Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and gives a clear reason and an example, which is good. To improve, remove repetition, make one strong topic sentence, and add a linking word before the example. Also vary vocabulary (use words like "de-stress" or "unwind") and keep it within 2–4 sentences for fluency and naturalness.

예시: I enjoy reading because it helps me unwind after a long day. For example, I often read short stories or light novels in the evening to take my mind off daily worries and relax before bed.

제안: This answer is well-structured with a clear preference, reasons, and a relevant example. To improve further, avoid starting sentences with "Or", use linking words (therefore, furthermore), and tighten phrasing to sound more natural. Use a slightly wider vocabulary (e.g., "focus" instead of "concentrate") and keep sentences concise.

예시: I prefer reading on paper because I spend much of the day on screens, so printed books give my eyes a rest and help me focus. For example, I can read a whole chapter without checking notifications, which therefore reduces eye strain and prevents sleep disruption.

제안: Good direct response with two clear situations and brief reasons. Improve by using present-tense consistency (e.g., "helps" not "helped"), adding a linking word between the two situations (for example, "also" is fine but use "in contrast" for the 'not' part if needed), and give a quick example of when casual reading is acceptable. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I need to read very carefully during exams because I must understand questions exactly and avoid mistakes. I also read carefully when signing contracts or following technical instructions, since paying close attention helps me retain important information; by contrast, I skim emails or news articles when I just want a quick update.

× I personally enjoy reading because it helps me relieve my stress and relieve my mood after a long day.

✓ I personally enjoy reading because it helps me relieve my stress and improve my mood after a long day.

The phrase 'relieve my mood' is incorrect; 'relieve' is used with negative states like stress or pain. Use 'improve' or 'lift' for mood. Also avoid repeating 'relieve'; combine ideas for clarity.

× Also relieve my pressure release my stress.

✓ It also relieves my pressure and releases my stress.

The original is a fragment with missing subject and has redundant verbs stuck together. Add subject 'It' (referring to reading) and use correct verb forms: 'relieves' (third person singular) and 'releases'. Remove redundancy by keeping both related but distinct verbs.

× For example, I like to read short stories or novels in the evening to skip daily worries and relax before bed.

✓ For example, I like to read short stories or novels in the evening to escape daily worries and relax before bed.

The verb 'skip' is not correctly used with 'daily worries'; 'escape' is a more natural collocation. This is not a number error but improves lexical choice; kept plural nouns appropriate. (No singular/plural change needed.)

× I prefer everything on paper because I already spend a lot of time looking at screens, so printed books give my eyes a break.

✓ I prefer reading on paper because I already spend a lot of time looking at screens, so printed books give my eyes a break.

Use 'reading on paper' rather than 'everything on paper' to be precise. 'Everything on paper' is awkward. This fixes sentence meaning and maintains conjunction usage.

× Or reading on paper also helps me concentrate better.

✓ Reading on paper also helps me concentrate better.

Starting the sentence with 'Or' is informal and unnecessary here. Remove it to make a full, grammatically complete sentence.

× For example, I can read a whole chapter without checking notifications, which avoids the eye strain and then sleep disruption that device can cause.

✓ For example, I can read a whole chapter without checking notifications, which avoids the eye strain and sleep disruption that devices can cause.

Subject 'device' should be plural 'devices' to agree with general reference; also remove 'then' which is awkward. Use 'sleep disruption' without 'then'.

× I read very carefully during exams because I need to understand questions exactly and avoid mistakes.

✓ I read very carefully during exams because I need to understand questions exactly and avoid mistakes.

Sentence is correct. 'Read' here is present habitual for exam situations; no change needed. Included for completeness.

× I also read carefully when signing contracts or following technical instructions since paying attention helped me concentrate and retain important information for the future.

✓ I also read carefully when signing contracts or following technical instructions since paying attention helps me concentrate and retain important information for the future.

The clause shifts tense: 'signing' and 'following' are general/habitual, so the result clause should use present 'helps' not past 'helped'. Use present tense to match habitual meaning.

× (empty answer)

✓ I prefer detailed reading when I need to understand complex ideas or follow instructions, and scanning when I am looking for specific information.

The original response was empty. Provide a complete answer matching the question contrast: detailed reading for comprehension and scanning for finding specific info. Use appropriate verb forms and parallel structure.