Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce repetition and improve grammar and fluency. Start with a concise topic sentence, avoid repeated words, and use a linking phrase to add details. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., “morning walk” → “morning walks,” remove duplicated words).

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I especially enjoy morning walks because I like the fresh air and the sound of birds; walking also helps me stay active. I usually walk for about 30 minutes every morning.

제안: Improve tense consistency and sentence structure. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, avoid repeated words, and use linking words to connect time and reason. Give one specific detail about where you walked or who you were with.

예시: Yes, when I was a child I often went for morning walks because I loved being outdoors. I usually walked for about 30–40 minutes and did light exercises in the park, which made me feel energetic and refreshed.

제안: Organize the answer: give one main point, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Fix subject-verb agreement and remove repetitions. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

예시: People like walking in parks mainly because they provide fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere. For example, parks are quieter than busy streets, so many people go there to exercise, relax, or walk their dogs.

제안: Use consistent tense and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear conditional sentence, give specific sensory details, and limit to two or three supporting points linked logically.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the beach because of its peaceful atmosphere. I would enjoy watching the waves and the sunset, which helps me relax and clear my mind.

제안: Use correct past tense and clearer sequencing. Begin with the simple past topic sentence, then add two concise supporting details. Remove filler words and repeated words, and correct verb forms.

예시: Recently I went for a walk in a nearby park, which is my usual choice. I sat on a bench and watched the children playing, and I also took several photos during my morning walk.

× Yes, I walk a lot. I especially enjoy morning walk because I like the fresh air and the bird sounds and walking helps me keep active. I usually walk walk 30 minutes every morning.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot. I especially enjoy morning walks because I like the fresh air and the sound of birds, and walking helps me stay active. I usually walk for 30 minutes every morning.

Errors: missing plural form 'walks' for a habitual activity; phrase 'bird sounds' is better as 'sound of birds' for natural phrasing; 'keep active' should be 'stay active' for idiomatic use; missing preposition 'for' before a duration. Suggestion: use plural for repeated events (morning walks), use natural collocations (sound of birds, stay active), and include 'for' when stating duration.

× When I was child I often went for morning walk because I loved being outside.

✓ When I was a child I often went for morning walks because I loved being outside.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'child' and plural needed for habitual activity 'morning walks'. Suggestion: include indefinite article 'a' with singular nouns like 'child' and use plural for repeated activities.

× I usually walk walked for about 30-40 minutes and did some light exercise to keep my body active and it's feeling good and fresh.

✓ I usually walked for about 30–40 minutes and did some light exercise to keep my body active; it felt good and refreshing.

Errors: redundant mixed tenses 'walk walked'—choose past 'walked' to match 'When I was a child'; 'it's feeling good and fresh' mixes present with past and is unidiomatic. Suggestion: maintain past tense for past habits and use natural adjectives ('felt good', 'refreshing').

× I think the main reason is that parks offer fresh air and everyone feel calm and everyone likes quiet environment and I I personally prefer to go for walk in park and sometime I do light exercise and some people go for to walk walk the dogs.

✓ I think the main reason is that parks offer fresh air and everyone feels calm; people like a quiet environment. I personally prefer to go for a walk in the park and sometimes do light exercise, and some people go for walks to walk their dogs.

Errors: subject-verb agreement 'everyone feel' should be 'everyone feels'; missing articles 'a quiet environment', 'a walk', 'the park'; repetition 'I I', 'walk walk'; incorrect infinitive 'go for to walk'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, include necessary articles, remove duplicate words, and use correct infinitive or noun forms ('go for a walk', 'walk their dogs').

× I would like to take a long walk along the beach because it has peaceful, smooth full atmosphere.

✓ I would like to take a long walk along the beach because it has a peaceful, calm atmosphere.

Errors: incorrect adjective collocation 'smooth full atmosphere' and missing article 'a'. Suggestion: use appropriate adjectives that collocate with 'atmosphere' (peaceful, calm) and include the article 'a'.

× I enjoyed watching the waves and the sunset and walking there helps me relax and clear my my mind and I feel energetic and I feel calm.

✓ I enjoy watching the waves and the sunset; walking there helps me relax and clear my mind, and I feel energetic and calm.

Errors: tense inconsistency—started with 'I enjoyed' (past) but general preference should be present 'I enjoy'; duplicated 'my my'. Suggestion: keep present tense for general statements, remove duplicates, and combine similar feelings concisely.

× I went for a walk nearby park and I usually prefer to go there and sometime I sat down and watch the children played and uh I love morning morning walk and sometime I take too much picture.

✓ I went for a walk in a nearby park. I usually prefer to go there; sometimes I sat down and watched the children playing. I love morning walks and sometimes I take too many pictures.

Errors: missing preposition/article 'in a nearby park'; tense inconsistency 'I went' (past) vs 'I usually prefer' (present) — keep context consistent; 'watch the children played' should be past progressive or past simple 'watched the children playing/watched the children play'; duplicated 'morning morning'; 'too much picture' should be 'too many pictures' (countable noun, plural) and 'sometimes' spelling. Suggestion: use correct prepositions/articles, maintain consistent tense, use correct verb forms, remove duplicates, and use plural for countable nouns with quantifiers ('many').