Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更自然、简洁并直接回应问题。用主题句开头说明频率，然后用一两句具体细节支持。避免重复和不准确的词（如“role”“aerobic respiration” 在此语境显得生硬）。可以用连词使句子更连贯。注意时态与主谓一致。

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk from school to home twice a day, and sometimes I take short walks in the evening to lift my mood and get some light exercise.

제안: 回答要直接回应过去习惯，用清晰过去时表达。避免结巴和重复，提供具体原因和简单细节。例如说明父母忙所以不能单独外出。保持句子简短且连贯。

예시: Not really. When I was a child my parents didn't allow me to go out alone because they were busy working long hours, so I rarely went for walks by myself.

제안: 回答要结构清晰，先给出主因，再用具体细节支持。避免重复词汇，使用更自然的表达（例如 ‘relax’ ‘enjoy nature’）。若提到多种理由，用连词连接并举例说明。

예시: People enjoy walking in parks because they can relax and enjoy nature. For example, parks have trees and flowers that create a peaceful atmosphere, and the fresh air helps people feel refreshed.

제안: 先直接回答地点或想法，再用一两句具体原因或描写来支持。避免含糊和重复，描述要具体（例如想看城市的哪些方面或感受）。保持句子流畅并控制长度。

예시: I would like to walk around the whole city if I had the chance, because I want to see different neighbourhoods and observe how people live. Walking would let me notice local shops, street life and architecture.

제안: 用正确的时态（过去式）并给出更具体的描述。避免语法错误和重复，说明街道的特点并简要表明感受或活动（例如唱歌）。

예시: Recently I walked along the street next to my home. It was quiet and not crowded because the area is industrial, so I felt relaxed and even sang while I walked.

× I walk a lot from my school to home. This role I have walked two times each day and sometimes I go for a small walk for for a better mood and for for exercising for an aerobic respiration.

✓ I walk a lot from my school to home. Usually I walk twice each day, and sometimes I take a short walk to improve my mood and for exercise to help my breathing.

问题类型涉及第6项“现在时问题”、第26项“句子结构错误”和第11项“介词/用词错误”。原句中时态与语境不完全一致，且有冗余和不自然的表达（“This role”、“for for”、“aerobic respiration”）；另外“two times each day”更自然为“twice each day”。建议用更自然的短语：usually/usually I walk twice each day；把“go for a small walk for a better mood and for exercising for an aerobic respiration”改为“take a short walk to improve my mood and for exercise to help my breathing”。简化并按英语习惯组织语序，避免重复词。

× I'm I'm not give the permission that to go out alone and my parents, they have to they had to work for from day to night till night. So when I was young, I can I can go out from my home.

✓ I wasn't allowed to go out alone because my parents had to work from morning until late at night. So when I was young, I couldn't go out from my home.

问题类型涉及第5项“过去时问题”和第4项“情态动词用法/能力表达”。原句将现在时和过去时混用（“I'm I'm not give the permission”错误，应为过去被动“wasn't allowed”）；“they have to they had to work for from day to night till night”应统一为过去时“had to work from morning until late at night”。最后一句“can I can go out”与前句矛盾，且时态错误，应为“couldn't”。建议把许可和能力用过去时和被动结构正确表达。

× Pause people love to walk in park as there is many plants like trees or flowers which which can make make them satisfy. Also the plants provide oxygen for for them to breathe and there is man.

✓ Many people love to walk in parks because there are many plants, such as trees and flowers, which make them feel satisfied. Also the plants provide oxygen for them to breathe.

问题类型涉及第1项“单复数问题”、第26项“句子结构错误”和第13项“用词不当”。原句“Pause”应为“People”；“walk in park”需用复数或限定词“walk in parks”或“walk in the park”；“there is many plants”主谓不一致，应为“there are many plants”；“which which can make make them satisfy”重复且用法错误，正确为“which make them feel satisfied”；末尾“and there is man”无意义，应删除。建议注意主谓一致、复数形式及去掉重复词，使用固定搭配“feel satisfied”。

× Yes, for sure. I love to walk a lot, but I don't have time If I have I I can walk from my home around the whole city to to see the different people different feel different. Many cars rush through me and.

✓ Yes, for sure. I love to walk a lot, but I don't have time. If I did have time, I could walk from my home around the whole city to see different people and experience different atmospheres. Many cars rush past me.

问题类型涉及第6项“现在时问题”、第5项“过去时问题（虚拟语气）”和第26项“句子结构错误”。原句中条件句时态混乱，应使用与事实相反的条件结构“If I did have time, I could...”。“to see the different people different feel different”杂乱，应改为“to see different people and experience different atmospheres”。“Many cars rush through me”用词不当，正确为“rush past me”。建议掌握虚拟语气（与现在事实相反用过去时+would/could）并简化表达。

× I go for a walk in the street that is next to my home and the industry is very broad and not many people is walking in the street and the street and is empty that I can singing when I was walking.

✓ I went for a walk on the street next to my home. The area is very spacious and not many people walk there, so the street is empty and I could sing while I was walking.

问题类型涉及第6项“现在时问题”（与上下文问及最近一次，过去时更合适）、第27项“主谓一致”以及第26项“句子结构错误”。原句时态混用（“I go for a walk”用于过去场景应为“I went”），“industry is very broad”用词错误，应为“area/space is very spacious”或“the street is very wide”；“not many people is walking”主谓不一致，应为“not many people walk”或“are walking”；“that I can singing when I was walking”混用时态和形式，应为“so the street is empty and I could sing while I was walking”。建议使用一致的过去时态，确保主谓一致，并选择合适词汇（area/space而不是 industry）。