Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, avoid repetition, use correct verb forms and prepositions, and include a brief supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason or frequency detail using linking words.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk to and from work because my office is nearby, and walking helps me stay fit and clear my mind.

제안: Use past tense consistently, avoid awkward phrasing, and give one or two specific examples. Begin with a topic sentence in the past tense, then add supporting details linked with words like "for example" or "often".

예시: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. For example, I would roam around the neighbourhood with friends and visit nearby parks to play and explore.

제안: Focus on clear, accurate vocabulary and grammar. Use linking words to structure reasons, and avoid incorrect words or confusing phrases. Provide two clear reasons with brief explanations and correct word choices.

예시: People like walking in parks because they offer peaceful scenery away from urban noise, which helps reduce stress. In addition, parks have safe paths for light exercise, making walks both enjoyable and healthy.

제안: Use correct conditional and verb forms, and avoid informal contractions in tests. Start with a conditional topic sentence, then add a short reason using a linking word.

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the seashore because the sound of the waves and the fresh air feel very relaxing.

제안: Use past tense consistently and correct nouns; avoid confusing words like "work" if you mean "walk". Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add two specific details linked with "because" or "which".

예시: Last weekend I went for a walk in Riverside Park near my home. I enjoyed it because the path is lined with trees and there are benches where I could rest, which made the walk peaceful after a busy week.

× Yes I do. I usually walk going to my work and. Yes I do. I usually walk home to work and.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually walk to work and home.

The original sentence uses an incorrect verb sequence 'walk going' and redundant phrasing. This is a present simple context describing habitual action, so use 'walk to work' and 'walk home' or combine as 'walk to work and home.' Use commas for clarity and remove extra 'and.' Suggestions: say 'I usually walk to work' or 'I usually walk to and from work.'

× Yes, I usually walk when I was a child roaming around the neighborhoods and I also walk when we're going to nearby parks and also one.

✓ Yes, I usually walked when I was a child, roaming around the neighbourhood and also when we went to nearby parks.

The sentence mixes present simple ('walk') with past time reference ('when I was a child'), causing tense inconsistency. Use past simple ('walked', 'went') for past habits. Remove redundant words ('also one') and fix pronoun contraction 'we're' to past 'we' form. Suggestions: use 'I usually walked' and 'we went.'

× People enjoy walking in parks because it's offers peaceful land, peaceful landscapes from urban noise, and a chance to connect with nature, which reduces stress and prove smooth.

✓ People enjoy walking in parks because they offer peaceful landscapes away from urban noise and a chance to connect with nature, which reduces stress and promotes well-being.

Errors: 'it's offers' mixes contraction 'it's' with plural verb 'offers' and incorrect subject; 'land' awkward, 'from' wrong preposition, and 'prove smooth' is incorrect verb phrase. Use plural subject 'they' for 'parks' and verb 'offer.' Replace 'land' with 'landscapes' and 'from' with 'away from.' Replace 'prove smooth' with 'promotes well-being' (meaningful collocation). Suggestions: match subject and verb number and use idiomatic expressions like 'away from urban noise' and 'promotes well-being.'

× In addition, parts provide safe, accessible paths for light exercise, making a walking boat enjoyable and beneficial for her.

✓ In addition, parks provide safe, accessible paths for light exercise, making walking enjoyable and beneficial for people.

Multiple errors: 'parts' should be 'parks' (spelling), 'a walking boat' is nonsense and likely a mischoice; 'for her' is oddly specific and inconsistent. Use 'parks' and generalize to 'people' or 'walkers.' Use gerund 'making walking enjoyable.' Suggestions: proofread for spelling and choose appropriate nouns; keep subject consistent ('people' rather than 'her').

× If I had the chance, I choose to take a long walk on the shore 'cause it's feels relaxing and enjoyable.

✓ If I had the chance, I would choose to take a long walk on the shore because it feels relaxing and enjoyable.

This is a second conditional sentence about an unreal present/future situation; use modal 'would' with base verb 'choose' rather than present 'choose.' Also 'cause' should be 'because' and 'it's feels' incorrectly combines contraction with verb; use 'it feels.' Suggestions: use 'If I had the chance, I would...' and 'because it feels...'.

× I went to work in the Riverside Park near my home last weekend. I enjoyed our Rd. because the path is lined with trees and there are benches where I can rest which makes it peaceful after a busy week.

✓ I went to Riverside Park near my home last weekend. I enjoyed it because the path was lined with trees and there were benches where I could rest, which made it peaceful after a busy week.

Tense inconsistency: main clause is past ('went') so supporting descriptions should be past ('was lined', 'were', 'could rest', 'made'). 'I enjoyed our Rd.' is confusing; likely meant 'I enjoyed it' or the park. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestions: keep past tense consistently and clarify reference ('it' or 'the park').