Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is positive and shows a wide interest in reading, but it is slightly unnatural and repetitive. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundant phrases (e.g., “anything that can be read”), and use more natural collocations (e.g., “all kinds of books” instead of “every kind of books”). Add one brief specific example to make the answer more vivid.

예시: Yes, I enjoy reading. I read all kinds of books, from educational non-fiction and journals to novels and blogs. For example, I often read popular science books because they explain complex ideas in a clear way.

제안: Good direct answer with a clear reason. Improve grammar (use present tense: ‘become’ and ‘cause’), and expand slightly with one linked supporting detail using a linking phrase (e.g., ‘because’ or ‘so’). Keep it concise and natural.

예시: I prefer reading on paper because when I read on a screen my eyes become dry and my vision gets blurry, so I find paper more comfortable for long reading sessions.

제안: The main idea is clear, but the answer is repetitive and imprecise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating ‘important’, and give specific examples of texts requiring careful reading. Use a linking word to contrast when careful reading is unnecessary.

예시: I need to read carefully when the text contains important information, such as official announcements, legal documents, or work emails, because mistakes can have consequences. By contrast, I don’t read carefully when I’m reading jokes or light fiction for entertainment.

제안: Your preference is clear but the answer is repetitive and tautological. Start with a concise topic sentence, give a reason using linking words (e.g., ‘because’ or ‘so’) and provide a brief example of when you use detailed reading to show understanding.

예시: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand complex information accurately. For example, I read technical manuals in detail to make sure I follow instructions correctly.

× Yes I do, and I like every kind of books, whether it would be educational fictions, journals, articles, blogs, manuals, anything that can be read.

✓ Yes I do, and I like every kind of book, whether it is educational fiction, journals, articles, blogs, manuals, anything that can be read.

'Every' should be followed by a singular noun, so 'every kind of book' is correct. 'Fictions' is uncountable in this sense; use 'fiction' without plural. 'Whether it would be' is incorrect conditional/modal use for a simple statement; use 'whether it is'. This keeps present-tense general preference.

× I prefer reading on paper because on screen my eyes became dry and causing my vision to be blurry.

✓ I prefer reading on paper because on a screen my eyes become dry and my vision becomes blurry.

The sentence expresses a general present habit, so use present simple 'become' not past 'became'. Also use parallel structure: 'my eyes become dry and my vision becomes blurry.' Add article 'a' before 'screen' for natural phrasing.

× When the text is important and consists of announcements or anything that is important, and not when it's all about funny jokes. Uh, fiction stories, something like that.

✓ When the text is important, for example announcements or other important information; not when it's just funny jokes, fiction, or similar things.

Original is a sentence fragment and repetitive ('important' repeated). Combine into a complete sentence with clear contrast. Use 'for example' to introduce examples and 'not when' to contrast. Remove filler 'Uh' and vague 'something like that' for clarity.

× I prefer detailed reading because it is detailed and I want to read in a detailed way. It makes me understand the text very clearly.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand the text more thoroughly.

Original is repetitive and wordy. Condense into a single clear sentence: 'detailed reading helps me understand the text more thoroughly.' This maintains present tense and conveys the reason succinctly.