Walking— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, use correct verb forms and vocabulary (walk, exercise), and limit to 2–4 sentences. Use a linking word to show contrast when talking about past and present habits.

예시: Yes, I walk a lot now because I believe it is important for my health. A few years ago I rarely exercised and preferred staying at home, but now I walk every day to stay fit.

제안: Give a direct answer, use past tense consistently, and avoid repetition. Provide one or two specific details (with linking words) about who you walked with and where. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often went for walks with my parents when I was a child. We usually walked to a beautiful temple near our home in the mornings, and each walk lasted about 30 minutes.

제안: Answer directly and use correct nouns and vocabulary (scenery, nature, peaceful). Use linking words to list reasons and add a short personal opinion. Keep sentences clear and grammatical.

예시: People like walking in parks because of the beautiful scenery and the peaceful atmosphere. Also, parks let people enjoy nature and relax, so I prefer walking near parks myself.

제안: Answer the hypothetical clearly using conditional form (would + verb). Mention one clear reason and one specific detail about the place. Avoid repeating phrases and correct word order and vocabulary (adventurous, mountain range).

예시: If I had the chance, I would take a long hike in the Manaslu mountain region because I have always dreamed of exploring its dramatic scenery. I imagine spending several days trekking through alpine trails and small villages.

제안: Use past tense consistently and name the place correctly. Give 1–2 specific reasons for visiting (architecture, scenery) and finish the thought. Avoid fragmented sentences and incorrect word forms.

예시: The last time I went for a walk was at the White Gumba (a famous stupa) in Kathmandu Valley. I visited because of its beautiful architecture and peaceful surroundings, which made for a pleasant walk.

× Is I work wallet because it is very important for our health basis.

✓ I walk a lot because it is very important for our health.

The sentence uses incorrect pronoun form and structure. 'Is I' is incorrect; the subject should be 'I'. 'work wallet' seems to be intended as 'walk a lot'. 'Health basis' is incorrect collocation; use 'for our health'. Suggestion: use subject + verb (I walk) and correct vocabulary (walk, health).

× Few years ago I don't have a habit for working, I prefer to stay home and do not believe in physical exercise.

✓ A few years ago I didn't have a habit of exercising; I preferred to stay home and didn't believe in physical exercise.

Tense inconsistency and incorrect auxiliary forms. 'Few years ago' needs article 'A few years ago'. Use past simple 'didn't have', 'preferred', and 'didn't believe' for past time. 'Habit for working' should be 'habit of exercising'.

× But nowadays I regularly do work for my better health.

✓ But nowadays I regularly walk/exercise for my health.

Verb choice and collocation: 'do work' is awkward; use 'walk' or 'exercise'. 'For my better health' is unnatural; use 'for my health' or 'to improve my health'. Present simple 'I regularly walk' fits current habit.

× Yes, I often go outside to have a walk when I am child with my parents.

✓ Yes, I often went outside for a walk with my parents when I was a child.

Mixed tenses: 'often go' and 'am child' conflict with past time. Use past simple 'went' and 'was a child'. Preposition order: 'for a walk' and 'with my parents'.

× I love to walk with my friends near my home like we used to went a beautiful temple in the morning time.

✓ I loved walking with my friends near my home; we used to go to a beautiful temple in the morning.

Past habits require past tense: 'loved' or 'I used to love'. 'Used to went' is incorrect; after 'used to' use base form 'go'. 'A beautiful temple' needs article. 'In the morning time' is redundant; 'in the morning' is natural.

× It's about 30 minutes walk per day.

✓ It was about a 30-minute walk per day.

When referring to a past routine, use past tense 'was'. Use article 'a' and hyphenated adjective '30-minute' before 'walk'. Also 'per day' could be 'each day'.

× I love to I.

✓ I loved it.

Sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. Likely intended 'I loved it.' Use past simple to match previous past context; 'it' is required as object.

× There are several reason why people like to walk in parks such as the beautiful scenario and the peaceful environment and also some people love their natures.

✓ There are several reasons why people like to walk in parks, such as the beautiful scenery, the peaceful environment, and because some people love nature.

Use plural 'reasons'. 'Scenario' is wrong word; use 'scenery'. 'Their natures' is incorrect; use 'nature' (uncountable). Add commas and conjunctions for clarity.

× That's why I personally I also prefer to work near parks.

✓ That's why I personally also prefer to walk near parks.

'I personally I' is redundant; remove one 'I'. 'Prefer to work' is wrong choice; use 'prefer to walk'. Pronoun placement and verb choice corrected.

× I would like to take a long walk if I had chance.

✓ I would like to take a long walk if I had the chance.

Missing article 'the' after 'had'. The conditional structure 'would like... if I had the chance' is fine; add article for correctness.

× I will definitely go hiking in Manaslu mountains because the environment of Manaslu is very in adventurous and this is my dream for since childhood.

✓ I would definitely go hiking in the Manaslu mountains because the environment is very adventurous, and this has been my dream since childhood.

Tense and modal mismatch: use 'would' to match hypothetical conditional in previous sentence. 'Manaslu mountains' needs 'the' and plural form is okay: 'the Manaslu mountains'. 'Very in adventurous' is incorrect word order; use 'very adventurous'. 'For since childhood' is wrong; use 'since childhood' or 'for as long as I can remember'.

× I if I had a chance I will definitely win.

✓ If I had a chance, I would definitely go.

Mixed conditional forms and unclear verb 'win'. For hypothetical 'If I had a chance' use 'would' + base verb. 'Win' doesn't fit context; likely meant 'go' or 'do it'.

× The last time I went for the work was the cut white Kumba.

✓ The last time I went for a walk was to the White Gumba/Kumba.

'Went for the work' should be 'went for a walk'. Place name unclear: 'cut white Kumba' seems to refer to 'White Gumba' (gumba/gompa). Use 'to' with destination. Capitalize proper noun.

× The white gumba is very famous in Kathmandu Valley.

✓ The White Gumba is very famous in the Kathmandu Valley.

Capitalization and article: 'Kathmandu Valley' is a proper noun and often preceded by 'the'. 'White Gumba' as a place name should be capitalized.

× The beautiful scenario and the architectural made of the building is the special.

✓ The beautiful scenery and the architecture of the building are special.

Use 'scenery' not 'scenario'. 'Architectural made of the building' is incorrect; use 'the architecture of the building'. Subject-verb agreement: two subjects require plural verb 'are'. 'Special' without article is fine here.

× That's why I went and I will definitely.

✓ That's why I went, and I will definitely go again.

Sentence incomplete: 'I will definitely' needs a verb. Add 'go again' to complete future intention. Use comma to join clauses.