Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific details (e.g., favorite genres or recent book) using a linking word to support your statement.

예시: Yes, I enjoy reading. I like both novels and nonfiction because novels help me relax while nonfiction helps me learn new things. For example, I recently read a history book about ancient civilizations, which inspired me to start a small library in my room.

제안: Make your preference clear, fix grammar, and explain the reason with specific examples and a linking word. Avoid vague phrases and redundancies.

예시: I prefer reading on paper because it helps me concentrate. For instance, when I read on a screen I get distracted by social media notifications, but a paper book lets me focus on the text.

제안: Give a clear contrast using a topic sentence and linking words. State specific situations when careful reading is required (e.g., contracts, instructions) and when skimming is fine (e.g., simple stories), and avoid filler words.

예시: I need to read carefully when I deal with important information, such as contracts, manuals, or academic articles, because details matter. On the other hand, I do not read carefully when I browse simple stories or light blog posts, where skimming is usually enough.

제안: State your preference clearly, correct grammar, and explain the benefit with a specific example and linking words. Avoid unclear phrasing.

예시: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand the full meaning and remember important points. For example, when I read a novel carefully, I notice the characters' development and the main themes, which makes the story more memorable.

× Yes, I really enjoy reading I really novels or nonfiction and my goal to build a small library in my room and have some and gain some knowledge from the books from books.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy reading, both novels and nonfiction. My goal is to build a small library in my room and to gain knowledge from the books.

The original sentence has run-on structure, missing verbs and connectors. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Fix by splitting into two sentences, adding the verb 'is' for the goal, using 'both' to list two types, and removing repetition 'from books'. Use parallel infinitives 'to build' and 'to gain'.

× I actually prefer everything on the read on paper because it really makes sense of treating because I think when you're when you're read on the screen, you're always distraught with some social media or some message that is not so good.

✓ I actually prefer to read on paper because it really makes sense. When you read on a screen, you are often distracted by social media or messages.

This contains incorrect prepositions and word choice (ID 11) and sentence structure issues. Change 'prefer everything on the read on paper' to 'prefer to read on paper'. Replace 'makes sense of treating' with 'makes sense'. Use 'distracted' not 'distraught', and remove redundant phrases. Also correct verb forms: 'when you read'.

× I need to read carefully in some actions or the, uh, the combination of the books and when they are just just, umm, well, merely, uh, describing some action that they did, I think it's not, it's not necessary or not sufficient.

✓ I need to read carefully in some sections or when books describe actions; when they merely describe past actions, careful reading is not always necessary.

The original misuses 'actions' and has awkward tense and structure (ID 6). Use 'sections' or 'passages' instead of 'actions'. Use present tense 'describe' for general statements and 'past actions' to clarify. Simplify and combine ideas for clarity.

× I usually prefer detailed reading because it you can this books will go or go to your head when you're reading the tale because you're catching all details and and know all main idea of the top books.

✓ I usually prefer detailed reading because it helps the book's ideas stay in your head when you read; you catch all the details and understand the main ideas of the best books.

The sentence has article errors and unclear pronoun references (ID 22). Replace 'it you can this books will go or go to your head' with 'it helps the book's ideas stay in your head'. Use 'the details' and 'the main ideas' with definite articles. 'Top books' changed to 'best books' for natural phrasing and agreement.