Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward phrasing and grammar errors (e.g., article use, singular/plural, verb forms), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific example of what you read or when you read to make it more concrete.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy reading. It has been a lifelong hobby, and I usually read for pleasure or self-improvement. Lately I try to set aside thirty minutes before bed to read a novel or a short article because I'm busy during the day.

제안: Make your language more natural and correct grammar. Use a clear topic sentence stating preference, give one or two concise reasons linked with cohesive devices (because, so), and avoid filler phrases. Replace awkward expressions like 'As much as the Gen. Z myself' and 'get away' with natural alternatives.

예시: I prefer reading on paper rather than on a screen because paper reduces eye strain and helps me focus. For example, when I read a paperback novel I rarely get distracted by notifications, so I finish chapters faster and enjoy the story more.

제안: Provide a clearer contrast and more specific examples. Start with a direct topic sentence stating when careful reading is necessary and when skimming is acceptable. Use linking words (for example, however) and give concrete contexts (e.g., studying vs. browsing social media). Correct modal/tense errors (could → can).

예시: I usually read carefully when the material is important, for example when studying for exams or reading instructions, because I need to understand details. However, I skim during casual browsing or when checking news headlines so I can quickly find the main idea.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence stating your preference and include a brief explanation with a specific example. Avoid hesitation words (umm) and repetitive phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct small grammar issues (lines by lines → line by line).

예시: I prefer detailed reading because I like to understand the author's message and find deeper meanings. For instance, when I read a short story, I go line by line and annotate themes and character motives, which helps me learn lessons from the plot.

× It is one of the sustainable hobby that sticks with me throughout adulthood.

✓ It is one of the sustainable hobbies that stick with me throughout adulthood.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural because it follows 'one of the', which requires a plural noun. Also, 'that sticks' must become 'that stick' to agree with the plural antecedent 'hobbies' (subject-verb agreement). Suggestion: use 'one of the + plural noun' and match the relative clause verb to that plural noun.

× However, I just need to find a specific time for me to read nowadays as I am busy with other things.

✓ However, I just need to find a specific time to read nowadays because I am busy with other things.

The phrase 'for me to read' is wordy; 'to read' is more natural. 'As' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer for cause. The present progressive 'I am busy' correctly indicates current situation; no tense change needed. Suggestion: simplify infinitive phrase and use 'because' for clarity.

× As much as the Gen. Z myself, I still prefer to read on paper because I believe that it would be a good get away from the digital screen that gave me eyestrain and I didn't get as much distracted as I was whenever I spent time reading on my phone.

✓ Like many Gen Zers, I still prefer to read on paper because I believe it is a good getaway from digital screens that give me eyestrain, and I don't get as distracted when I read on my phone.

'As much as the Gen. Z myself' is incorrect; use 'Like many Gen Zers' or 'As a member of Gen Z'. 'It would be a good get away' should be 'it is a good getaway' (article and noun form). 'Digital screen' should be plural 'digital screens' or 'the digital screen' depending on meaning. Tense consistency: use present 'give' and 'don't get' rather than past 'gave' and 'didn't get' because describing general effects. Also 'as I was whenever I spent time' is awkward; use 'when I read on my phone.' Suggestion: use correct pronoun phrases, consistent present tense for habitual effects, and concise expressions.

× Most of the time I try to read everything carefully to ensure that I could actually gain any life lesson from what I am reading.

✓ Most of the time I try to read everything carefully to ensure that I can actually gain some life lessons from what I am reading.

Using 'could' suggests past or conditional; because this is a habitual present action, use 'can'. 'Any life lesson' is unnatural here; plural 'some life lessons' fits better. Maintain present progressive 'am reading' for ongoing reading. Suggestion: match modal verb to present habitual meaning and use appropriate quantifier.

× I would label myself as an over analyzer.

✓ I would label myself an overanalyzer.

Compound noun 'overanalyzer' is written as one word; 'label myself as' is acceptable but 'label myself an overanalyzer' is more idiomatic. Suggestion: use standard compound noun form and prefer concise phrasing.

× I would analyze the text lines by lines to paragraphs by paragraphs to seek umm, lessons and answers about the story.

✓ I would analyze the text line by line and paragraph by paragraph to look for lessons and answers in the story.

Use singular 'line by line' and 'paragraph by paragraph' as standard expressions. 'To seek umm, lessons and answers about the story' is awkward; use 'to look for lessons and answers in the story.' Suggestion: use fixed prepositional phrases 'line by line' and 'paragraph by paragraph' and 'look for ... in'.