Reading— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases (e.g. “ancient cinema like books”, “what will can be happen”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy reading. I especially like history books and biographies because they expand my knowledge and help me understand how past events influence the present. For example, reading about World War II taught me about political causes and social consequences.

제안: Give a clear preference first, then provide two specific reasons linked with connectors. Fix grammar (use “on paper” not “in despite of screen”) and avoid vague or unfinished ideas (e.g. “coaches and”).

예시: I prefer reading on paper, especially for long texts, because it feels more comfortable and easier to hold. In addition, reading on paper reduces eye strain, whereas screens often make my eyes tired after extended use.

제안: Provide a clear contrast using linking words (e.g. “when… whereas…”). Keep sentences complete and specific: say what kinds of materials need careful reading and what can be skimmed, and give brief reasons.

예시: I read carefully when I study a topic for an exam or when the material is technical, because I need to understand details and remember facts. By contrast, I skim casual articles or social media posts when I just want a quick overview.

제안: Answer directly and use linking words to explain conditions. Avoid vague phrasing about emotions and correct grammar. Provide one concrete example when you choose detailed reading and one when you scan.

예시: It depends on the purpose. For studying or learning new concepts, I prefer detailed reading so I can understand every point. However, when I am short on time or just browsing news, I scan the text to pick out the main ideas.

× Definitely yes I do.

✓ Definitely, yes, I do.

Missing commas reduce clarity; add commas to separate interjection 'Definitely' from the response. This is punctuation rather than grammar change but improves readability and emphasis.

× I am fond of reading various kinds of books such as the historical books, ancient cinema like books as it helps to expand the horizon of my knowledge and also gives me the information about the history and what will can be happen in the future it gives me.

✓ I am fond of reading various kinds of books, such as history books and books about early cinema, because they help expand my knowledge and give me information about the past and possible future events.

Incorrect prepositions and awkward phrases ('the historical books', 'ancient cinema like books', 'what will can be happen') and wrong verb forms. Use 'such as' with plural nouns, 'because' to show reason, 'help' with base verb, and correct phrasing 'the past and possible future events.' Suggestions: simplify noun phrases, use plural nouns without 'the' when speaking generally, and use correct verb forms.

× Usually depends on the situation.

✓ It usually depends on the situation.

Missing subject 'It' and incorrect word order. Use 'It usually depends on the situation' to form a complete sentence.

× Whenever I like to read, I prefer to read on the paper in despite of screen as a paper is more comfortable and that can be easily managed in the hands.

✓ When I want to read, I prefer paper to a screen because paper is more comfortable and easier to hold.

Wrong preposition 'on the paper' and incorrect phrase 'in despite of screen'. Use 'prefer A to B', 'paper' without article for general preference, and 'easier to hold' for clarity.

× But the screen can be more harmful and detrimental as it can cause eyes, coaches and.

✓ But screens can be more harmful because they can cause eye strain and headaches.

Incorrect noun forms ('eyes, coaches') and article use. Use plural 'screens' for general statement, 'eye strain' and 'headaches' are appropriate health effects. Keep sentence concise and accurate.

× Well, I like to read with more concentration when I am fully interested to read and I have thought earlier to read about any special and particular subject and I read that with full concentration and try to understand the every word, but when I am feeling.

✓ I concentrate more when I am genuinely interested in a subject or when I planned to study a particular topic; then I read carefully and try to understand every word, but when I feel tired or distracted I do not concentrate.

Run-on sentence with incomplete ending ('but when I am feeling.') and awkward phrasing ('thought earlier to read', 'special and particular'). Use clear clauses, proper connectors ('when', 'then'), and complete the contrast by specifying feelings like 'tired or distracted'.

× Generally depend on the situation of my emotions and whenever I try to read with concentration, I prefer to read in very detail and try to understand the every word's meaning.

✓ Generally, it depends on my mood; when I read with concentration, I prefer to read in detail and try to understand the meaning of every word.

Missing subject 'it' and awkward phrase 'read in very detail' and wrong possessive 'every word's meaning.' Use 'read in detail' and 'the meaning of every word.' Also add punctuation to separate clauses.

× But whenever I am I feel suffocated. Then I try to just scanning and do not effort, do not give efforts to.

✓ But when I feel overwhelmed or suffocated, I just scan the text and do not make much effort.

Extra word 'am' and incorrect verb forms ('try to just scanning', 'do not effort'). Use 'scan' as base verb after 'just', and 'do not make much effort' to express lack of effort. Clarify emotion 'overwhelmed' for naturalness.