Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意図が伝わるが、文法ミス・語彙選択の誤り・冗長さが目立ちます。まず一文で直接的に答え、その後で作家名や理由を明確に述べましょう。接続詞（because, so）を使い、文をつなげて流れを良くしてください。また不自然な表現（"bubbly sweating"など）は正しい語彙に置き換えましょう。具体的な改善点： 1) トピック文：簡潔に好みを述べる（1文）。 2) 理由を述べる際はbecauseやasを使う。例を一つ挙げる。 3) 文法（tense, article）と語彙の正確さを確認する。

예시: Yes, I love reading. These days I often read novels, and my favorite author is Mitsuki Zimala because she writes gentle, slightly mysterious stories about friendship that relax me and make me feel comforted.

제안: 内容は明確で紙の本を好む理由も述べられていますが、語彙の誤用と不自然な語順があるため、流暢さと正確さを向上させる必要があります。まず短く直接答え（"I prefer paper books."）、次に理由を1〜2文で説明してください。接続語（because, so, which）を使って論理的に結び、語彙（texture, smell, immerse）を正しく使いましょう。

예시: I prefer reading on paper. I enjoy the texture and smell of real books because they help me immerse myself in the story, so I usually try to buy physical copies.

제안: 意図は分かりますが、文法（be動詞の誤用）や繰り返しがあり、冗長です。まず直接的なトピック文を述べ（"I need to read carefully when..."）、その後で対比を示すために"in contrast"や"however"を使いましょう。具体的かつ簡潔な例を加えると良いです。

예시: I need to read carefully when I read mystery novels because I want to understand clues and the plot. In contrast, when I read comedies or light fantasy, I usually skim and only read my favorite parts.

제안: 回答が曖昧で文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。まず好みを明確に述べ（scanning or detailed reading）、続けて理由を1〜2文で述べてください。論理をつなぐためにlinking words（because, so, therefore）を使い、語彙は正確に（"detailed reading", "immersed", "readers' comments"）選びましょう。最後に結論を短く締めると良いです。

예시: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me get fully immersed in the story. After finishing a book I often read other readers' comments to compare opinions, so careful reading lets me follow the discussion.

× Yes, I love reading and these days I often read novels and my favorite writer is Mitsuki Zimala.

✓ Yes, I love reading. These days I often read novels, and my favorite writer is Mitsuki Zimala.

The original sentence is a run-on with unclear clause boundaries. Split into two sentences and add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to separate independent clauses. This improves clarity and sentence flow.

× She writes bubbly sweating like mysterious and friendship story and it made me very relaxed and.

✓ She writes bubbly, suspenseful mystery and friendship stories, and they make me feel very relaxed.

Words like 'sweating' and 'mysterious' were used incorrectly. Use appropriate adjectives ('suspenseful' or 'mysterious') and pluralize 'stories' to match the meaning. Use correct verb agreement ('they make') and a complete clause instead of a sentence fragment.

× Feel like.

✓ I feel that way.

Original is a fragment without subject and verb. Provide a complete clause with subject and verb to express the feeling clearly.

× Unite, penetrate, play for a reading in big bars because I like the texture of the book and the the smell of the paper and it helped me absorb into the book's story very well.

✓ I prefer reading physical books in quiet places because I like the texture and smell of paper, and it helps me immerse myself in the story.

The original has many incorrect word choices and a confusing list. Replace incorrect verbs with 'prefer,' restructure the sentence for natural phrasing, correct article duplication ('the the'), use present-tense 'helps' to match habitual action, and use 'immerse myself in' for correct verb-preposition combination.

× So I try to buy books.

✓ So I try to buy books whenever I can.

Grammatically the sentence is acceptable but is abrupt. Adding 'whenever I can' clarifies intention and fits the context.

× When I read some mysterious stories, I'm be careful, I be I'm careful and I try to understand everything from the book.

✓ When I read mystery stories, I am careful; I try to understand everything in the book.

The original contains incorrect auxiliary 'be' forms ('I'm be', 'I be I'm') which are ungrammatical. Use the simple present 'I am' for habitual actions and remove redundant clauses. Also use 'mystery stories' for natural phrasing and 'in the book' for correct preposition.

× But in contrast, when I read like comedy or fantasy, sorry, I tend to like only my favorite part I read.

✓ But when I read comedy or fantasy, I tend to read only my favorite parts.

Remove filler words like 'like' and 'sorry,' simplify structure, use plural 'parts' for repeated habit, and place verbs in simple present to express typical behavior.

× I like actually details bleeding but it makes me marched in the story and I like reading books and after that I always see the comment of other readers so. Reading carefully makes me.

✓ I actually like detailed reading because it helps me become absorbed in the story. I also like to read other readers' comments afterward, so careful reading suits me.

Original has many incorrect words ('bleeding', 'marched') and fragments. Replace with 'detailed reading' and 'become absorbed' for correct meaning, restructure into complete sentences, and correct noun phrases ('other readers' comments') and logical connectors ('so') to convey cause and effect.