Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct small grammar and repetition errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct verb/noun forms and avoid repeating words.

예시: Yes — I walk a lot, especially in the mornings. I enjoy the fresh air and bird song, and walking helps me stay active, so I usually walk for about 30 minutes each morning.

제안: Fix tense and article errors and remove repetition. Use one clear past-tense topic sentence, then give a specific detail and a brief reason with linking words.

예시: Yes, when I was a child I often went for morning walks because I loved being outdoors. I usually walked for about 30–40 minutes and did light exercises, which made me feel energetic and refreshed.

제안: Organize the answer: give one main reason, then add specific supporting points using linking words. Avoid repetition and use correct subject-verb agreement and article use.

예시: People like walking in parks because they offer fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere. In addition, parks are quiet and spacious, so many people do light exercise there or walk their dogs.

제안: Use consistent tense and avoid redundant phrases. Give one clear reason, then add one or two vivid, specific details linked logically. Replace vague adjectives with precise ones.

예시: I would like to take a long walk along the beach because it has a peaceful atmosphere. I enjoy watching the waves and the sunset, and walking there helps me relax and clear my mind.

제안: Correct past-tense forms and article usage; remove hesitations and repetitions. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add one or two specific details about what you saw or did.

예시: Lately I went for a walk in a nearby park, which I often visit in the mornings. I sometimes sit and watch the children play, and I like to take photos of the scenery.

× Yes, I walk a lot. I especially enjoy morning walk because I like the fresh air and the bird sounds and walking helps me keep active.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot. I especially enjoy morning walks because I like the fresh air and the birdsong, and walking helps me keep active.

Plural and wording: 'morning walk' should be plural 'morning walks' when speaking generally about a habitual activity. 'the bird sounds' is more naturally 'the birdsong' or 'the birds' to be concise. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. These changes improve natural present-tense habitual expression and fluency.

× I usually walk walk 30 minutes every morning.

✓ I usually walk for 30 minutes every morning.

Remove repetition and add the preposition 'for' to indicate duration. The correct present habitual expression is 'I usually walk for 30 minutes every morning.' This fixes redundancy and sentence structure.

× When I was child I often went for morning walk because I loved being outside.

✓ When I was a child I often went for morning walks because I loved being outside.

Missing article: 'a child' is required. Use plural 'morning walks' to indicate repeated past actions. This aligns with past-tense habitual phrasing.

× I usually walk walked for about 30-40 minutes and did some light exercise to keep my body active and it's feeling good and fresh.

✓ I usually walked for about 30-40 minutes and did some light exercise to keep my body active; it felt good and refreshing.

Tense consistency: maintain past tense 'walked' and 'did'. Remove duplicate 'walk'. 'It's feeling good and fresh' is present; change to past 'it felt good and refreshing' to match past context. Use 'refreshing' instead of 'fresh' as it collocates better with 'felt'.

× I think the main reason is that parks offer fresh air and everyone feel calm and everyone likes quiet environment and I I personally prefer to go for walk in park and sometime I do light exercise and some people go for to walk walk the dogs.

✓ I think the main reason is that parks offer fresh air and everyone feels calm; everyone likes a quiet environment. I personally prefer to go for a walk in the park and sometimes do light exercise, and some people go for walks to walk their dogs.

Subject-verb agreement: 'everyone feel' should be 'everyone feels'. Articles: 'a quiet environment' and 'the park' needed. Remove duplicate 'I' and duplicated 'walk'. Use plural 'walks' and 'sometimes' spelled correctly. 'go for walks to walk their dogs' clarifies purpose. These corrections address pronoun-verb agreement, article use, repetition, and adverb spelling.

× I would like to take a long walk along the beach because it has peaceful, smooth full atmosphere.

✓ I would like to take a long walk along the beach because it has a peaceful, mellow atmosphere.

Article: add 'a' before 'peaceful'. 'smooth full' is awkward; use 'mellow' or 'calm' to describe atmosphere. This keeps the conditional 'would like' correct while improving adjective choice and inserting the article.

× I enjoyed watching the waves and the sunset and walking there helps me relax and clear my my mind and I feel energetic and I feel calm.

✓ I enjoy watching the waves and the sunset, and walking there helps me relax and clear my mind; I feel energetic and calm.

Tense consistency: use present tense 'I enjoy' to match general preference. Remove duplicate 'my'. Combine adjectives 'energetic and calm' for concision. Use punctuation to separate ideas.

× I went for a walk nearby park and I usually prefer to go there and sometime I sat down and watch the children played and uh I love morning morning walk and sometime I take too much picture.

✓ I went for a walk in a nearby park. I usually prefer to go there. Sometimes I sat down and watched the children play. I love morning walks, and sometimes I take too many pictures.

Articles: use 'in a nearby park'. Tense consistency: past 'sat down and watched' to match 'I went'. 'children played' should be 'children play' or 'watched the children play'. Plural and quantifier: 'morning walks' and 'too many pictures' (not 'too much picture'). Fix repeated 'morning'. These changes address article use, tense, pluralization, and quantifier errors.