Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly by naming your hobbies clearly. Correct the grammar and word choices: say “I enjoy swimming, playing tennis, and watching movies,” rather than “I have several who bathe with.” Use a clear linking word such as “For example” before giving a specific detail, and explain when or with whom you do these activities. Avoid unclear expressions such as “my shifting” and “what willing to make more.”

예시: Yes, I have several hobbies, including swimming, playing tennis, and watching movies with my siblings. I usually go swimming at a park with my parents at the weekend. I enjoy these activities because they help me relax and spend quality time with my family.

제안: Begin with a direct answer, such as “Yes, I did.” Use the past tense consistently because the question asks about childhood: “I usually went swimming,” not “I usually go swimming.” Improve the sentence structure by saying that swimming was enjoyable, relaxing, and healthy; also use the natural phrase “in my free time” instead of “during my free.”

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I usually went swimming with my parents. I enjoyed it because it was fun and relaxing, and it also helped me stay healthy. I often went swimming in my free time during the weekends.

제안: State the hobby clearly and use the present perfect to show that it started in childhood and continues now: “I have played tennis since I was a child.” Avoid combining several ideas in one long, unclear sentence. Use “baking,” not “backing,” and explain specifically when you play tennis or bake and why these hobbies are enjoyable. The phrase “after a busy week” is more natural than “up to a busy week that's dreadful from.”

예시: Yes, I have played tennis since I was a child. I also enjoy baking with my sister at the weekend. These hobbies help me relax after a busy week, and I especially enjoy them because they give me an opportunity to spend time with my family.

제안: Give a clear overall answer first: your family members have different hobbies. Correct subject–verb agreement and vocabulary, for example, “It depends” and “my parents’ hobby is watching TV.” Organize the comparison with linking words such as “while” and “whereas,” and avoid repeating “it depends.” Make the final conclusion concise and natural.

예시: No, we do not have exactly the same hobbies. My parents enjoy watching TV at home, while my sister and I like swimming. My brother prefers playing football, so our interests are quite different, although we sometimes do activities together.

× Yes I do, I have several who bathe with swimming, playing tennis and watch movies with my siblings for example.

✓ Yes, I do. I have several hobbies, such as swimming, playing tennis, and watching movies with my siblings.

The original sentence has an incorrect structure: several must be followed by a plural noun, not who. Use such as to introduce examples, and keep the activities parallel by using swimming, playing, and watching.

× Yes I do, I have several who bathe with swimming, playing tennis and watch movies with my siblings for example.

✓ Yes, I do. I have several hobbies, such as swimming, playing tennis, and watching movies with my siblings.

The activities in the list should have parallel grammatical forms. Swimming, playing, and watching are all gerunds, so watch must be changed to watching.

× During the weekend I often go to swimming at park with my shifting and parent.

✓ During the weekend, I often go swimming at the park with my siblings and parents.

After go, use go swimming, not go to swimming. The preposition at is followed by the park, and the phrase at the park needs the definite article the.

× During the weekend I often go to swimming at park with my shifting and parent.

✓ During the weekend, I often go swimming at the park with my siblings and parents.

Park is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use the park when referring to a particular or familiar park.

× During the weekend I often go to swimming at park with my shifting and parent.

✓ During the weekend, I often go swimming at the park with my siblings and parents.

The sentence refers to more than one family member, so use the plural forms siblings and parents instead of singular forms.

× I find joy with them and what willing to make more.

✓ I enjoy spending time with them and would like to do more activities together.

The original sentence contains an incomplete clause after and. Use the complete verb phrase would like to express a desire for more activities.

× They finally when I was a child, I usually go to swimming with my parent.

✓ Finally, when I was a child, I usually went swimming with my parents.

The phrase when I was a child refers to the past, so the past-tense form went is required instead of go.

× They finally when I was a child, I usually go to swimming with my parent.

✓ Finally, when I was a child, I usually went swimming with my parents.

The natural expression is go swimming or went swimming, without to before swimming.

× They finally when I was a child, I usually go to swimming with my parent.

✓ Finally, when I was a child, I usually went swimming with my parents.

If the speaker went swimming with both parents, the plural form parents is needed.

× I find swimming is very joyful and help me relax, refreshing and also stay healthy and it is a fun activity for me to do during my free.

✓ I find swimming very enjoyable because it helps me relax, refreshes me, and keeps me healthy. It is also a fun activity to do during my free time.

The subject it is third-person singular, so the verbs must be helps, refreshes, and keeps. The original sentence also needs complete and parallel verb phrases.

× I find swimming is very joyful and help me relax, refreshing and also stay healthy and it is a fun activity for me to do during my free.

✓ I find swimming very enjoyable because it helps me relax, refreshes me, and keeps me healthy. It is also a fun activity to do during my free time.

The original sentence combines too many clauses without a clear structure. Dividing it into two sentences and using because makes the relationships between the ideas clear.

× I have a hobby that I have first time my childhood is that I love playing tennis and backing sometime with my sister during the weekend.

✓ The hobby I have had since childhood is playing tennis and sometimes baking with my sister on weekends.

The original sentence uses an incorrect structure and does not clearly express the duration. Use the hobby I have had since childhood to describe a hobby that started in the past and continues now.

× I have a hobby that I have first time my childhood is that I love playing tennis and backing sometime with my sister during the weekend.

✓ The hobby I have had since childhood is playing tennis and sometimes baking with my sister on weekends.

After is, use parallel -ing forms: playing and baking. This keeps the two hobbies grammatically consistent.

× I have a hobby that I have first time my childhood is that I love playing tennis and backing sometime with my sister during the weekend.

✓ The hobby I have had since childhood is playing tennis and sometimes baking with my sister on weekends.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and incorrectly connected clauses. The revised sentence uses a clear subject, verb, and complement.

× Because I find joy and help me relax and it is a good activity to do up to a busy week that's dreadful from.

✓ I enjoy these activities because they help me relax, and they are a good way to unwind after a busy week.

The plural subject they requires help, not helps. The sentence also needs a complete main clause and a clearer expression of time after a busy week.

× Because I find joy and help me relax and it is a good activity to do up to a busy week that's dreadful from.

✓ I enjoy these activities because they help me relax, and they are a good way to unwind after a busy week.

Use after a busy week, not up to a busy week, when referring to the time following a busy period.

× I would say it depend on the person because my parent is hoping is watching TV on at home and me and my sister or my brother love swimming and my brother love playing football.

✓ I would say it depends on the person because my parents' hobby is watching TV at home, while my sister, my brother, and I love swimming, and my brother loves playing football.

The singular subject it requires depends, and the singular subject my brother requires loves. The sentence also needs clearer clause structure.

× I would say it depend on the person because my parent is hoping is watching TV on at home and me and my sister or my brother love swimming and my brother love playing football.

✓ I would say it depends on the person because my parents' hobby is watching TV at home, while my sister, my brother, and I love swimming, and my brother loves playing football.

Watching is the correct gerund after is when describing a hobby. The original form hoping is not appropriate in this structure.

× I would say it depend on the person because my parent is hoping is watching TV on at home and me and my sister or my brother love swimming and my brother love playing football.

✓ I would say it depends on the person because my parents' hobby is watching TV at home, while my sister, my brother, and I love swimming, and my brother loves playing football.

When the pronoun is part of the subject, use I rather than me. The natural order is my sister, my brother, and I.

× So I would say it depend on the person it not it very similar but not the same or.

✓ So, I would say it depends on the person. Our hobbies are not very similar, but they are not completely different either.

The singular subject it takes depends, not depend. In the second sentence, the plural subject hobbies requires are.

× So I would say it depend on the person it not it very similar but not the same or.

✓ So, I would say it depends on the person. Our hobbies are not very similar, but they are not completely different either.

The original sentence joins several incomplete clauses without suitable verbs or conjunctions. Separating the ideas into two complete sentences makes the meaning clear.