Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar and directly answer. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix verb errors, and avoid irrelevant detail. Use one or two supporting reasons with linking words. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I don't walk a lot. Because I live in a village and my friends live in the city, I usually travel by public transport, so I only walk when I meet them in town.

제안: Give a clear past-tense topic sentence and add a specific detail or example. Correct tense and endings, and use a linking word for coherence. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. For example, I used to walk to the nearby playground with my friends every afternoon, which gave me many happy memories.

제안: Start with a direct opinion, correct grammar (e.g., 'it can help'), and expand with a specific reason or consequence using linking words. Keep answers natural and complete sentences.

예시: I think people enjoy walking in parks because of the fresh air and peaceful atmosphere. For instance, the calm surroundings can help them relax and clear their minds after a busy day.

제안: Give a clear conditional sentence and name a place accurately. Avoid unclear phrases and correct vocabulary. Use one or two reasons why you would choose that place with linking words.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Moscow parks because they have a pleasant atmosphere and many trees. In particular, Vorobyovy Gory is my favourite because the views are beautiful and the paths are peaceful.

제안: Answer directly in past tense and be specific. Correct grammar (e.g., 'there are') and avoid filler words. Use linking words to give two clear details about the place.

예시: Recently I went for a walk in Baraby Gory. There were many colorful lights and lots of trees, so the park felt very green and fresh.

× I walk only when I with them.

✓ I walk only when I am with them.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous (be + present participle) structure 'I am with them'. The original omits the verb, resulting in an incomplete clause. Suggestion: include the correct form of 'to be' for present continuous or state descriptions (I am with them).

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child? -> I often went outside for walks when I was a child.

✓ I often went outside for walks when I was a child.

Original student reply already mostly correct but used 'go outside to have a walk' in question; student's answer 'I often went outside for walks' correctly uses simple past to match 'when I was a child'. Ensure consistent past tense: use 'went' and 'was'. No change required except phrasing clarity. Suggestion: keep simple past verbs for childhood routines (I often went).

× I had a lot of friends and would like to walk in the playground nearby our house.

✓ I had a lot of friends and liked to walk in the playground near our house.

The phrase 'would like to walk' is present conditional and incorrect here when describing past habitual actions. Use past habitual expression 'liked to walk' or 'would walk'. Also 'nearby our house' is awkward - use 'near our house'. Suggestion: for past habits, use 'liked to' or 'would' + base verb and place adverbial phrases in natural order ('near our house').

× It's so wonderful memories and.

✓ They are such wonderful memories.

Original is ungrammatical: 'It's so wonderful memories and.' Misuse of singular 'It' with plural 'memories' and sentence fragments. Correct by using plural pronoun 'They' and adjective order 'such wonderful memories'. Remove the trailing 'and'. Suggestion: ensure subject-pronoun agreement and complete the sentence.

× In my opinion, people like parks because of fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere.

✓ In my opinion, people like parks because of the fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere.

When referring to general but specific qualities like 'fresh air' in parks, using the definite article 'the' is natural in this context. It specifies the air people experience there. Suggestion: use 'the fresh air' when describing particular qualities associated with a place.

× It's can help to relax and just think about your day, your life.

✓ It can help you relax and just think about your day and your life.

Incorrect word order: 'It's can' mixes contraction 'it is' with modal 'can'. Remove 'is' and use 'It can'. Also 'help to relax' is acceptable, but 'help you relax' is more natural. Use conjunction 'and' to connect phrases. Suggestion: use 'It can help you relax'.

× So it's.

✓ So it is relaxing.

The fragment 'So it's.' is incomplete. Expand to a full clause matching context, e.g., 'So it is relaxing' or 'So it helps.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; provide a complete idea.

× So I like Moscow Parks because of their atmosphere and I think they are wonderful.

✓ I like Moscow parks because of their atmosphere, and I think they are wonderful.

Minor capitalization and punctuation: 'parks' should be lowercase unless proper name; include a comma before 'and' linking independent clauses. Suggestion: follow capitalization rules and separate clauses correctly.

× As for me, vary by gory is the greatest one.

✓ For me, Vorobyovy Gory is the greatest one.

Original 'vary by gory' appears to be a misspelling/mishearing of 'Vorobyovy Gory' (a Moscow park). Use correct proper noun form. Also 'As for me' is awkward; 'For me' is more natural. Suggestion: use correct proper names and natural introductory phrases.

× I like to walk here and it's not annoying.

✓ I like to walk there, and it is pleasant.

'It's not annoying' is an odd description for a park; 'pleasant' is more appropriate. Also use 'there' rather than 'here' depending on context; if speaking about a park from outside, 'there' fits. Suggestion: choose natural adjectives to describe places.

× I think so because there a lot of colorful lights and a huge amount of trees and it's so green and fresh and oh, I like it.

✓ I think so because there are a lot of colorful lights and many trees; it's so green and fresh, and I like it.

Missing auxiliary 'are' after 'there' (There be issue). Use 'there are' for plural subjects. Also 'a huge amount of trees' is incorrect collocation; use 'many trees' or 'a large number of trees'. Combine clauses with appropriate punctuation and remove filler 'oh'. Suggestion: use 'there are' with plural nouns and 'many' for countable nouns.