Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Good clear answer with relevant details. To improve, make the opening sentence directly about walking (not work), vary vocabulary, and use one linking word to connect ideas. Also keep sentences concise (max 5).

예시: Yes, I walk quite regularly. Since I moved to New Zealand, walking for about 20 minutes has become part of my routine, so I often walk to school and around my neighbourhood because it’s convenient and good exercise.

제안: Nice specific memories. To improve, correct tense consistency (use past), combine short sentences with linking words, and avoid repeating simple words (friend/friends).

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often played at the playground near my home; we played hide-and-seek and rode our bikes around the neighbourhood, and I especially enjoyed racing my friends because it felt exciting.

제안: Strong, logical answer with good content. To improve further, add a linking phrase and one brief example or result to make it more vivid and natural.

예시: I think mainly because parks are peaceful and safer than busy streets; for example, people can relax without worrying about traffic and enjoy fresh air and green scenery, which helps reduce stress.

제안: Good idea and imagery. Improve by correcting word choice (use 'breeze' not 'Frasier'), use one linking word and keep sentences natural and concise.

예시: If I had the chance, I would walk along the beach because I enjoy the sea breeze and beautiful scenery; I especially like going at sunset when the colourful sky feels very peaceful.

제안: Meaning is understandable but some phrases are awkward ("for work", "leveraging fresh air", "present atmosphere"). Improve by using natural collocations, correct tense, and clarify purpose. Keep it concise and coherent with a linking word.

예시: I recently went for a walk in Albert Park after work. It was very peaceful and I enjoyed the fresh air; moreover, the many hills there made it a good spot for exercise.

× Since I moved to New Zealand, walking for about 20 minutes is quite common here, so I have adopted that habit.

✓ Since I moved to New Zealand, walking for about 20 minutes has been quite common here, so I have adopted that habit.

The sentence mixes past reference 'Since I moved' with present simple 'is'. After 'since' with a past time, use present perfect (has been) to show a situation continuing to now. Suggestion: use 'has been' for ongoing states that started in the past and continue to the present.

× When I was a child, I often went outside to play with my friend at playground near my home.

✓ When I was a child, I often went outside to play with my friends at the playground near my home.

Two issues: 'friend' should be plural 'friends' if playing with more than one (plural issue), and 'at playground' requires the definite article 'the' before 'playground'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for multiple people and include articles ('the') for specific places.

× And I especially enjoy racing my friends because it's very exciting.

✓ And I especially enjoyed racing my friends because it was very exciting.

The context describes childhood (past time), so verbs should be in past tense. Using present tense 'enjoy' and 'it's' is inconsistent. Suggestion: change to past tense 'enjoyed' and 'was' to match the time frame.

× I think the main reason is that parks are quite peaceful and safe to walk in.

✓ I think the main reason is that parks are quite peaceful and safe to walk in.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no article change is needed. Included here to show no correction required. Suggestion: none.

× If I had the chance, I would like to walk along the beach because I enjoy the Frasier and the beautiful scenery.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk along the beach because I enjoy the fresh air and the beautiful scenery.

'Frasier' is a misspelling and incorrect word; intended phrase is 'fresh air'. Also include 'the' before 'beautiful scenery' to specify it. Suggestion: use 'fresh air' and include articles for specific nouns.

× I especially like going at sunset when the sky looks colorful and is very peaceful.

✓ I especially like going at sunset when the sky looks colorful and peaceful.

Redundant 'is' is unnecessary when describing the sky; adjective 'peaceful' can directly modify 'the sky' after 'looks'. Suggestion: omit the extra 'is' for natural, concise description.

× I recently went for work in Albert Park.

✓ I recently went to Albert Park for work.

Preposition order and phrasing: use 'went to' for places and place purpose phrase 'for work' after the destination. Also 'went for work in' is awkward. Suggestion: use 'went to [place] for work'.

× It was very peaceful with leveraging fresh air and a present atmosphere, and there are many hills there that are excellent for exercise.

✓ It was very peaceful with fresh air and a pleasant atmosphere, and there are many hills that are excellent for exercise.

'Leveraging' is inappropriate here; use 'with fresh air' to describe features. 'Present atmosphere' is incorrect word choice; intended word is 'pleasant'. Also keep tense consistency: 'It was very peaceful' (past) and 'there are many hills' (present) can be acceptable if describing the park generally, but better to use present 'there were' if referring to that visit. Suggestion: replace 'leveraging' with 'with', 'present atmosphere' with 'pleasant atmosphere', and consider tense consistency (use 'there were many hills' if describing that visit).