Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子有较多语法和用词错误，影响表达的自然性。答题没有直接用一句话清晰回答问题，后续支持细节虽有，但句子较多冗余。建议先用简短明确的主题句回答（例如："Not really, I don't walk much."），然后用一到两句原因或条件补充。注意动词时态和主谓一致，避免重复。

예시: Not really — I don't walk much because I prefer staying at home and playing games with my friends. If the weather is nice and calm, however, I sometimes go out for a short walk on my own.

제안: 回答内容与问题相关，但时态使用不当（应使用过去式），句子重复且结构松散。建议先用一句过去式的主题句（例如："Yes, I often went outside as a child."），然后简要列举一两项具体活动，使用连接词使表达连贯，避免重复兴趣的罗列。

예시: Yes, I often went outside as a child. I had plenty of energy, so I played with friends, walked with my parents and visited shopping malls to look at toys. I also enjoyed drawing and doing simple exercises outdoors.

제안: 观点明确且有多项具体理由，但存在语法错误和表达重复。建议先用一句概括性句子（例如："People like parks because they are pleasant and safe."），然后用两到三个理由，每个理由用简短句子或从句说明，避免重复同义内容。注意冠词、复数和动词形式。

예시: People like walking in parks because they are pleasant and generally safer than busy streets. Parks offer fresh air, flowers and quiet paths, and they are great places to walk dogs or spend time with friends and family.

제안: 回答清晰，理由明确，但存在词汇和语法小错误（如'silence'用法、冠词和动词形式）。建议用一句直接回答开始（"I'd like to walk along a country road."），接着给出两条具体原因并用连接词衔接，保持句子不超过五句。

예시: I'd like to take a long walk along a country road because it's peaceful and quiet. I prefer that to busy shopping areas, since I can have some private time and listen to music while walking.

제안: 时态混用和语法错误影响表达（应使用过去式或现在完成时）。句子冗长且重复表意。建议用一句清楚的主题句说明最近去过哪里（例如："I went to the park recently."），接着说明原因和效果，注意用正确时态和更自然的表达方式。

예시: I went to the park recently because I'm studying for my high school final exams and felt stressed. Walking there and listening to music helped me relax and feel more peaceful.

× No, I'm not work a lot.

✓ No, I don't work a lot.

句子想表达的是一般现在时的否定（我不经常工作/不常做某事），应使用助动词do的否定形式。原句使用’m not’后接动词原形不正确。建议使用“I don't + 动词原形”。

× I'm don't like do more exercise because I like stay at home and play game with my friends.

✓ I don't like to do more exercise because I like to stay at home and play games with my friends.

句子需要一般现在时的否定（I don't like）且动词不定式或动名词形式在此处更自然。原句中“I'm don't”混用了be动词和助动词，且“play game”应为复数。建议使用“I don't like to do.../I don't like doing...”，并将“game”改为“games”。

× When the weather going calm and comfortable I like to go outside and walk alone.

✓ When the weather is calm and comfortable, I like to go outside and walk alone.

描述当前或一般情况时应使用系动词be（is/are）。原句缺少be动词，使用现在分词“going”不合适。建议使用“When the weather is...”来描述天气状态。

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ (No change needed) Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

这是考官的问题，时态正确，为一般过去时的疑问句，无需修改。

× Yes, when I was a child I have a lot of energy and I can spend more energy to go outside to play with my friend and go for a walk with my parents or go some shopping mall to buy something.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a lot of energy and I could spend more energy going outside to play with my friends, go for a walk with my parents, or go to some shopping malls to buy things.

描述过去的情况应使用过去时（had, could）。“have”应改为“had”，“can”改为“could”。“play with my friend”应为复数friends；“go some shopping mall”需要介词“to”并且“mall”可复数或单数配限定词。动词短语并列时用-ing或不定式的一致形式，更自然用“going outside to play”。

× I like just like the toys and other things.

✓ I just like the toys and other things.

原句中“I like just like”重复使用like造成冗余。应删去一个“like”以表达“我只是喜欢玩具和其他东西”。建议使用“I just like...”或“I like...”根据语境选择。

× I like drawing and do some exercise and also like go for a walk.

✓ I like drawing and doing some exercise and also like going for a walk.

在并列结构中，动词短语应保持形式一致。既然前面用“drawing”（动名词），后面也应使用动名词形式“doing”和“going”。

× Because park is safer than other place.

✓ Because the park is safer than other places.

当表示特定类别时应使用定冠词“the park”或若泛指多数公园应使用复数“parks”。此外“other place”应为复数“other places”以表示与其他地点比较。

× Park can give you a very beautiful environment to walk and it also have the fresh air and beautiful flowers.

✓ A park can give you a very beautiful environment to walk in, and it also has fresh air and beautiful flowers.

动词与主语一致性问题：单数主语park用动词has而不是have。此外“environment to walk”通常需要介词“in”。建议使用“A park can...”或“The park can...”，并将“have”改为“has”。

× And you can play with your dogs and play with your friends and walk with your parents.

✓ You can play with your dogs, play with your friends, and walk with your parents.

句子本身没有重大的语法错误，但为了流畅使用逗号分隔并列动作。无需要改动代词，但调整标点和重复词语更自然。

× It can make you feel comfortable and breathe. Fresh air is great.

✓ They can make you feel comfortable and help you breathe better. Fresh air is great.

原句结构不清，“It”指代不明且“breathe”作为动词不完整，应使用“help you breathe better”或“make it easier to breathe”。建议明确主语并把动词结构补全。

× I like to go for a long walk in the Country Rd. because the Country Rd. is silence.

✓ I like to go for a long walk on the country road because the country road is quiet.

地名或道路通常小写普通名词形式“country road”。“silence”是名词，形容词应为“quiet”。介词应为“on the road”。此外不需要缩写“Rd.”在口语中说“country road”。

× I love silence.

✓ (No change needed) I love silence.

句子语法正确，保留原句。

× I don't like the busy shopping mall and I can have my own time.

✓ I don't like busy shopping malls and I can have my own time there.

若泛指购物中心应使用复数“shopping malls”。此外句子增加“there”更明确地点。“can have my own time”语法上可，但需加地点副词。

× Also, I can listen some music to walk in there.

✓ Also, I can listen to some music while walking there.

动词listen后需接介词to；表示同时进行的动作可使用“while + -ing”结构更自然。原句“to walk in there”词序和介词使用不当。

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ (No change needed) Where did you go for a walk lately?

考官问题时态正确（过去时），无须修改。

× I go for a walk in the park because I'm in the high school in the final exam and I have many pressure.

✓ I went for a walk in the park because I'm in high school and I'm taking my final exams, and I have a lot of pressure.

谈及最近的行为应使用过去时“went”。“I'm in the high school in the final exam”表达冗长且不地道，改为“I'm in high school and I'm taking my final exams”。“have many pressure”应改为“have a lot of pressure”或“am under a lot of pressure”。

× I want to make me relax and I want to go park to have some walk and listen to some music.

✓ I want to relax, so I go to the park to have a walk and listen to some music.

原句中“make me relax”不自然，英语中通常说“want to relax”或“want to make myself relax”（但后者较少用）。“go park”缺少介词“to”。并且时态和结构需与前句一致，建议使用简洁的因果句。

× It can make me calm and feel comfortable, can make me peaceful.

✓ It can make me calm and feel comfortable; it can make me feel peaceful.

句子重复且缺少主语，需在第二部分加入主语“it”并将“peaceful”前加“feel”以保持表达一致。建议合并或用分号连接。