Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn: sửa ngữ pháp, dùng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, tránh câu thừa và từ sai nghĩa. Cụ thể: (1) Trình bày ý chính trước (Yes, I enjoy reading), (2) Trình bày chi tiết hỗ trợ với thời gian/ ví dụ cụ thể (When I was ten I read... names of books), (3) Sửa lỗi động từ và danh từ (e.g., "reading improved my knowledge"), (4) Tránh từ không đúng như "winning an authorities" hoặc "ticket rolling" bằng cách nêu tên sách/ tác giả hoặc thể loại. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu, dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "for example" để liên kết ý.

예시: Yes, I enjoy reading. When I was about ten, I read a lot of fantasy books, such as the Harry Potter series, which sparked my interest. Reading has improved my knowledge because it helps me learn about different cultures and life lessons.

제안: Cần diễn đạt ngắn gọn, chính xác và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (I prefer reading on paper), rồi giải thích lý do rõ ràng (it is easier on my eyes) và cung cấp ví dụ/ tình huống (for long articles or at night). Tránh cấu trúc lộn xộn và từ sai ("printing on screen"). Dùng liên từ như "because" và "for example" để nối câu.

예시: I prefer reading on paper because it is easier on my eyes, especially when I read for a long time. For example, when I study at night, paper books are more comfortable than screens.

제안: Cần tổ chức ý rõ ràng: nêu hai tình huống tương phản (cần đọc kỹ và không cần đọc kỹ) rồi giải thích lý do. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc: dùng "need to read carefully" và "don't need to read carefully". Nếu nói mình luôn đọc kỹ thì giải thích lý do cụ thể. Giữ câu ngắn, dùng liên từ như "however" hoặc "but" để đối chiếu.

예시: You need to read carefully when studying textbooks or instructions because small details matter. However, you don't have to read comics or light magazines very carefully if you just want entertainment, although personally I often still read some books in detail to enjoy the style.

제안: Cần diễn đạt rõ lập luận: nêu lựa chọn (detailed reading) rồi giải thích lí do cụ thể và ngắn gọn. Sửa lỗi từ vựng (use "detail" → "detailed", "authorities" → "author/author's message"). Thêm ví dụ khi cần (e.g., reading a novel to understand characters). Dùng một hoặc hai liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để liên kết ý.

예시: I prefer detailed reading because paying attention to details helps me understand the author's message and the characters' motivations. For example, when I read a novel, I focus on descriptions and dialogue to better interpret the story.

× When I was just around 10 years old I was very into reading and I often read books from winning an authorities and also the Harry Potter from ticket rolling.

✓ When I was about 10 years old I was very into reading and I often read books like Winning an Author's work and also Harry Potter from the publisher Ticket Rolling.

Incorrect past-tense phrasing and several wrong word choices made the sentence unclear. Use 'was' for past state (correct), replace 'just around' with 'about' for naturalness, and correct noun phrases ('Winning an Author's work', 'publisher Ticket Rolling') to convey meaning. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use correct nouns and possessive forms.

× And I think reading improve my knowledge a lot because I can learn a lot of things such as life are.

✓ And I think reading improves my knowledge a lot because I can learn many things about life.

Subject-verb agreement requires third-person singular 'improves' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6/27). 'A lot of things' can be simplified to 'many things', and 'such as life are' is ungrammatical; use 'about life'. Suggestion: use third-person singular verb forms with 'reading' as a noun subject and choose correct prepositional phrase 'about life'.

× In my opinion, I would rather choose a paper than a screen because of the paper is a can help my eyes balance the worst, but the screen isn't.

✓ In my opinion, I would rather choose paper rather than a screen because paper can help my eyes feel less strained, but the screen cannot.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'paper'; use uncountable 'paper' or 'a paper copy'. 'Is a can help' is ungrammatical; remove extra words and use modal 'can'. 'Balance the worst' should be 'feel less strained' for clarity. Suggestion: omit wrong articles, use correct modal verb forms, and choose appropriate adjective phrases.

× Not because of when I'm printing on screen, I can not handle my eyes about the work as well.

✓ When I look at a screen, my eyes cannot handle the strain as well.

Awkward structure 'Not because of when' and incorrect verb 'printing' used instead of 'looking' or 'reading'. 'Can not handle my eyes about the work' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use clear clause order: time clause 'When I look at a screen,' + main clause; use 'cannot handle the strain' to express difficulty.

× I think we must need carefully when we read some books about teaching knowledge and not reading carefully about when we read some are cartoons magazine as well.

✓ I think we need to read carefully when we study educational books, but we do not need to read as carefully when we read comic magazines.

Redundant modals 'must need' is incorrect; use 'need to'. Incorrect gerund usage 'not reading carefully about when' and word order problems. 'Cartoons magazine' should be 'comic magazines'. Suggestion: use 'need to' for necessity, correct collocations like 'read carefully' and match plural forms.

× And I think for me, every kind of book, I will read it carefully.

✓ And I think, for me, every kind of book I read I will read carefully.

Awkward repetition and pronoun placement; original sentence is understandable but unnatural. Ensure subject and verb agreement and smoother word order. Suggestion: place relative phrase 'every kind of book I read' before the main clause 'I will read carefully' or simply 'I read every kind of book carefully.'

× So from my perspective, I prefer the detail reading because when you pay more attention about the detail in the books, you will have like most of time thinking about that detail, what the authorities want to tell to the the reader and also that.

✓ So from my perspective, I prefer detailed reading because when you pay more attention to the details in a book, you will spend most of the time thinking about those details and what the author wants to tell the reader.

Use 'detailed reading' (adjective) not 'the detail reading'. Preposition should be 'pay attention to'. 'Most of time' should be 'most of the time'. 'Authorities' is wrong; use 'author'. Remove duplicate 'the the'. Suggestion: use adjective forms, correct prepositions, pluralize 'details', and choose correct nouns ('author').