Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and vocabulary; answer the question directly with a topic sentence, correct 'working' to 'walking', and avoid repetition. Use one clear reason and one brief supporting detail with a linking word.

예시: Yes, I walk quite a lot. For example, when I travel for work I often choose to walk to nearby attractions instead of taking public transport, because walking helps me see more of the city and relax.

제안: Use past-tense correctly and replace 'work' with 'walk'. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Keep sentences concise.

예시: Yes, I often walked outside when I was a child. After school I would walk around my neighbourhood with friends, which made me feel relaxed and gave me time to play outdoors.

제안: Answer directly and focus on general reasons, then give a brief personal example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and avoid repeating phrases.

예시: People like walking in parks because there are trees, flowers and fresh air, which create a peaceful atmosphere. For example, I go to a park three times a week to enjoy the scenery and relax.

제안: Use conditional and past tenses correctly and be specific about where and why. Start with a direct answer, then give a concise reason and a brief memory as support.

예시: I'd like to take a long walk in London. I visited London about twenty years ago and remember the charming streets and historic sights, so I would love to explore them again at a leisurely pace.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar errors, and add one specific detail about the walk. Use linking words such as 'because' to explain why it was enjoyable.

예시: I went to Highley Park yesterday. It was a pleasant place to walk with my children because there are many trees and flowers, and we enjoyed exploring the trails together.

× Yes, I enjoy working a lot, especially I travel to somewhere.

✓ Yes, I enjoy walking a lot, especially I travel to different places.

The original uses 'working' instead of 'walking' (word choice) and 'to somewhere' is incorrect preposition/phrase. Use 'travel to different places' or 'go to different places'. Suggestion: use correct verb 'walk' and use 'to' with specific places or 'to different places'.

× I try to go some popular places on work.

✓ I try to go to some popular places for work.

Missing preposition 'to' before 'some popular places' and 'on work' is unnatural; use 'for work' to indicate purpose. Suggestion: include 'to' for destination and use 'for' for purpose.

× Instead of taking some public transport.

✓ Instead of taking public transport, I usually walk.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause. 'Instead of taking public transport' must be attached to a complete sentence. Suggestion: combine with main clause to clarify meaning.

× Yes, I used to work around my house when I was young.

✓ Yes, I used to walk around my house when I was young.

The verb 'work' is semantically incorrect here; context asks about walking. Use 'walk' to match meaning. 'Used to' is correct past habitual form. Suggestion: choose verb that matches context.

× After the school I always went to go went to outside.

✓ After school I always went outside for a walk.

Multiple errors: 'the school' is unnecessary; 'went to go went to outside' is repetitive and ungrammatical. Use 'went outside' or 'went out' and eliminate extra verbs. Suggestion: simplify to 'After school I always went outside'.

× To work, it makes me feel relaxed and calm.

✓ Walking makes me feel relaxed and calm.

Sentence structure is awkward and 'To work' is unclear. Use subject 'Walking' to state what makes you feel relaxed. Suggestion: use gerund as subject for general statements.

× I think in the park there are many trees and flowers so people want to see them and smell also smell as good.

✓ I think parks have many trees and flowers, so people want to see and smell them because they smell good.

Pronoun and word order issues: 'in the park there are' is wordy; 'smell also smell as good' repeats 'smell' and uses incorrect structure. Use 'smell them' and add reason 'because they smell good'. Suggestion: simplify and correct verb usage.

× In parks, I also like to go to parks for three times a week.

✓ I also like to go to parks three times a week.

Redundant phrase 'In parks' and 'to go to parks' repeated. Use simple present 'go' for habitual action and correct frequency expression 'three times a week'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use standard adverbial phrase placement.

× I'd like to go to London actually.

✓ I'd like to go to London, actually.

This sentence is acceptable but needs comma placement. Not a grammar error; minor punctuation only. Suggestion: add comma before 'actually' for natural speech punctuation.

× I traveled in London for about 20 years ago, but I still remember the ways in London.

✓ I traveled to London about 20 years ago, but I still remember the streets there.

Use 'traveled to' not 'in' when indicating visiting a city. 'For about 20 years ago' is incorrect combination of duration and time; use 'about 20 years ago'. 'Ways in London' is unnatural; 'streets' or 'the way around London' is better. Suggestion: use 'about X years ago' for past time and choose appropriate nouns like 'streets'.

× It was really fascinating and cool.

✓ It was really fascinating and cool.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Suggestion: keep as is.

× I went to Higley Park yesterday.

✓ I went to Higley Park yesterday.

This sentence is correct in past tense. No change needed. Suggestion: ensure the park name is spelled correctly if 'Higley' is intended.

× It was really good place to walk around and learn, especially with my children.

✓ It was a really good place to walk around and relax, especially with my children.

Missing article 'a' before 'really good place'. 'Learn' is odd in this context; likely 'relax' or 'enjoy nature' fits better. Suggestion: include articles and choose appropriate verbs for intended meaning.

× They also like that place because there are many trees and flowers.

✓ They also like that place because there are many trees and flowers.

This sentence is grammatically correct as a 'there are' construction. No change needed. Suggestion: keep as is.