Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng, trả lời rõ ràng hơn và ngắn gọn (tối đa 5 câu). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, ví dụ nói rõ bạn có đi bộ nhiều hay không và tần suất. Tránh lặp từ, sử dụng con số và đơn vị hợp lý (ví dụ: "10,000 steps"), và sắp xếp ý theo trật tự thời gian. Thực hành nối câu bằng liên từ đơn giản khi cần.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk about 10,000 steps a day. I often walk in the afternoon after I finish my schoolwork. Walking helps me relax and keep fit.

제안: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu và dùng thì quá khứ cho nhất quán. Tránh ngập ngừng và lặp từ như "when I" hoặc "park to". Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn rồi thêm thông tin chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ nơi, với ai, tần suất).

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often walked in the park near my house. I usually went there with my parents or friends in the evenings, and we played or fed the ducks.

제안: Cần sửa lỗi từ vựng và phát âm nhầm ("work" -> "walk"), dùng cấu trúc giải thích rõ ràng: nêu lý do chính rồi đưa ví dụ hoặc kết quả. Tránh lặp động từ và từ mô tả. Dùng liên từ như "because", "so" để kết nối ý.

예시: I think people like walking in parks because there is less traffic and noise than on the streets. Also, parks have fresh air and greenery, so walking there feels more relaxing and healthy.

제안: Dùng câu điều kiện loại 2 chính xác (If I had the chance) và tránh ngập ngừng. Nói rõ địa điểm và lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: xem hoàng hôn, tiếng sóng). Giữ câu súc tích, tối đa 5 câu, và dùng từ vựng phù hợp ("beach", "sunset").

예시: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along the beach. I enjoy watching the sunset and listening to the waves, which makes me feel calm and relaxed.

제안: Dùng thì quá khứ đơn hoặc hiện tại hoàn thành phù hợp và sửa lỗi từ ("work" -> "walk", "arrival" -> "river"). Trả lời trực tiếp nơi bạn đã đi, rồi nêu lý do cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và ngập ngừng; sắp xếp câu rõ ràng với liên từ như "because".

예시: Lately I walked along the river near my house. I go there in the afternoon because the air is fresh and the peaceful view helps me relax.

× Yes I do. I work a lot about about 10,000 per day.

✓ Yes, I do. I work a lot, about 10,000 steps per day.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk' or 'take steps' causing wrong verb choice and unclear meaning. Replace with 'work'->'walk' or better 'take steps' depending on context; add a comma and unit 'steps' to clarify quantity. Ensure present simple tense 'work/walk' matches habitual action.

× I often work in the afternoon after I after I uh in after I studying in school.

✓ I often walk in the afternoon after I finish studying at school.

Phrase has repeated fragments and wrong verb 'work' instead of 'walk'; tense and structure unclear. Use present simple 'walk' for habitual action and 'after I finish studying' to show sequence. Use preposition 'at school'. Remove filler words.

× Yes, I did, uh, when I, when I was a child, I often when outside or park to uh, or park to work, to walk, umm, I often walk in uh, the park near my house.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I often went outside to the park to walk. I often walked in the park near my house.

Mixed present and past tenses and repeated words. Use past tense 'went' and 'walked' for past habits. Clean redundant phrases and order clauses clearly: 'When I was a child, I often went outside to the park to walk.'

× In my opinion, people like to work in parks because because in parks don't have many yards by motorbike or car and uh and is the park has it.

✓ In my opinion, people like to walk in parks because parks do not have many cars or motorbikes and the park is safe.

Wrong prepositions and word choice: 'work in parks' should be 'walk in parks'; 'yards by motorbike or car' is unclear — use 'cars or motorbikes'. Use correct subject-verb 'parks do not have'. Simplify and use 'safe' to convey idea. Remove filler words.

× Parks have a fresh air so they can feel more comfortable, comfortable.

✓ Parks have fresh air, so people can feel more comfortable.

'article error and redundancy: 'a fresh air' is incorrect — 'fresh air' is uncountable and needs no 'a'. Duplicate 'comfortable' removed and subject clarified as 'people'. Use comma before 'so'.

× Umm, if I have opportunity, I uh, would like to uh, take a long walk, walk in, in the beach.

✓ If I had the opportunity, I would like to take a long walk on the beach.

Conditional form incorrect: use second conditional 'If I had the opportunity' for hypothetical situations. Use preposition 'on the beach' not 'in the beach'. Remove repeated words and filler. 'Would like' is correct for desire.

× Uh, I cannot look at sunset or sunshine, so I feel relaxed.

✓ I can watch the sunset or sunrise, so I feel relaxed.

Wrong verb 'cannot look at' should be 'can watch' (ability to enjoy). Also 'sunshine' is general; use 'sunrise' or 'sunset' for times of day. Present simple 'feel' matches habitual effect.

× Umm, I work lately, uh umm, in a along the river near my house.

✓ Lately, I have been walking along the river near my house.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been walking' for an action repeated recently. 'Work' is wrong verb; use 'walking'. Remove extra articles and use 'along the river'. 'Lately' pairs with present perfect.

× Uh, in the afternoon I often walk along the arrival near my house because uh, it is a fresh air and I feel relaxed and comfortable.

✓ In the afternoon I often walk along the river near my house because the air is fresh and I feel relaxed and comfortable.

Typo 'arrival' should be 'river'. Use 'the air' not 'a fresh air' (uncountable). Keep present simple 'walk' for habitual action. Remove filler words.