Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Используйте более естественную структуру, исправьте грамматические ошибки и избегайте лишних повторов. Начните с короткого тематического предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных детали (например, что вы обычно рисуете, как часто) и свяжите идеи связками. Обратите внимание на времена (I started when I was nine) и на пропущенные слова (when I have nothing to do).

예시: I enjoy drawing. It helps me relax and makes me happy. I started when I was nine and now I usually draw in my free time, especially when I have nothing to do. I often sketch people and landscapes, and sometimes I try digital illustrations.

제안: Упростите ответы и исправьте грамматику: используйте правильные формы глаголов и времена (I liked, I played). Избегайте пауз и повтора слов. Начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте конкретику (с кем, как часто, почему нравилось).

예시: Yes, I did. I used to play basketball a lot as a child. It was my favourite activity and I often played it with my friends after school because it was fun and helped me stay active.

제안: Сформулируйте предложение чётко: используйте простое прошедшее для начала занятия (I started drawing when I was nine) и настоящие формы для текущего состояния (I still enjoy it). Избегайте бессвязных фраз и уточняйте, что именно вы делаете в рамках хобби.

예시: Yes, I do. I started drawing when I was nine and it's still my hobby today. Over the years I've practised sketching and watercolour, and I often draw portraits and landscapes in my spare time.

제안: Исправьте порядок слов и артикли, назовите родственника корректно (my older sister) и уточните детали: как часто вы занимаетесь вместе, чем занимаетесь. Используйте связки (for example, sometimes, usually) для логики.

예시: Yes, my older sister, Arjan, also likes drawing. Sometimes we draw together at the weekend, sharing ideas and giving each other feedback on our sketches.

× Definitely my hobby is drawing.

✓ My hobby is drawing.

Remove 'Definitely' or move it: sentence was awkwardly phrased. Use 'My hobby is drawing.' to be natural and grammatical. Suggestion: start with 'My hobby is drawing' and if you want emphasis say 'Definitely, my hobby is drawing.' Note: explanation required in English per instructions.

× I started drawing signs I was nine years old and I usually draw in my free time, especially when I nothing to do.

✓ I started drawing when I was nine years old and I usually draw in my free time, especially when I have nothing to do.

Missing conjunction 'when' before 'I was nine' and missing auxiliary verb 'have' for 'nothing to do'. Also 'signs' is likely a mischoice; corrected to 'when'. Use 'have nothing to do' to express lack of activities. Ensure consistent tense: 'started' (past) and 'draw' (habitual present) are correct.

× Definitely, yeah. When I, when a child, uh, I like play basketball and it was my favorite activity when I were a child and I usually play basketball with my friends and so yeah.

✓ Definitely. When I was a child, I liked to play basketball; it was my favorite activity, and I usually played basketball with my friends.

Pronoun and verb agreement errors: use 'was' with 'I' in past ('I was a child'), past tense verbs 'liked' and 'played' for past habits. Use infinitive 'to play' after 'liked' or gerund 'playing'. Replace 'were' with 'was'. Also improve punctuation and remove filler words.

× Yeah, I have a hobby drawing, which I had since childhood because drawing I started drawing signs I was nine years old is childhood years. So yeah.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby of drawing, which I have had since childhood because I started drawing when I was nine years old.

Multiple structure issues: use 'a hobby of drawing' or 'the hobby of drawing'; use present perfect 'have had' to indicate a hobby continuing from the past; remove repeated 'drawing' and incorrect phrase 'signs'. Include 'when I was nine years old' to state starting age.

× Yeah, my first sister name called Arjan, uh, like drawing to and sometimes we are drawing together, so yeah.

✓ Yes, my older sister's name is Arjan; she also likes drawing, and sometimes we draw together.

Pronoun and possessive errors: use 'older sister's' for possession and 'name is Arjan' for naming. Use 'she also likes drawing' instead of 'like drawing to'. Replace continuous 'we are drawing together' with simple present 'we draw together' for habitual action. Fix word order and unnecessary fillers.