Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的で内容は明確ですが、いくつかの表現ミスと冗長性があります。例えば “before committing to the office” は不自然で、意図は「出勤する前に」という意味だと思われますので “commuting to the office” が正しいです。文章を2文以内にまとめ、接続詞（e.g. because, so）を使って自然につなげる練習をしてください。また詳細を一つ追加するとより説得力が増します（頻度や時間帯など）。

예시: Yes, I do. There is a large park near my house, so I often take a walk there before commuting to the office, usually around 7 a.m. when it's quiet.

제안: 回答は文意を伝えていますが、文法上の断片文（短い独立した文）があり、つなぎが不自然です。最初にトピックセンテンスを置き、続けて理由を一つの文でつなぐ練習をしてください。また具体例（例えばどのくらい時間がかかったか）を付け加えると良いです。

예시: Yes, I did because I grew up in a rural area, so I often walked long distances to school and the nearest shops, which sometimes took about 20 minutes.

제안: 内容は適切で理由と具体的な要素（静けさ、景観）を挙げていますが、最初の語句 “It's because working in a park” は意味が曖昧で誤解を招きます。おそらく “walking in a park” の誤りです。接続詞を使って文を滑らかにし、例や結果を一つ添えると更に良くなります。

예시: People like walking in parks because it helps them unwind and feel refreshed; the peaceful atmosphere and the trees and flowers make it easy to relax, which can improve mood and reduce stress.

제안: 最初の文にタイプミスや冗長があり、場所の前置詞や名詞の使い方に不自然さがあります（“at the Imperial Palace Tokyo” は “at the Imperial Palace in Tokyo” が自然、“rush greenery” は意味が不明瞭でおそらく “lush greenery” の誤り）。文を短く明確にし、理由を一つ具体的に述べてください。

예시: If I had the chance, I'd like to take a long walk around the Imperial Palace in Tokyo because of its lush greenery and beautiful seasonal flowers.

제안: 回答は意味が通じますが、時制と頻度表現の使い方がやや不自然です（“recently I always go” は矛盾する表現）。まずトピックセンテンスで時制を明確にし、頻度や具体的な時間を加えると良いです。

예시: Recently I've been walking in the nearby park almost every evening because I enjoy its peaceful atmosphere and fresh air.

× Yes I do, there is a large park near my house so I often walk around there before committing to the office.

✓ Yes, I do. There is a large park near my house, so I often walk around it before going to the office.

There are two issues: 'walk around there' is acceptable but 'around it' is more natural; 'before committing to the office' is incorrect usage of 'commit'. Use 'going to the office' to express travel. Also add commas and a period to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use 'going to the office' and split into two sentences.

× Yes, I did. Because I lived in a rural area.

✓ Yes, I did, because I lived in a rural area.

Fragment: 'Because I lived in a rural area.' is a dependent clause and cannot stand alone. Combine with previous sentence using a comma or rephrase as a single sentence: 'Yes, I did because I lived in a rural area.'

× It took a long time to go to the school or shopping malls.

✓ It took a long time to go to school or to the shopping mall.

Article and noun number: 'the school' is unnecessary unless a specific school is meant; use 'go to school'. 'Shopping malls' as plural is okay, but 'the shopping mall' or 'shopping malls' should match context. Use 'to school or to the shopping mall' for clarity and parallel structure.

× It's because working in a park helps people unwind and feel refreshed.

✓ It's because working in a park helps people unwind and feel refreshed.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence is correct. Explanation: 'helps' correctly matches singular subject 'working' (gerund) and 'unwind and feel' are parallel verbs.

× The peaceful atmosphere and beautiful scenery, such as trees and flowers make it easy to relax and forget your daily stress.

✓ The peaceful atmosphere and beautiful scenery, such as trees and flowers, make it easy to relax and forget your daily stress.

Comma needed after the parenthetical phrase 'such as trees and flowers' to separate it from the main clause. Subject is plural so verb 'make' is correct. Suggestion: add the comma for correct punctuation and readability.

× You I had the chance. I would like to take a long walk at the Imperial Palace Tokyo, because it contains rush greenery with beautiful flowers and trees.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk at the Imperial Palace in Tokyo, because it has lush greenery with beautiful flowers and trees.

Multiple issues: 'You I had the chance.' is garbled; should be 'If I had the chance'. 'Imperial Palace Tokyo' needs preposition 'in'. 'contains rush greenery' - 'contains' is awkward; 'has lush greenery' is natural. 'lush' not 'rush'. Ensure conditional structure 'If I had...' matches 'I would...'.

× Yeah, recently I always go to the park to walk around.

✓ Yeah, recently I have been going to the park to walk around.

Tense mismatch: 'recently' with 'always' suggests present perfect continuous for habitual actions over a recent period. Use 'have been going' or 'have been walking' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues. Alternatively 'I always go' is present simple for habitual general actions; choose 'have been going' for recent habit.

× I like this park because of its peaceful atmosphere.

✓ I like this park because of its peaceful atmosphere.

Sentence is grammatically correct; 'its' properly refers to the park. No change needed.