Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitive words, correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and use linking words only if adding details. Focus on one or two specific benefits with precise language.

예시: Yes, I walk regularly. It helps me stay fit and boosts my energy, which makes me more productive at work.

제안: Answer directly in past tense, keep sentences short, avoid filler words, and give a clear reason with a specific example from childhood.

예시: No, I didn't. When I was a child I preferred playing games indoors with my friends, so I rarely went for walks.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence, correct noun phrases, and give two specific reasons using linking words for coherence. Avoid vague phrases and ensure grammar is correct.

예시: People enjoy walking in parks because the green surroundings are relaxing and fresh. Also, parks provide social spaces where strangers can meet and chat, which helps improve communication and mood.

제안: Use a clear conditional structure, correct place names and reasons, and keep it concise. Give one or two specific reasons why that place appeals to you.

예시: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk in Shimla with my friends because of its cool climate and scenic mountain views, which make it perfect for relaxing and sightseeing.

제안: Speak in correct past tense, avoid repetitions, and give specific details (place name, duration, activities). Use linking words to sequence actions (first, then, afterwards).

예시: Today I went for a 30-minute walk in the park near my house with my friend Harman. First we walked around the lake, and afterwards I did a short meditation.

× 'Definitely just being a fitness freak person.'

✓ 'I am definitely a fitness freak.'

'Being' without a clear auxiliary and the phrase 'fitness freak person' is awkward. This is a subject-verb agreement and sentence structure problem: a full clause needs a subject and verb. Use 'I am' and the noun phrase 'a fitness freak.'

× 'I love walking because it has me to remain fit and fitter and do more productive at workplace and it give me immense energy for work.'

✓ 'I love walking because it helps me remain fit, be more productive at work, and gives me a lot of energy.'

'has me to remain' and 'do more productive' and 'it give' are incorrect verb uses and tense/subject-verb agreement. Use 'helps me' + base verb to express purpose, 'be more productive at work' for correct structure, and 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'it.'

× 'Definitely no when I was a kid.'

✓ 'Definitely not when I was a kid.'

'No' is not the correct adverb to negate this clause. Use 'not' after an auxiliary or adverb like 'definitely' to negate: 'definitely not.' This fixes word choice and sentence correctness.

× 'I'm also trying spend uh with my buddies in and with playing them instead of do did this kind of healthy activity so I did not go outside for a walking.'

✓ 'I also tried to spend time playing with my buddies instead of doing this kind of healthy activity, so I did not go outside for a walk.'

This sentence has multiple structure and verb form errors: 'trying spend' should be 'tried to spend' or 'used to spend,' 'playing them' should be 'playing with them,' 'do did' is wrong—use the gerund 'doing,' and 'a walking' should be 'a walk.' The corrected sentence uses past tense consistently and correct verb forms.

× 'I think people like to walk in park because provide park provider scene environment as well as shared area for people where they can talk with the stranger and enhance their communication skill.'

✓ 'I think people like to walk in parks because parks provide a pleasant environment and shared space where people can talk to strangers and improve their communication skills.'

Multiple preposition and article errors: use plural 'parks' and 'in parks,' add article 'a pleasant environment,' and 'talk to strangers' uses correct preposition. Also 'enhance their communication skill' should be plural 'skills.' This fixes preposition and article use and word choice.

× 'Apart from this park rider comfortable for.'

✓ 'Apart from this, parks are comfortable places.'

Sentence structure is broken and unclear. 'Park rider' is incorrect; likely meant 'parks are comfortable.' Rewriting gives a grammatical subject and verb and correct noun phrase.

× 'Well, if I get a chance for a long queue, I would like to go Shimla with my buddies because of Shimla is the coldest city in Himachal, so I would like to enjoy my life moment and nowadays in my country the weather.'

✓ 'Well, if I had the chance for a long walk, I would like to go to Shimla with my friends because Shimla is one of the coldest cities in Himachal; I would like to enjoy the moment there, especially because of the weather in my country nowadays.'

Tense and word choice errors: use conditional 'if I had the chance' for hypothetical, 'long walk' not 'long queue,' 'go to Shimla' requires preposition 'to,' and simplify 'because of Shimla is' to 'because Shimla is.' The sentence was fragmented; restructuring clarifies meaning and corrects tense and prepositions.

× 'Today I go for a walk in park, which is just don't throw away from my house.'

✓ 'Today I went for a walk in the park, which is just down the road from my house.'

Tense error and incorrect phrases: 'Today I go' should be past 'I went' if describing a completed action. 'In park' needs article 'the park.' 'Don't throw away' is incorrect—use 'down the road' to indicate proximity.

× 'I go there with my comrade Harman and I go.'

✓ 'I went there with my friend Harman.'

Preposition and tense: use past tense 'went' to match context, and 'comrade' is odd in this context—'friend' is more natural. Remove the redundant 'and I go.'

× 'I spend my time about 30 minutes in there and do some meditation after walking.'

✓ 'I spent about 30 minutes there and did some meditation after walking.'

Tense consistency: use past tense 'spent' and 'did' to describe completed actions. Also 'in there' should be 'there.'