Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 어휘 사용을 정확하게 고치고, 간결하고 자연스럽게 답하도록 연습하세요. 특히 시제와 전치사 사용(예: 'work a lot'는 걷기와 관련없음, 'at there' 불필요)을 고치고 한두 문장으로 명확한 주제문과 이유를 제시하세요. 예시 문장 구조: 주제문 + 장소 설명 + 빈도나 이유.

예시: Yes, I walk quite often. There is a river called Hunting River in front of my house, so I usually go for walks there several times a week.

제안: 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 현재·과거 혼용을 피하고, 연결어를 사용해 이유와 감정을 명확히 표현하세요. 문장은 최대 4~5개 이내로 유지하세요.

예시: Yes, I often went outside to walk when I was a child because it was my favourite hobby. I used to walk with my friends and we would talk about anything, which made the walks very enjoyable.

제안: 문법과 문장 완성도를 높이세요. 소유격과 주어-동사 일치를 고치고, 'clean ourselves' 같은 어색한 표현을 더 자연스러운 이유로 바꾸세요. 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 이유를 1~2개만 구체적으로 제시하세요.

예시: I think the atmosphere in parks is peaceful, so people can relax and clear their minds. For example, walking among trees and fresh air helps reduce stress and improve mood.

제안: 가정법 질문에 맞게 'would like'를 사용해 답하고, 문장을 간결하게 정리하세요. 'relaxable' 같은 비표준 형용사는 피하고 'relaxing' 등 적절한 단어를 쓰세요. 장소 이유와 감정 표현을 연결어로 명확히 하세요.

예시: If I had the chance to take a long walk somewhere else, I would choose the Han River because it is near my house and the riverside atmosphere is very relaxing.

제안: 최근 시제 사용은 적절했지만 문장 구조와 어순, 동사 형태를 정리하세요. 'I also enjoy on a picnic'는 틀리므로 'I also had a picnic'처럼 완전한 문장을 사용하고, 활동들을 연결할 때는 and로 자연스럽게 잇도록 연습하세요.

예시: Lately, I went for a walk along the Han River. I also had a picnic there and went cycling with my friends.

× Hunting River is in front of my house, so I usually walk at there.

✓ Hunting River is in front of my house, so I usually walk there.

The preposition 'at' is unnecessary before 'there'. Use 'walk there' to indicate location. Also ensure the river name is consistent (Hunting River). Suggestion: say 'I usually walk there' or 'I usually walk along the river.'

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child? -> Student: I often go outside and have a walk because it was my hobby.

✓ I often went outside and took walks because it was my hobby.

The question uses past tense ('Did you...when you were a child?'), so the answer must use past tense. 'Go' should be 'went' and 'have a walk' is more naturally 'took walks'. Suggestion: use past simple for habitual past actions: 'I often went outside and took walks.'

× I'd love to walk with my friends and just talk about anything.

✓ I loved walking with my friends and just talking about anything.

Since this sentence refers to habitual past activity, use past tense forms. 'I'd love to' (would love) expresses present desire, not past habit. Use 'loved' and gerunds 'walking' and 'talking' for activities. Suggestion: 'I loved walking with my friends and talking about anything.'

× I think it's atmosphere is peaceful and we can. Clean ourselves when we walk.

✓ I think its atmosphere is peaceful, and we can clean ourselves when we walk.

'It's' is a contraction for 'it is'; the possessive pronoun needed is 'its'. Remove the stray period after 'can' and join clauses. Also 'clean ourselves' is odd; consider 'refresh ourselves' or 'feel refreshed'. Suggestion: 'I think its atmosphere is peaceful, and we can feel refreshed when we walk.'

× I usually walk on the Han river because it's in front of my house and it's atmosphere air is pretty relaxable.

✓ I usually walk along the Han River because it's in front of my house and its atmosphere is quite relaxing.

Several issues: use 'along' (preposition) rather than 'on' for walking by a river. 'It's' should be 'its' for possession. 'Atmosphere air' is redundant; use 'atmosphere'. 'Relaxable' is not natural; use 'relaxing' (adjective) or 'relaxed'. Suggestion: 'I usually walk along the Han River because it's in front of my house and its atmosphere is quite relaxing.'

× Where did you go for a walk lately? -> Student: I went for a walk to the Han River and I also enjoy on a picnic and. Riding a cycle.

✓ I went for a walk to the Han River, and I also enjoyed a picnic and rode a bicycle.

The question asks about a recent past event ('lately'), so use past tense: 'enjoy' -> 'enjoyed'. 'Riding a cycle' should be past tense 'rode a bicycle'. Remove awkward preposition 'on a picnic' -> 'enjoyed a picnic'. Suggestion: 'I went for a walk to the Han River, and I also enjoyed a picnic and rode a bicycle.'