Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct verbs and vocabulary (walk vs work), and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (because, so) properly and give a brief reason and alternative.

예시: Not really. I don't walk much because the weather here is usually very hot, which makes outdoor walking uncomfortable. Instead, I prefer exercising in the gym or doing indoor workouts where it's cooler and more convenient.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence, correct past tense forms and pronouns, and avoid fillers. Give one or two specific supporting details and link them with words like 'usually' or 'sometimes'.

예시: Yes, I often walked with my mother when I was a child. We usually went for a walk after dinner, and sometimes I rode my bike while my mother preferred to walk beside me.

제안: Reduce repetition, correct word choice (work → walk), and make the answer more concise. Start with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, especially).

예시: People like walking in parks because it's beneficial for both physical and mental health. For example, being in nature can reduce stress and lift your mood, and the fresh air and gentle exercise are good for fitness.

제안: Use correct conditional and article forms (a long walk, the beach), and vary vocabulary slightly. Begin with a clear conditional sentence, then give vivid sensory details but keep it concise.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk on the beach because I love listening to the waves and feeling the sand under my feet. The sound of the sea always helps me relax.

제안: Answer directly in past tense and correct word choices (walk vs work, weather not water). Keep it concise: state where you walked recently, why, and one supporting detail. Avoid hesitation and maintain coherence with linking words.

예시: Recently I walked in a shopping mall because the weather has been very hot and I find outdoor walking uncomfortable. I like walking inside where it's air-conditioned, and I often combine it with a bit of window shopping.

× 'Honestly I don't work a lot especially because of our hot weather and the way is so I prefer to do an in in gym exercises or any different exercise.'

✓ 'Honestly, I don't walk a lot, especially because of our hot weather and the way it is, so I prefer to do gym exercises or other kinds of exercise.'

'Present tense issue: The student wrote "work a lot" instead of the correct verb "walk a lot," which changes meaning and verb choice. Also "the way is so" is ungrammatical; correct form is "the way it is." Remove the duplicated "in" and use "gym exercises" or "other kinds of exercise." Suggestion: use the simple present for habitual actions and choose the correct verb (walk), keep word order "because of + noun/phrase,' and avoid duplicated words.'

× 'Yes, I did with my mother. Uh, we usually walk after the dinner together. Sometimes I use my bike my my mom. She choose to walk with her legs or or walk walk.'

✓ 'Yes, I did, with my mother. We usually walked after dinner together. Sometimes I used my bike and my mom used to walk. She chose to walk on foot.'

'Past tense issue': The speaker mixed past and present forms. For past habitual actions, use past tense: "we usually walked," "I used my bike." "She choose" should be past "she chose." "Walk with her legs" is unnatural; use "walk on foot" or "walk." Also remove duplicate words and filler sounds. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for childhood routines.'

× 'Walking is very good for our health, especially for our physical health and our mental health.'

✓ 'Walking is very good for our health, especially for our physical and mental health.'

'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs': Repetition of "our" and redundant phrase can be tightened. Use parallel adjectives "physical and mental health." Suggestion: prefer concise parallel structure.'

× 'When I'm when I'm feeling sad or I don't feel very good, I, I choose to work because it feels it makes me very happy and change my mood very quickly.'

✓ 'When I'm feeling sad or not feeling very well, I choose to walk because it makes me very happy and changes my mood quickly.'

'Present tense issue': Remove duplicated "when I'm." Use "not feeling very well" for natural phrasing. "Choose to work" is wrong verb — should be "choose to walk." Subject-verb agreement also needed: "it makes" and "changes" (adds -s for third person singular). Suggestion: use simple present for habitual reactions and ensure verbs agree with subject.'

× 'So this is an A good way to improve your mental health.'

✓ 'So, this is a good way to improve your mental health.'

'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs': Capitalization and article issues: "an A good" is incorrect. Use lowercase and the correct article "a" before consonant sound. Suggestion: use "a good way" and proper capitalization.'

× 'If I had the chance to walk a long walk, I will choose to walk in the beach because I like to walk and hear the wave sounds and the waves touching my fingers or my legs.'

✓ 'If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would choose to walk on the beach because I like to hear the sound of the waves and feel them touching my feet or legs.'

'Future tense issue': In a hypothetical conditional with "If I had...", use the conditional "would" not "will." Also correct collocations: "take a long walk," "walk on the beach," "sound of the waves," and "feel them touching my feet." Suggestion: use second conditional form "If + past, would + base verb" and natural noun phrases.'

× 'Now let's say I choose to work in the walk in the malls because the water is now very hot and I can't I cannot handle it walking in the beach or walking in the park.'

✓ 'Nowadays I choose to walk in the malls because the weather is very hot and I cannot handle walking on the beach or in the park.'

'Present tense issue': Use "Nowadays" or "These days" for current habitual actions. Use "walk" not "work." "Water is now very hot" is wrong context — should be "weather." Remove duplicated "I can't I cannot." Use correct prepositions: "walking on the beach" and "in the park." Suggestion: keep present simple for habits and choose correct nouns and prepositions.'

× 'So I choose walking in the malls and shopping and look at the people's.'

✓ 'So I choose to walk in the malls, go shopping, and look at the people.'

'Incorrect use of prepositions' and '22 Article errors': Use the infinitive "to walk" or gerund consistently; better "choose to walk." Use parallel verbs "go shopping" and "look at the people." Remove the unnecessary possessive apostrophe in "people's." Suggestion: maintain parallel structure and correct noun forms.'