Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp, trả lời trực tiếp hơn và ngắn gọn (1-3 câu). Tránh nhầm lẫn giữa “work” và “walk”, dùng liên từ đơn giản để liên kết ý. Nên nêu thói quen hiện tại rõ ràng và lý do cụ thể.

예시: Not really. I rarely walk because I spend most of my time attending school and extra classes, so I don't have time for walks or shopping. However, I try to walk occasionally at the weekend to relax.

제안: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng cần rút ngắn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ (ví dụ thì: “As far as I remember”). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (nơi, thời điểm, hoạt động) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I often walked with my grandmother when I was a child. We usually strolled around the neighbourhood park in the evenings, which helped me relax and stay active.

제안: Cần sửa từ vựng sai (working → walking; wanna → want to), tránh lặp từ và câu mơ hồ. Trả lời trực tiếp, nêu 2–3 lí do cụ thể và dùng liên từ (for example, because, so) để rõ ràng.

예시: People like walking in parks because the air is cleaner and the surroundings are peaceful. For example, families can relax on benches and joggers can exercise safely, so parks are ideal for both recreation and health.

제안: Cần sửa nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng (work → walk; playground vs park; câu không rõ nghĩa ‘genquery asthma fear’). Trả lời ngắn gọn, nêu vị trí cụ thể, lý do rõ ràng và cách bạn sẽ tận dụng buổi đi bộ.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the quiet park near my house because I enjoy peaceful places. I would walk slowly along the tree-lined paths and focus on breathing deeply to feel relaxed.

제안: Cần sửa cấu trúc thì và trật tự từ (I can't remember / I went; my grandma and I). Trả lời trực tiếp, nêu thời điểm gần nhất, nơi cụ thể và hoạt động bạn làm khi đi bộ.

예시: I can't remember exactly, but I think I walked in the park near my house last weekend. My grandmother and I went for an evening stroll to relax after a busy day, and we chatted while walking.

× Rarely do I work to be honest.

✓ Rarely do I walk, to be honest.

Student used 'work' instead of the correct verb 'walk' given the question. This is a word choice error rather than an article error; however, it also lacks a comma before 'to be honest'. Suggestion: use the verb that matches the question and include a comma: 'Rarely do I walk, to be honest.'

× Due to my happy schedule, I have to spend a large amount of time going to school or extra classes.

✓ Due to my busy schedule, I have to spend a large amount of time going to school or attending extra classes.

The adjective 'happy' is inappropriate in this context; use 'busy'. Also use 'attending extra classes' to make the verb collocation natural. Suggestion: replace incorrect adjective and use correct verb phrase for activities.

× As a result, I don't have enough time to work or just go shopping with my friends or my family members.

✓ As a result, I don't have enough time to walk or just go shopping with my friends or family members.

The verb 'work' is inconsistent with the topic (walking). Replace with 'walk'. Also 'my family members' is wordy; 'family members' or 'my family' is preferable. Suggestion: keep vocabulary consistent with topic and prefer concise noun phrase.

× But I believe that it's so.

✓ But I believe that's true.

'It's so' is informal and unclear. Use 'that's true' to express agreement. Suggestion: choose clear, idiomatic expressions.

× As far as I remembered, when I was a child I used to go outside to have a walk with my grandma quite a lot.

✓ As far as I remember, when I was a child I used to go outside for walks with my grandma quite a lot.

Use present tense 'remember' with 'as far as' to express current recollection. Also 'have a walk' is less natural than 'go for walks' and 'grandma' can be 'my grandma'. Suggestion: use 'as far as I remember' and idiomatic verb phrase 'go for walks'.

× I just remember that she always encouraged me to go walking or go shopping with her to enhance my physical and mental well-being.

✓ I just remember that she always encouraged me to go walking or go shopping with her to enhance my physical and mental well-being.

This sentence is grammatical. No correction needed. Note: 'go walking' is acceptable; keep as is.

× From my perspective, there are a wide variety of individuals who do enjoy working in parks.

✓ From my perspective, there are a wide variety of individuals who do enjoy walking in parks.

The verb 'working' is incorrect for the context; use 'walking'. 'In parks' is correct. Suggestion: use the verb that matches the activity discussed.

× One of the main reasons may be the fact that people wanna immerse themselves in serene and clean atmosphere.

✓ One of the main reasons may be that people want to immerse themselves in a serene and clean atmosphere.

Use formal 'want to' instead of slang 'wanna'. Also include the article 'a' before 'serene and clean atmosphere'. Suggestion: avoid slang in formal speech and include appropriate articles.

× It's evident to see that the parks are one of the most suitable places that people wanna.

✓ It's clear that parks are among the most suitable places for people to visit.

Sentence is ungrammatical and unfinished ('people wanna' lacks object). Replace with clear structure 'parks are among the most suitable places for people to visit.' Suggestion: complete the verb phrase and avoid slang.

× If I had a chance, I could like to take long work in the playground near my house.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in the playground near my house.

Conditional form: use 'would like' not 'could like'. Use 'the chance' or 'a chance'. 'Take a long walk' is correct; 'work' is wrong. Suggestion: use correct conditional modal and noun phrase.

× It's evident to see that I'm a person who is very interested in serene and genquery asthma fear.

✓ It's clear that I'm a person who is very interested in serene environments and fresh air.

Original contains unintelligible phrase 'genquery asthma fear'. Replace with meaningful description 'serene environments and fresh air'. Suggestion: express preferences clearly and avoid garbled words.

× As a result, this playground is quite suitable for me because I can't do exercise.

✓ As a result, this playground is quite suitable for me because I can exercise there.

Contradictory and incorrect 'I can't do exercise' conflicts with earlier idea. Correct to 'I can exercise there.' Suggestion: ensure logical consistency and correct modal verb usage.

× It seems to me that I can't remember the exact place where I have gone for work late, in my opinion, maybe the park near my house.

✓ It seems to me that I can't remember the exact place where I went for a walk recently; in my opinion, it was maybe the park near my house.

Use past simple 'went' or present perfect 'have gone' consistently; 'for work' is wrong — should be 'for a walk'. 'Late' is incorrect adverb; use 'recently'. Suggestion: use correct tense and collocations.

× I just remember that at the time my grandma and me decided to go for a walk so as to enhance our mental well-being after long busy day.

✓ I just remember that at the time my grandma and I decided to go for a walk to enhance our mental well-being after a long, busy day.

Use subject pronoun 'I' not 'me' when paired with another subject. Add 'a' before 'long, busy day' and commas for clarity. Suggestion: use correct subject pronoun and include articles and punctuation.