Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сначала прямо назовите свои увлечения, затем кратко объясните, почему они вам нравятся. Уберите повторы и не относящуюся к вопросу фразу “I'm single”. Используйте естественные формы: “play the piano”, “recorded a song” или “I’ve recorded a song”.

예시: Yes, I have a few hobbies, especially playing the piano and video games. I’ve also recorded a song, which was a fun way to be creative. These hobbies help me relax in my free time.

제안: Ответьте в прошедшем времени и назовите хобби чётко. Можно сказать “I went to a dance school” и “I danced for about seven or eight years”, если вы имеете в виду именно этот срок. Добавьте одну конкретную деталь или причину, почему вам нравились занятия.

예시: Yes, I went to a dance school when I was a child. I danced for about seven or eight years and really enjoyed learning different routines. It was a great way to stay active and spend time with other children.

제안: Первая часть ответа непонятна и не отвечает на вопрос. Скажите прямо, есть ли у вас хобби, которое сохранилось с детства. Затем объясните ответ: например, вы предпочитаете пробовать новые занятия, поэтому ваши увлечения меняются.

예시: Not really. I’ve always enjoyed trying new things, so my hobbies tend to change over time. I might focus on music for a while and then take up a different activity.

제안: Ответ дан прямо, но пояснение “because we are different” слишком общее. Добавьте конкретный пример: чем увлекаетесь вы и чем занимаются родственники. Не забудьте артикль в выражении “the same hobbies”.

예시: No, we don’t have exactly the same hobbies. I enjoy playing video games and making music, whereas some of my family members prefer watching films or doing things outdoors. We still enjoy spending time together.

× I I have a a hobbies.

✓ I have hobbies.

Hobbies is plural, so it cannot be preceded by the singular article a. Remove the repeated words and use hobbies without an article.

× I can play piano.

✓ I can play the piano.

When referring to playing a musical instrument, English normally uses the definite article the before the instrument. Say play the piano.

× I think this is a dance.

✓ I think it was dancing.

The question asks about a childhood hobby, so the past tense is more appropriate. Use was rather than is when describing a past activity.

× I remember in my childhood.

✓ I remember dancing during my childhood.

In this context, remember needs a clear object or complement. Add the activity being remembered, such as dancing, to make the sentence complete.

× I going by dance school.

✓ I went to dance school.

The sentence describes a past childhood activity, so use the past-tense verb went. Going cannot be used here without an auxiliary verb.

× I going by dance school.

✓ I went to dance school.

Use to, not by, to describe attending or traveling to a school. The usual phrase is go to dance school.

× I dance approximately 708 years.

✓ I danced for approximately seven or eight years.

The answer refers to a childhood activity that happened in the past, so use danced rather than dance. The duration appears to mean seven or eight years.

× I dance approximately 708 years.

✓ I danced for approximately seven or eight years.

Use for before a length of time to show how long an activity continued: for seven or eight years.

× I don't have same hobbies as my family because we are different.

✓ I don't have the same hobbies as my family because we are different.

Use the before same in this expression. The standard phrase is the same hobbies.