Hobby— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 発音や語法の誤りを直し、簡潔で自然な表現にまとめること。具体的には “leading books” は誤りで “reading books” に直し、冗長な繰り返し（"non fictional stories stories"）を避け、理由や具体例を一文か二文で明確に述べる。接続詞（for example, because, so）を適切に使い、最大5文に収める練習をすること。

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy reading books, especially short non-fiction stories. For example, I often read essays and articles that teach practical tips, which helps me learn a lot of useful information.

제안: 時制と文の一貫性を改善し、文を短く区切って明確に伝えること。冗長な表現（"another language" を繰り返す）を避け、理由を完結に述べる。例えば過去の習慣は過去形で始め、現在の継続は現在完了や現在形でつなぐ。接続詞（because, so, and）を使い理由を明確にする練習をする。

예시: Yes, I did. I started learning English when I was seven, and I enjoyed studying languages as a child. I still study other languages now, such as Chinese, because they provide good career opportunities.

제안: 不明な語（"Aza"）を修正し、表現を明確にまとめること。意図は“languages”だと推測されるので正しい単語を使い、理由を簡潔に述べる。文を完結させ、接続詞で論理的に繋ぐ。個人的な具体例（将来の職業や目標）を一つ加えると説得力が増す。

예시: Yes, I do. I have loved learning languages like English and Chinese since childhood because they open up more career and travel opportunities for me. For example, knowing Chinese could help me work with international companies.

제안: 語彙の正確さと語順を改善すること。例えば “primary members” は不自然で “family members” だけで十分。"a cello or fluid" は誤りで、楽器名（cello, flute）を正しく言う。理由や対比を一文で添え、最大5文に収める。

예시: No, I don't. My family members enjoy playing instruments such as the piano, cello, and flute, but I don't play any instrument. However, I support them and sometimes listen to their practice sessions.

× Yes, I have. I like leading books.

✓ Yes, I do. I like reading books.

The student used 'have' incorrectly as a short answer; the correct short answer for possession of hobbies is 'I do.' Also 'leading' is the wrong verb form; the correct verb is 'reading' (verb + -ing) to talk about the hobby. Improve by using correct short answers and the gerund form for activities: 'I do. I like reading books.' Japanese: スモールトークでの短縮応答として 'I do' が適切であり、'leading' は動詞の誤用で 'reading' の誤りです。

× For example I like to leading the non fictional stories stories based on the little story.

✓ For example, I like reading non-fiction stories based on short real-life events.

The phrase 'to leading' mixes infinitive 'to' with incorrect present participle 'leading.' Use either 'to read' or the gerund 'reading'; 'reading' fits better here. Also 'non fictional' should be 'non-fiction' and 'little story' is unclear; 'short real-life events' or 'short stories' is more natural. Improve by choosing the correct verb form and clearer vocabulary. Japanese: 'to' と '-ing' の混在は誤りで、'reading' または 'to read' を使います。'non-fiction' のハイフンや 'short stories' など語彙の選択を改善してください。

× So I could gain a lot gain a wide range of knowledge and information from them.

✓ So I can gain a wide range of knowledge and information from them.

The sentence repeats 'gain' and mixes modal/time: 'could' suggests conditional or past ability, but context is general present habit, so 'can' is appropriate. Remove the duplicate 'gain a lot gain'. Improve by using a single modal and avoiding repetition: 'So I can gain a wide range of knowledge from them.' Japanese: 'could' は条件や過去の能力を示すため、現在の習慣には 'can' が適切です。また 'gain' の重複を削除してください。

× Yes, I had. I liked learning another language such as English.

✓ Yes, I did. I liked learning another language such as English.

Short answer for past simple should be 'I did' rather than 'I had.' 'I had' is used for possession. The rest 'I liked learning another language' is acceptable. Improve by using correct short answers for past questions. Japanese: 過去形の短い肯定応答は 'I did' が自然で、'I had' は所有を表すので不適切です。

× I started learning English when I was seven years old, then I'm still continue to study another language not only English but also another language like Chinese because it's a very good opportunity to

✓ I started learning English when I was seven years old, and I continue to study other languages, not only English but also Chinese, because it's a very good opportunity.

Problems: 'then I'm still continue' incorrectly combines present continuous with 'continue'. Use simple present 'I continue' or 'I am still studying'. 'another language' should be plural 'other languages' or specify 'another language such as Chinese.' Also sentence was incomplete; finish the thought. Improve by using consistent tense and correct verb forms: 'I continue to study other languages.' Japanese: 'I'm still continue' は文法的に誤りで 'I continue' または 'I am still studying' を使います。'another language' は 'other languages' とするか具体例を一つにしてください。

× Yeah, I still like learning Aza language such as English or Chinese because learning Aza language could give me a better choice and broaden future for me.

✓ Yes, I still like learning languages such as English and Chinese because learning languages can give me better options and broaden my future opportunities.

Use 'languages' plural instead of 'Aza language' (unclear term). 'could' suggests possibility but 'can' is more natural for general statements. 'a better choice' should be 'better options' and 'broaden future for me' should be 'broaden my future opportunities.' Improve by using correct nouns (languages), appropriate modal 'can', and natural collocations. Japanese: 'Aza language' は不明瞭で複数形 'languages' を使い、'could' は一般的事実には 'can'、'better options' や 'broaden my future opportunities' のような自然な表現に直してください。

× Now unfortunately I do not have same hobbies as my primary members.

✓ Unfortunately, I do not have the same hobbies as my family members.

Problems: 'Now unfortunately' word order — start with 'Unfortunately'. 'primary members' is incorrect; likely 'family members'. Also missing the definite article 'the same hobbies'. Improve by using correct noun ('family members') and article: 'the same hobbies.' Japanese: 'primary members' は誤用で 'family members' を使い、'the same hobbies' のように定冠詞を入れる必要があります。

× My family members tend to play instruments like piano and a cello or fluid, but I do not play any instrument.

✓ My family members tend to play instruments like the piano and the cello or the flute, but I do not play any instrument.

Use definite article with musical instruments: 'the piano', 'the cello', 'the flute'. 'Fluid' is a mistake for 'flute.' Also parallel structure: list instruments clearly. Improve by correcting vocabulary and adding articles for instruments. Japanese: 楽器を言うときは通常 'the piano' のように定冠詞を使います。'fluid' は 'flute' の誤りです。並列構造を整えてください。