Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ตอบให้ตรงประเด็น ใช้ประโยคเริ่มต้นชัดเจน อธิบายสั้น ๆ ด้วยเหตุผลหรือความถี่ และลดคำเติมหรือคำซ้ำ ควรใช้ Linking word เช่น 'because' หรือ 'so' เพื่อเชื่อมเหตุผล ตัวอย่างเช่น ระบุว่าเดินน้อยเพราะงานหรือการเรียนและบอกความถี่ เช่น 'สัปดาห์ละครั้ง'

예시: I don't walk a lot nowadays because I'm very busy with studying. I usually walk only once or twice a week around my neighborhood to get some fresh air.

제안: เริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรง ๆ แล้วเสริมรายละเอียดเป็นสาเหตุและตัวอย่าง ใช้ linking words เช่น 'because' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำเติมหลายครั้ง ลดการกล่าวซ้ำของคำว่า 'like'

예시: Yes, I often went outside as a child because we had more free time and there were no mobile phones. For example, I used to play soccer and explore the neighborhood with my friends every afternoon.

제안: ต้องตอบมั่นใจและชัดเจน ใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ ให้เหตุผลหลายข้อที่เฉพาะเจาะจง เช่น บรรยากาศ อากาศ และความสงบ พร้อมใช้ linking words เช่น 'because' หรือ 'also' และหลีกเลี่ยงคำว่า 'I don't know'

예시: People like walking in parks because they offer open space, fresh air and greenery, which help reduce stress. Also, parks are quiet and safe, so many people find them pleasant for exercise or relaxing.

제안: ตอบโดยเริ่มตรง ๆ และให้เหตุผลที่ชัดเจน รวมรายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น ชนิดของสวนหรือเส้นทาง และอธิบายว่าทำไมถึงชอบที่นั่น ใช้ linking words (for example, because) และตัดคำซ้ำและคำเติมออก

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a large city park because it has wide paths, many trees and a peaceful lake. For example, I would walk along the riverside trail to enjoy the scenery and get exercise.

제안: ตอบให้ตรงเวลาและชัดเจน ระบุช่วงเวลาและสถานที่สั้น ๆ แล้วอธิบายเหตุผลโดยใช้ linking words เช่น 'because' ลดการใช้คำเติมและการซ้ำคำ เช่น 'because' หลายครั้ง

예시: I haven't gone far recently; I only walk around my neighborhood this week because I'm busy studying and spending most of my time at home.

× Umm, right. I mean, recently I don't have the opportunity to like going out or walking that much.

✓ Umm, right. I mean, recently I haven't had the opportunity to go out or walk that much.

Incorrect tense and verb form: 'don't have' is present simple but 'recently' needs present perfect 'haven't had' to show a period up to now; 'going out' should be base form after 'opportunity to' -> 'to go out'. Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences extending to present and use infinitive after 'opportunity to'.

× Uh, most of the time I like sit sitting and doing and studying some something like that.

✓ Uh, most of the time I sit and study and do things like that.

Redundant and incorrect use of verbs: 'I like sit sitting' is wrong; use either 'I like sitting' or simple present 'I sit'. Parallel structure needed: 'sit and study and do things' or 'like sitting and studying'. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel and avoid duplicate words.

× Yes, I I have more time when I was younger and I didn't have like mobile phones so most of the time I like playing out and hang out with my friends.

✓ Yes, I had more time when I was younger and I didn't have mobile phones, so most of the time I played outside and hung out with my friends.

Inconsistent tenses: 'I have more time when I was younger' mixes present and past; change to past 'I had'. Activities in the past require past tense verbs: 'played' and 'hung out'. Also 'playing out' is unnatural; use 'played outside'. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past when referring to past period.

× From me, I think it is because Park has a lot of space and and have a lot of trees.

✓ For me, I think it is because parks have a lot of space and many trees.

Article and noun number: 'Park' should be plural or with article 'the park' depending on meaning; general statement uses plural 'parks'. Subject-verb agreement: 'parks have' not 'park has' if plural. Use 'many trees' for countable plural. 'From me' is incorrect phrase; use 'For me'. Suggestion: use 'For me' and pluralize when speaking generally.

× So I think it's about a mood. People tend to like. Umm, I don't know.

✓ So I think it's about the mood; people tend to enjoy it, I guess.

Awkward phrasing and incomplete sentence 'People tend to like.' needs an object. 'About a mood' is unclear; 'about the mood' or 'for the mood' better. Suggestion: complete the thought and provide object for 'like' or use 'enjoy'.

× As you say before, yes other for me I choose if I have a opportunity to walk. I will choose a park like most people because it has more space than home or like another another place.

✓ As you said before, if I had the opportunity to walk, I would choose a park like most people because it has more space than home or other places.

Conditional sentence requires past form 'if I had' and conditional 'would choose' (second conditional) for hypothetical present/future. 'As you say before' should be 'As you said before'. Article error 'a opportunity' -> 'an opportunity'. Repetition 'another another' removed and 'other places' used. Suggestion: use correct conditional structure for hypothetical situations.

× Umm, most of the time I didn't go out recently, I just walk around my house because right now I don't have much time because I have to staying a lot at home.

✓ Umm, I haven't been going out much recently; I just walk around my house because right now I don't have much time and I have to stay at home a lot.

Tense mismatch: 'didn't go out recently' mixes simple past with 'recently' better used with present perfect 'haven't been going out' for current relevance. 'I just walk' -> 'I just walk around' okay but keep present perfect continuous for ongoing action. 'I have to staying' is incorrect; use infinitive 'stay'. Suggestion: use present perfect/continuous for recent ongoing actions and correct verb forms.