（“oral study”, “working on the stress of our part”），句子过长且缺少清晰连词。建议先给出简短原因句，然后用一两句具体说明公园的好处（新鲜空气、自然景观、放松身心），使用恰当连接词使表达连贯。

예시: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax from busy lives. For instance, parks offer fresh air and green scenery, which reduce stress and make it easier to think clearly.

제안: 回答含义不清且时态、语气使用错误（“I won't walk” vs 想表达愿望），句子重复且未完成。建议先明确地点和意愿（例如想去山里散步），然后解释原因和预期感受，注意使用条件句和完整句子。

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the mountains with my dog because it would be a fun challenge. I think finishing the hike would make me feel proud and closer to my pet.

제안: 答案基本清楚但时态不一致（问及最近发生的事应使用过去式或现在完成时），并有冗余与表达不自然（“when I see his face, smile face”）。建议用正确时态（e.g. I went / I’ve been going）并简洁描述频率与具体观察。

예시: Lately I’ve been going to a nearby park with my dog almost every day. It helps us relax, and my dog often meets other dogs, which makes him look very happy.

× I used I used to walk a lot but nowadays I have a EVAS so I couldn't walk away.

✓ I used to walk a lot, but nowadays I have an EV and I can't walk as much.

句中有多处问题：1) “I used I used to” 有重复，应为 “I used to” 表示过去常常做某事。2) “I have a EVAS” 中 EVAS 拼写/缩写不明，推测为 “an EV”（electric vehicle，电动车），冠词用“an”。3) “I couldn't walk away” 时态和含义不对，原意应为“不能像以前那样经常走路”，应使用现在时的否定“can't”或“can’t walk as much”。因此改为“I used to walk a lot, but nowadays I have an EV and I can't walk as much.” 建议：注意不要重复短语，确认缩写或名词拼写并使用合适的冠词；描述现在无法做某事用现在时否定（can't）。

× I just, uh, driving my car for work and uh, shopping.

✓ I just drive my car for work and shopping.

原句使用现在分词“driving”但缺主谓一致，且前面有“just”表示习惯性动作应使用一般现在时。应把动词改为原形/现在时“drive”。建议：描述日常习惯用一般现在时（I drive），不要随意使用现在分词作为主句谓语。

× Yes, when I was child my family don't have a TV so I always felt boring in my home.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my family didn't have a TV, so I always felt bored at home.

问题包括：1) 缺不定冠词，应为“a child”。2) 主从句时态及主谓不一致，“my family don't have” 应为过去时 “didn't have”。3) “felt boring” 用法错误，应该用“felt bored” 表示“感到无聊”。4) 介词用错，“in my home” 更常见为“at home”。建议：注意使用冠词，过去描述用过去时，形容人的情绪用形容词表示感受（bored），以及固定短语“at home”。

× So every day I went out and have a walk, hang out in the city and.

✓ So every day I went out, took a walk, and hung out in the city.

句中时态不一致：先用过去时“went out”，后面却用现在时“have a walk”。应把后续动词改为过去时以与主句一致，例如“took a walk”和“hung out”。另外省略了句尾内容，应完整结句。建议：描述过去习惯全部使用过去时，常见表达“take a walk”的过去式是“took a walk”。

× Because nowadays life is moving really fast, so people always feel stressed from work and oral study and working on the stress of our part can enjoy the fresh air, see the beautiful trees around.

✓ Because life is moving really fast nowadays, people often feel stressed from work and study. Going for a walk in a park lets us enjoy fresh air and see the beautiful trees.

原句结构混乱，多余重复连接词（Because... so），并且“oral study and working on the stress of our part” 表达不清楚。把句子拆成两句：第一句说明生活快、导致压力；第二句说明去公园的好处。建议：避免同时使用Because和so，保持句子简洁；将复杂想法分成短句，使用明确的名词短语（work and study）和动名词短语（Going for a walk）来表达目的或结果。

× If I had a chance, I won't walk in the mountains with my dog and I think it's really interesting and it's a big challenge for me and my and my pet.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk in the mountains with my dog; I think it would be really interesting and a big challenge for both me and my pet.

条件句使用不当：与虚拟条件（If I had）搭配时，主句应使用情态动词的过去式形式或would + 动词，而不是 “won't”。因此用“would like to”或“would walk”。并修正重复“and my and my pet”为“both me and my pet”。建议：第二条件句（与现在事实相反）用 If + past, 主句用 would/could/might + 动词。

× But I think if I complete the meet the challenge, it can make me.

✓ But I think if I meet and complete the challenge, it would be rewarding for me.

原句“complete the meet the challenge” 词序和用词混乱，且“it can make me” 不完整、意义不明。应改为清晰表达“如果我克服挑战，会让我受益/很有成就感”，用“would be rewarding” 更自然。建议：确保动词搭配正确（meet/complete the challenge）并完成句子意义。

× Actually, I go to the nearby parks with my dog every day and I think it's the best way for us to feel relaxed and my dog can make some new friends when I see his face, smile face.

✓ Actually, I go to the nearby parks with my dog every day, and I think it's the best way for us to relax. My dog can make some new friends, and I enjoy seeing his smiling face.

原句中“feel relaxed” 可以用“to relax” 更自然；“when I see his face, smile face” 表达生硬，应改为“seeing his smiling face”。保持句子清晰并用逗号分开两层意思。建议：用不定式“to relax” 表示目的；描述表情用“smiling face” 或 “his smile”。